silverwolf
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ooc for iceman
ooc: iceman i have a suggestion for a FOM (frame of mind)
First i think you may be trying to write as if it were something a friend of a friend of a friend told you.Make the charecter part of you. hmmmm. Think of your five sences Touch taste smell sight and sound.the ones that get used the most are sight touch and smell.
When you eat something you wouldnt say "he put meet in his mouth and thought it was good."
try something like "he put the thick juicy steak in his mouth, enjoying the sweet bliss his taste buds were going thru as he chewed." Think of it as your trying to interest your reader, make them want to read more, make them taste and feel exacxtly what your writing.After youve written what your going to post re read it, see if it makes sence to you and see if it flows.
if all else fail remember humans are ficle creatures. we rely on our feelings for everything.
ooc: iceman i have a suggestion for a FOM (frame of mind)
First i think you may be trying to write as if it were something a friend of a friend of a friend told you.Make the charecter part of you. hmmmm. Think of your five sences Touch taste smell sight and sound.the ones that get used the most are sight touch and smell.
When you eat something you wouldnt say "he put meet in his mouth and thought it was good."
try something like "he put the thick juicy steak in his mouth, enjoying the sweet bliss his taste buds were going thru as he chewed." Think of it as your trying to interest your reader, make them want to read more, make them taste and feel exacxtly what your writing.After youve written what your going to post re read it, see if it makes sence to you and see if it flows.
if all else fail remember humans are ficle creatures. we rely on our feelings for everything.