Edit my first attempt at erotica?

[apocly]

I was in the mood to write last night and wrote a short story about a drug dealer collecting an outstanding debt from his customer's girlfriend. 4500 words currently, though I may either continue on or write additional parts. Kinks include non-con and cuckolding. Honest feedback appreciated, not looking for anyone to toot my horn.

 

[yukonnights]

You've started your erotic story career with a couple of chili pepper themes — non-con and a cuckold. What category are you aiming at? Also, you probably already know, but in case you don't; 4500 words is just over one Lit screen-page. It's likely more of a scene than a developed story at that length.

You may have already found the editing help you're looking for — if not, a little more information might help find the right person to look it over. What does the non-con involve, etc.