Stories sent back "Dialogue"

[iwatchus]

Fior whatever reason, Laurel allowed my first story to go through with completely insane and inconsistent dialogue formatting.

She bounced my second story. And then my third, but that was a formatting issue with my copy and paste. Once I realized how badly I had screwed it up. I submitted an edit for the first story, so that evidence is safely buried away.

 

[TheWritingGroup]

I resubmitted with an explanation in the administration comments blank.

Explaining in the admin section worked. Story scheduled for tomorrow.

We'll see how it does. This is the closest thing I've done to a pure stroker. Almost no plot, but a significant amount of characterization and many sexy bits.

--Annie

 

[EmilyMiller]

Explaining in the admin section worked. Story scheduled for tomorrow.

We'll see how it does. This is the closest thing I've done to a pure stroker. Almost no plot, but a significant amount of characterization and many sexy bits.

--Annie

Yay!

 

[SkyBubble]

“Hi, OP,” Frances said.

She then added, “It’s not so very complicated to learn proper dialogue punctuation.”

“Trust me,” she continued, “there’s not that much to it.”

"Really?" OP asked.

 

[SkyBubble]

Also, make it clear who's speaking.

 

[SkyBubble]

Hmm, I'm not sure how this one should go can I get a little advice here?

Should it be; Larry patiently reminded him, “I can’t write,” as that had not been been a skill that anyone had taken the time to teach her growing up.

Or; Larry patiently reminded him, “I can’t write.” As that had not been a skill that anyone had taken the time to teach her growing up.

The former. The latter creates a sentence fragment. Don't use "as" in that context to start a sentence. If you want to make them separate sentences, then drop "as" and simply say, "That had not been a skill that anyone had taken the time to teach her growing up."

 

[SkyBubble]

'How can you get any pudding if you don't beat your meat?"

Not quite the lyric, but ....

A couple of friends in college wrote lyrics to the old song Funiculi, Funicula that began:

Last night
I stayed up late and masturbated
It felt to neat
To beat my meat...

 

[SkyBubble]

I have a Harriet FMC who prefers to use Harry.

Some Samanthas use Sam.

 

[SkyBubble]

You don't have to be crazy to post here. It will happen sooner or later anyway.

If you're not crazy when you get here, you will be.

 

[SkyBubble]

How would you guys untangle this paragraph?

"Hey!" one of the older ladies called out cheerfully.

He jumped with a guilty start, stammering out a hurried explanation. He gazed into their curious faces.

“I’m s-sorry," he said. "I d-didn’t mean to interrupt, I just got lost and st-stumbled upon you guys.”