tomlitilia
Literotica Guru
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IMO, AH is at its best when I can use it to improve my writing. So for that purpose, consider the following sentence:
"And there she was, with her tits in all their glory on open display for the world to see."
I know this sentence works without the comma, and I think it's even grammatically incorrect with it (the second clause got no verb). But I want the sentence to be read with a slight pause after "was". I think an em dash would work as an alternative, but somehow it doesn't feel right. Suggestions?
"And there she was, with her tits in all their glory on open display for the world to see."
I know this sentence works without the comma, and I think it's even grammatically incorrect with it (the second clause got no verb). But I want the sentence to be read with a slight pause after "was". I think an em dash would work as an alternative, but somehow it doesn't feel right. Suggestions?
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