Your poem "Pushada" is currently #1 and another of your poems, "Scenes From A Nursing Home Part 1" is #3. Good for you! (The latter was just #2 a minute ago.)
"Pushada" is more a "guy thing" for sure, whereas "Scenes From A Nursing Home Part 1" is sooooo sensitive, and poignant. It really touched me.
Stand by......more parts are ready to be, or perhaps already are, posted in the series. I was very flattered when Paul C invited me to collaborate with him on one of them.
And Risia, because I'm post-menopausal and have back-to-back "senior moments" these days and may have neglected to say this...thanks so much for giving me all the wonderful feedback on my story-to-be-someday. I am so appreciative of the time it must have taken you to do that for me! You were justifiably brutal... just like I asked you to be. And LOL about the illogical part about the cum on the knee thing!! You're the best!
I hope I wasn't too brutal I was sincerely trying to be constructive. I hope the story turns out great for you. I'm not out to discourage anyone who's honestly working, you know?
All points were well taken. Truly! I never considered it anything but "constructive". And, let's face it, my opening sentence ranked right up there with, "It was a dark and stormy night..." Why,if they ever have another contest for the world's worst opening line of a story, that one has a good crack at winning first place! My 15 minutes of fame, at last! LOL
Right now, I've decided to just stick with poetry. I had no idea where the story was going anyway. Having no plan can't be a good idea.
I'll get back to it some day. And when I do, I'll have your suggestions which I printed out in my hot little hand for reference. Thanks again!
Damn....I love it when the two of you get going together...sure conjurs up some interesting thoughts........
Hmmmm
Roses are red........(hang on)
Violets are blue........(almost there now)
I wish that I were...........(getting closer)
Inside both of you.........(ok...so it wasn't that good)
I don't get it. I don't see a picture. hmmmmm
It must be on my end if everyone else is seeing it. I wonder if I accidentally shut something off or some such thing. Any ideas out there? I did notice that my HTML option says "off". Would that do it and how do I change it? Any ideas?
Is everyone seeing his picture?
I feel so deprived!