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Hello. I am writing a several part story for which I would like some editorial feedback. The theme is a series of trysts between a single male and a married woman who has her husband’s permission to play. The first four parts are finished as drafts, anyway. I am using MS Word .docx. I have read some of the Lit writing guidelines, run the text through spell checker, and tried to get my conversation punctuation within the quotes, etc.
I have two previous stories published here under my username of txgent101.
Here are a few paragraphs from my current story.
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LUCY CHAPTER 1. How We Met.
I had met this couple Edward and Lucy via Adult Friend Finder. Actually, they (he) contacted me first. I am age 75 and they are in their 60’s. The idea was that the husband apparently could no longer satisfy his wife and that they courted couples or, occasionally, single males to have sex with her. I was intrigued, but a little skeptical. We exchanged AFF messages for a time, then graduated to the AFF Instant Messenger feature.
It was clear that he was being a ‘buffer’ between the wife and her potential lovers. Made that clear from the get-go. He spoke very highly of his wife, making it clear that they had a good marriage and whatever might transpire between me and Lucy was just sex. He described her as a lady in the living room and a whore in the bedroom. Ok. It appeared early on that he would not be a ‘participant’ in the sex, but would monitor from another room in their house for safety. Yes, it was to take place at their home.
He and I got into quite a bit of detail: how much kissing, oral, dirty talk, etc. There seemed some hesitation on his part that a single male would only be out for a one night stand; I assured him that I was interested in something more long term. Ok.
I made it clear that, because of my ED, I use a vacuum pump and cock ring to make and sustain an erection. And that because of prostate treatment, there was no semen. He (they) seemed ok with that.
Given his hesitation, I wrote out a little scenario for him to share with Lucy, as to how I would make love to her. Here is an excerpt from that scenario:
“When I am with Lucy, we will have some extended foreplay, kissing, touch, caressing. I want to learn how her body feels under my touch, and she will learn how my hands and lips feel on her. And I will feel how her hands feel on me, how her lips feel to kiss. During this time I will tell her how she feels to my hands, and she can do the same for me.
At a good moment, I will extend my kissing to her feet, working my way up to her thighs. I will skip up to her breasts and suckle them. I will then return to her thighs and use my lips and tongue to move all along her pussy, labia, inside, outside, and around her clit. I will draw her clit into my mouth, sucking on it as I did her nipples. At this point, I think she may have had one or more small orgasms. If she does I will tell her how good it felt to me as well.”
He said on I.M. that he had shared that with Lucy and she was a little more interested. So, I continued my scenario in a follow-up message:
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Please let me know if you would be interested to have a look at the complete first chapter of my story. I have my p.m. set up. Let me know what mechanism will be most convenient to transmit the story to you. Thanks.
John
I have two previous stories published here under my username of txgent101.
Here are a few paragraphs from my current story.
************
LUCY CHAPTER 1. How We Met.
I had met this couple Edward and Lucy via Adult Friend Finder. Actually, they (he) contacted me first. I am age 75 and they are in their 60’s. The idea was that the husband apparently could no longer satisfy his wife and that they courted couples or, occasionally, single males to have sex with her. I was intrigued, but a little skeptical. We exchanged AFF messages for a time, then graduated to the AFF Instant Messenger feature.
It was clear that he was being a ‘buffer’ between the wife and her potential lovers. Made that clear from the get-go. He spoke very highly of his wife, making it clear that they had a good marriage and whatever might transpire between me and Lucy was just sex. He described her as a lady in the living room and a whore in the bedroom. Ok. It appeared early on that he would not be a ‘participant’ in the sex, but would monitor from another room in their house for safety. Yes, it was to take place at their home.
He and I got into quite a bit of detail: how much kissing, oral, dirty talk, etc. There seemed some hesitation on his part that a single male would only be out for a one night stand; I assured him that I was interested in something more long term. Ok.
I made it clear that, because of my ED, I use a vacuum pump and cock ring to make and sustain an erection. And that because of prostate treatment, there was no semen. He (they) seemed ok with that.
Given his hesitation, I wrote out a little scenario for him to share with Lucy, as to how I would make love to her. Here is an excerpt from that scenario:
“When I am with Lucy, we will have some extended foreplay, kissing, touch, caressing. I want to learn how her body feels under my touch, and she will learn how my hands and lips feel on her. And I will feel how her hands feel on me, how her lips feel to kiss. During this time I will tell her how she feels to my hands, and she can do the same for me.
At a good moment, I will extend my kissing to her feet, working my way up to her thighs. I will skip up to her breasts and suckle them. I will then return to her thighs and use my lips and tongue to move all along her pussy, labia, inside, outside, and around her clit. I will draw her clit into my mouth, sucking on it as I did her nipples. At this point, I think she may have had one or more small orgasms. If she does I will tell her how good it felt to me as well.”
He said on I.M. that he had shared that with Lucy and she was a little more interested. So, I continued my scenario in a follow-up message:
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Please let me know if you would be interested to have a look at the complete first chapter of my story. I have my p.m. set up. Let me know what mechanism will be most convenient to transmit the story to you. Thanks.
John
