Environment A 2 Z series

[intriguess]

about half are written and I'm getting ready to tackle the other half. Wondered what everyone thought about them. Have gotten some good feedback about them already. These are all in Science Fiction category and are variations on a theme.

One thing I wonder is the title is short version and I don't think I make references to the other stories.

Posting links to the ones I've written and titles for those I haven't

A:Antarctica http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=55494

B:Beach

C:Cave

Dark

E:England http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=55544

F:Future http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=55545

G:Glade

H:Hostile

I:Ireland

J:Jungle http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63713

K:Knossos http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63716

L:Lunar http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=65284

M:Mountain http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63718

N:Nature http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63719

O:Oasis

Plain http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63721

Q:Quiet

R:Ruins

S:Solitude

T:Temple http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63722

U: Underground http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63722

V:Vineyard

W:Wilderness

X:Xanadu

Y:Yellow Sea

Z:Zero Gravity

So far the plan is for 13 of them to be male test subjects and 13 female test subjects.

What do you think of those I've written and suggestions for improvement.

 

[intriguess]

This is an update to previous post and pull this thread back to the top, have submitted D: Dark since the first post and recently sent X: Xanadu which is pending and I've changed the titles for some of them as I've altered my ideas.

Posting links to the ones I've written and titles for those I haven't

A: Antarctica http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=55494

B: Beach

C: Cave

D: Dark http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=68772

E: England http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=55544

F: Future http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=55545

G: Glade

H: Hostile

I: Ireland

J: Jungle http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63713

K: Knossos http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63716

L: Lunar http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=65284

M: Mountain http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63718

N: Nature http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63719

O: Oasis

P: Plain http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63721

Q: Quiet

R: Ruins

S: Sensual

T: Temple http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63722

U: Underground http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=63722

V: Vineyard

W: Wilderness

X: Xanadu (pending approval)

Y: Yesteryear

Z: Zen Garden

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Well, Intriguess, I hope my comments won't ruin our SRPG relationship.

I read "Antarctica". It never seemed to switch from "background" mode--telling us what happened--to present mode--showing us what was happening now. It's not a matter of verb tense, It's a matter of bringing the readers' attention into the present, into making what's happening seem like it's happening now.

The common thing to say is that you're telling us what's happening, but not showing us what's happening and it's the difference between reporting on an occurance and describing the occurance.

He licked her nipple. That's telling. That's reporting.

His wet tongue dragged lazily over her erect nipple as she looked on in disbelief. That's showing. That's describing.

For me--and I think most people--the erotic juice is in the detail and description. That's what puts the scene in our minds and ourselves into the scene.

Also, I'm sure you know this by now, but it's "abominable snowman". Not "abdominal snowman". (A snowman who lives on your stomach?) A spell-check error, I'd bet.

---dr.M.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

To be fair I went back and read "Underground" as well.

I really like the idea behind these stories, although if you're going to cut and paste the same beginning for every piece, it almost seems like you should just eliminate it or put in ditto marks.

This was a terribly hot idea, in my opinion at least: sex with a naga. I wish you would have gone into more detail about what the sex was like; it was over so fast.

This has the same ending as "Antarctica" too. That is a little annoying. Do they all have the same endings?

 

[intriguess]

the opening and ended are the same or similiar mainly because I wanted each story to be able to stand on it's own and not have to refer back to a previous one.

Thanks for the feedback

posting the link to the latest story

X: Xanadu http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=81276