MagicaPractica
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with whipped cream, chocolate sauce and a cherry on top?
I did submit one last year that I wrote 10 years ago. The link is in my sig line if you want to get an idea of what I write but I think my writing has matured a lot. I am trying to throw a few curve balls these days as I become more knowledgeable, partially by reading the "How to" section.
So, I have three stories that I am working on and would really love to have somebody read and give me editorial feedback on form and content.
The Good Samaritan is about an older man whose wife is no longer interested in sex. While she is out with friends one day, his neighbor comes over, begging for help. His wife took an aphrodisiac the night before and is on a rampage. "I'm tapped out, my tongue is numb and I think my hand is permanently cramped. I need you to pinch hit for me." The young husband goes for a long walk and the older man goes over and finds the wife waiting for him. They move through several different items of interest; masturbation, blow job, anal play, straight sex and finally eating her out. Finally, she falls asleep.
Still Tender in the Deepest Parts is about a thirty something woman who fell in love with a married man six months before. It was a mental and emotional connection neither were willing to put his marriage in jeopardy for. She moved on from the temp job to a permanent position. Now, she has come home to find him waiting in her driveway. Apparently his wife was having an affair and left him nearly six months ago. The divorce just became final.
Six ways to Sunday is about a woman (Lily) in her late thirties whose husband (Jeffy) is a complete prude. He's even convinced her that wanting to have sex is abnormal. Then, his best friend (Kevin) catches her leaving a hotel in the afternoon and becomes convinced she was having an affair. He decides to use this information to blackmail her into having sex. She is shocked but also turned on and decides to play along instead of telling him the truth. This is a story in 7 parts, each day graduating to something new. Only the first two are written.
Hope someone out there would be willing to read them then decide if they can help me. Please PM me if you think maybe you could help. Or I can be reached at magicapractica@yahoo.com
Thanks!
I did submit one last year that I wrote 10 years ago. The link is in my sig line if you want to get an idea of what I write but I think my writing has matured a lot. I am trying to throw a few curve balls these days as I become more knowledgeable, partially by reading the "How to" section.
So, I have three stories that I am working on and would really love to have somebody read and give me editorial feedback on form and content.
The Good Samaritan is about an older man whose wife is no longer interested in sex. While she is out with friends one day, his neighbor comes over, begging for help. His wife took an aphrodisiac the night before and is on a rampage. "I'm tapped out, my tongue is numb and I think my hand is permanently cramped. I need you to pinch hit for me." The young husband goes for a long walk and the older man goes over and finds the wife waiting for him. They move through several different items of interest; masturbation, blow job, anal play, straight sex and finally eating her out. Finally, she falls asleep.
Still Tender in the Deepest Parts is about a thirty something woman who fell in love with a married man six months before. It was a mental and emotional connection neither were willing to put his marriage in jeopardy for. She moved on from the temp job to a permanent position. Now, she has come home to find him waiting in her driveway. Apparently his wife was having an affair and left him nearly six months ago. The divorce just became final.
Six ways to Sunday is about a woman (Lily) in her late thirties whose husband (Jeffy) is a complete prude. He's even convinced her that wanting to have sex is abnormal. Then, his best friend (Kevin) catches her leaving a hotel in the afternoon and becomes convinced she was having an affair. He decides to use this information to blackmail her into having sex. She is shocked but also turned on and decides to play along instead of telling him the truth. This is a story in 7 parts, each day graduating to something new. Only the first two are written.
Hope someone out there would be willing to read them then decide if they can help me. Please PM me if you think maybe you could help. Or I can be reached at magicapractica@yahoo.com
Thanks!
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