PaulGerard
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Hi there,
I'm far from being a regular around here, so ... apologies if this isn't the right arena for that
Anyway, "Anonymous" was kind enough to provide feedback (much appreciated, whoever you are, btw):
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About the submission: Connie's Weed Pt. 04
This feedback was sent by: Anonymous
Title:
Connie's weed - ending
Comments:
As much as I appreciate authors that tie up the loose ends I feel that you wrapped up everything too quickly. I hope you willo consider rewriting part IV to end with Connie joining the team. Part V could be her arrival and introduction to Valkyrie. The ending would then revolve around her education and joining Amanda as an equal and team mate.
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Well, you see, ... "anonymous", eh? So, no way to reply in person. So ... me@here, posting on the off-chance that Anon will stumble upon it (because, let's face it, little chance s(he)'s going to go back to a story already read to see if some kind of reply by the author pops up in the comment section).
Anyway ...
sorry if the ending felt a bit rushed or "tacked on for the sake of wrapping up". I consider Connie's main story "done" for now, since she is more of a side character in the world I'm trying to build. She might show up again, but for now I'm rather certain she won't be lead character any time soon.
Amanda's MiB style entrance in Pt.4 happens rather suddenly, mainly because her "origin story" isn't written yet (at least not in any presentable form), because I'm hacking away at the keyboard whenever inspiration strikes, and it tends to not strike in my little "alterna(e)te" reality's chronological continuity. That yet-to-complete story will explain more about the Valkyrie, about what Amanda's suit can do (or won't do if it doesn't feel up to it), how she got it etc. –*Connie's story just wasn't the place I wanted to lay out all those extra infos, so it's only mentioned in passing in that last part.
For background's sake, Amanda's nanobot suit's origin story (about her grandmother and a certain Bast-like shapeshifting alien robot) was the first one I ever did, years ago, and while it's online at another far more fetish-centric site, it's part three of a series, and No. 1 & 2 of /that/ story arc really are not what I consider on par with the writing I expect of myself any more. So, not here at Literotica yet until I find the time to give them a makeover and a little nip & tuck.
So ... until I find a generous sponsor to dedicate myself to writing full time (hah! right ...), my only advice is to grin and bear while a few puzzle pieces of my little universe are there to see (and rate and comment, hint hint). I really hope things will make more sense as I get around to drop more stories into the vast sea that is the internet, but it'll take time...
That's it for now, thanks for reading!
-Paul
I'm far from being a regular around here, so ... apologies if this isn't the right arena for that
Anyway, "Anonymous" was kind enough to provide feedback (much appreciated, whoever you are, btw):
################
About the submission: Connie's Weed Pt. 04
This feedback was sent by: Anonymous
Title:
Connie's weed - ending
Comments:
As much as I appreciate authors that tie up the loose ends I feel that you wrapped up everything too quickly. I hope you willo consider rewriting part IV to end with Connie joining the team. Part V could be her arrival and introduction to Valkyrie. The ending would then revolve around her education and joining Amanda as an equal and team mate.
################
Well, you see, ... "anonymous", eh? So, no way to reply in person. So ... me@here, posting on the off-chance that Anon will stumble upon it (because, let's face it, little chance s(he)'s going to go back to a story already read to see if some kind of reply by the author pops up in the comment section).
Anyway ...
sorry if the ending felt a bit rushed or "tacked on for the sake of wrapping up". I consider Connie's main story "done" for now, since she is more of a side character in the world I'm trying to build. She might show up again, but for now I'm rather certain she won't be lead character any time soon.
Amanda's MiB style entrance in Pt.4 happens rather suddenly, mainly because her "origin story" isn't written yet (at least not in any presentable form), because I'm hacking away at the keyboard whenever inspiration strikes, and it tends to not strike in my little "alterna(e)te" reality's chronological continuity. That yet-to-complete story will explain more about the Valkyrie, about what Amanda's suit can do (or won't do if it doesn't feel up to it), how she got it etc. –*Connie's story just wasn't the place I wanted to lay out all those extra infos, so it's only mentioned in passing in that last part.
For background's sake, Amanda's nanobot suit's origin story (about her grandmother and a certain Bast-like shapeshifting alien robot) was the first one I ever did, years ago, and while it's online at another far more fetish-centric site, it's part three of a series, and No. 1 & 2 of /that/ story arc really are not what I consider on par with the writing I expect of myself any more. So, not here at Literotica yet until I find the time to give them a makeover and a little nip & tuck.
So ... until I find a generous sponsor to dedicate myself to writing full time (hah! right ...), my only advice is to grin and bear while a few puzzle pieces of my little universe are there to see (and rate and comment, hint hint). I really hope things will make more sense as I get around to drop more stories into the vast sea that is the internet, but it'll take time...
That's it for now, thanks for reading!
-Paul
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