Editor needed for femdom story

[Vulpesvulpes]

I don't normally use an editor but I'm a little unsure of the punctuation on the dialog. Constructive criticism on story, structure, etc. is always appreciated.

Themes are: BDSM, femdom, enemas, e-stim, spanking, etc.

 

[Hellball]

I don't normally use an editor but I'm a little unsure of the punctuation on the dialog. Constructive criticism on story, structure, etc. is always appreciated.

Themes are: BDSM, femdom, enemas, e-stim, spanking, etc.

Color me interested. PM me.

 

[MsNotSleeping]

Try me if the first guy doesn't work out.