geronimo_appleby
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Constructive feedback please
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rachlou
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I read it. Very entertaining in a flithy kinda way! 
I'm not sure why you posted it in LW though. Since the husband never made an appearence despite Karla's derogatory description of him, I would have posted it in group sex. Might have raised the vote score and avoided the inflammatory PC's. Unless Laurel put it in that category - in which case, you had no choice!
I'm not sure why you posted it in LW though. Since the husband never made an appearence despite Karla's derogatory description of him, I would have posted it in group sex. Might have raised the vote score and avoided the inflammatory PC's. Unless Laurel put it in that category - in which case, you had no choice!
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I thought it was ok. I think for me, the kind of repetitive dirty slut talk got a bit samey in the end, but that's a personal thing. I tend to get turned off by that kind of dialogue.
I agree it would have been better in group, but worth putting it in LW to get the public comments! Do readers of this category have any kind of grip on reality? Now go and get yourself sterilised before you pollute the species any more with your progeny! 
I agree it would have been better in group, but worth putting it in LW to get the public comments! Do readers of this category have any kind of grip on reality?
Now go and get yourself sterilised before you pollute the species any more with your progeny!
geronimo_appleby
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I read it. Very entertaining in a flithy kinda way!
I'm not sure why you posted it in LW though. Since the husband never made an appearence despite Karla's derogatory description of him, I would have posted it in group sex. Might have raised the vote score and avoided the inflammatory PC's. Unless Laurel put it in that category - in which case, you had no choice!
i submitted to Group Sex, but...
thanks for taking the time to check it out for me.
manyeyedhydra
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All good filthy fun.
And guaranteed to stir up the hornet's nest even though it sounds like you got moved there inadvertently
The cocky bastards always get the sex though
And guaranteed to stir up the hornet's nest even though it sounds like you got moved there inadvertently
The cocky bastards always get the sex though
tickledkitty
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Hey, there GA. Good to see you.
Overall, I liked it. I actually liked Karla with her "don't give a fuck" attitude. She's a straight foward, honest, flawed character. I liked her. I thought the story was fun. I also liked the dialogue. It seemed natural to me. I liked the Britishness of it.
However, I have to admit I started skimming partway through the sex part. At first it was hot, but I think I'd have liked to see her tease Craig a bit more. Especially since she had told him before that he'd have to try a bit harder. I suspect that me being a woman has something to do with it and that men might be a bit more entertained by this section.
I liked that she ended up pregnant, poetic justice and all that, but I'm not sure I'm buying the fact that she let it happen. This is a woman who openly admits to being a slut, right? She's older, experienced, etc. What did you mean by nuclear sperm? Are you implying she was on the pill or something and got pregnant anyway? Also, why would a woman like that go through with the pregnancy?
Overall, I liked it. I actually liked Karla with her "don't give a fuck" attitude. She's a straight foward, honest, flawed character. I liked her. I thought the story was fun. I also liked the dialogue. It seemed natural to me. I liked the Britishness of it.
However, I have to admit I started skimming partway through the sex part. At first it was hot, but I think I'd have liked to see her tease Craig a bit more. Especially since she had told him before that he'd have to try a bit harder. I suspect that me being a woman has something to do with it and that men might be a bit more entertained by this section.
I liked that she ended up pregnant, poetic justice and all that, but I'm not sure I'm buying the fact that she let it happen. This is a woman who openly admits to being a slut, right? She's older, experienced, etc. What did you mean by nuclear sperm? Are you implying she was on the pill or something and got pregnant anyway? Also, why would a woman like that go through with the pregnancy?
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Hey Geronimo,
I really enjoyed the wanton, slutty ways of Karla. She has this devil-may-care attitude that is exhibited quite well throughout the story. I do agree with tickledkitty that she seemed to give in to Craig rather quickly. Perhaps that section of the story could've been filled out a little more. I do like the fact that she is pregnant and it's causing her concern for her son but not her husband. In one sense that humanizes Karla well. I can't wait to see how and where this goes to.
As usual a job well done.
J.Q.
I really enjoyed the wanton, slutty ways of Karla. She has this devil-may-care attitude that is exhibited quite well throughout the story. I do agree with tickledkitty that she seemed to give in to Craig rather quickly. Perhaps that section of the story could've been filled out a little more. I do like the fact that she is pregnant and it's causing her concern for her son but not her husband. In one sense that humanizes Karla well. I can't wait to see how and where this goes to.
As usual a job well done.
J.Q.
