Criticism Wanted

[cward2]

Posted my first story recently.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=212235

Would like some criticism.

Thanks

 

[Penelope Street]

Hi cward,

Welcome and Congratulations on your first story being posted! I understand it's not intuitive, but this type of request would probably be best in the Story Feedback Forum. I expect the moderator will most likely more or remove it when he finds the time.

Take Care,
Penny

 

[drlust]

Hi:

Just to add to what Penny said, you'll want to read the sticky at the beginning of the forum that explains how to enter the story discussion circle. It's a good group and well worth joining, but we have a few expectations of you before you get critique of a story. They're all explained in the sticky.

Allan