purpleswordpanties
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I need some opinions here. I'm comfortable with writing, and so I tend to bend rules, often enough that I do it without thinking now.
Now, after a few people called me out, I'm not quite sure what is the best way to punctuate a line of dialogue, followed by a dialogue tag, and an action.
Take this excerpt from my story:
However, I've been told that the following is the correct way to do it:
But what do you think?
Now, after a few people called me out, I'm not quite sure what is the best way to punctuate a line of dialogue, followed by a dialogue tag, and an action.
Take this excerpt from my story:
I did it this way because I wanted to describe how she said the dialogue, and it was by "winking playfully." The alternative was:“James, it takes more than this to make me bedridden,” she winked playfully.
I dislike this version. The reason: I don't need to say "she said" because the fact that there is dialogue implies that she said something, and the sentence would be less wordy if I just used the action."James, it takes more than this to make me bedridden," she said, winking playfully.
However, I've been told that the following is the correct way to do it:
While this third version is grammatically correct, the period now separates the action and the dialogue entirely. I don't think it reads as well, and it really goes against my habits..."James, it takes more than this to make me bedridden." She winked playfully.
But what do you think?