Confusing feedback

[TruthwithaTwist]

So, I just got this feedback on my Summer Lovin’ story:

”Great story! You like the "sound" of your voice. TOO much!!!”

Huh? I’m actually confused what this means!

 

[NotWise]

So, I just got this feedback on my Summer Lovin’ story:

”Great story! You like the "sound" of your voice. TOO much!!!”

Huh? I’m actually confused what this means!

They liked the story, but it sounds like they might think you're kinda wordy.

 

[PennameWombat]

Not being the commenter, anything I say can only be taken for consideration. If I received that from a beta reader or editor or other reader I 'trusted,' it'd likely cover:
- Your characters spend too much time talking, without actually doing anything. This can get confusing and boring.
- Your characters, or maybe your MC, is constantly running an internal dialogue. This can get annoying, especially if their thoughts are constantly snarky.
- Your writing is overly verbose, with (maybe), too many adverbs, or overly long descriptions or wandering text that's 'pretty' but doesn't seem to convey anything key to the story. Every so often I come up with a phrase or paragraph that I absolutely love, but it just doesn't seem to fit. But... it's so awesome! Having one of these on rare occasions isn't so much an issue, but having too many will distract.

But in this case, not knowing the commenter or their background, you'll have to interpolate.

 

[XerXesXu]

So, I just got this feedback on my Summer Lovin’ story:

”Great story! You like the "sound" of your voice. TOO much!!!”

Huh? I’m actually confused what this means!

Were it written:

”Great story. You like the sound of your voice too much.”

I’d have taken it to mean that the narrative voice was too intrusive. However, the commenter’s punctuation and capitalisation, themselves, carry too much weight, so it might not be a profound literary observation.

 

[ElectricBlue]

Were it written:

”Great story. You like the sound of your voice too much.”

I’d have taken it to mean that the narrative voice was too intrusive. However, the commenter’s punctuation and capitalisation, themselves, carry too much weight, so it might not be a profound literary observation.

Inclined to agree. It's a bit of a back-handed compliment, I think, but not well expressed.

 

[Lovecraft_Lore]

Having read your story, I think the comment might mean 'too much sex'.

But that appears to be a winning writing style for you. So maybe keep doing it, it got you 150 or so followers without a bunch of incest or non-con stories.

It was about 80% sex and 15% setup for the next bout of sex and 5% story.

 

[Voboy]

So, I just got this feedback on my Summer Lovin’ story:

”Great story! You like the "sound" of your voice. TOO much!!!”

Huh? I’m actually confused what this means!

I think he put sound in quotes because it's a visual medium, not auditory.

I'd take that as a reader saying he thought I should cut some words out. Like, a lot of words.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Having read your story, I think the comment might mean 'too much sex'.

But that appears to be a winning writing style for you. So maybe keep doing it, it got you 150 or so followers without a bunch of incest or non-con stories.

It was about 80% sex and 15% setup for the next bout of sex and 5% story.

Yes, that's an amazing number of followers for just fourteen stories. Plus, you got red H's on eight of them. I suspect I don't put enough coupling in my erotic coupling stories but that's the way I like to do it I suppose.

You brought this up, like twice, so I guess it's fair game. What happened with this Jess, the "nicest girl you ever dated?" I'm guessing that you met a girl who wasn't so nice, but more fun in various ways (both in and out of bed). Did I get that right?

 

[TruthwithaTwist]

Yes, that's an amazing number of followers for just fourteen stories. Plus, you got red H's on eight of them. I suspect I don't put enough coupling in my erotic coupling stories but that's the way I like to do it I suppose.

You brought this up, like twice, so I guess it's fair game. What happened with this Jess, the "nicest girl you ever dated?" I'm guessing that you met a girl who wasn't so nice, but more fun in various ways (both in and out of bed). Did I get that right?

100% correct! She was nice, kind, loving and fairly willing (See:Beach House Clean Up). But.... I went to graduate school, met the not as nice, even MORE adventurous, and kinda "wrong for me in every way" Tara and proceeded to cheat on and eventually break up with Jess in an unkind way.
Not one of my better moments in life...definitely not proud of it.

 

[gunhilltrain]

100% correct! She was nice, kind, loving and fairly willing (See:Beach House Clean Up). But.... I went to graduate school, met the not as nice, even MORE adventurous, and kinda "wrong for me in every way" Tara and proceeded to cheat on and eventually break up with Jess in an unkind way.
Not one of my better moments in life...definitely not proud of it.

Thank you, I appreciate your honesty.

Oh, I see that Tara appears in your stories too.