character descriptions help

[macumbalove]

Hi, apologies if I've posted this in the wrong forum.
After reading some of the great Literotica stories, I'm atempting to write my own erotic tale and was hoping if anyone could help me out by descibing a couple of women I'm indending to use as a characters. It's their facial features I'm after mostly. All comments welcome, good or bad.
Thanks in advance for any Help ML

Number 1. http://www.filecabin.com/up1/1166346993-b3.jpg

Number 2. http://www.filecabin.com/up1/1166347245-JWImage1.jpg

 

[sirhugs]

I wouldn't go overboard on detail. Most readers like to "fil in the blanks" of their own fantasies.

How about:

#1 : "fresh faced" "apple cheeked" "her features were as well proportioned as her figure" " twinkling eyes" "playful smile" "mischievous grin" "youthful softness"

#2 "fading beauty" "fox faced" "angular features" "taut smile pulled tightly straight across her face" "chiselled cheekbones" "frozen" "icy"

 

[MechaBlade]

Hi, apologies if I've posted this in the wrong forum.
After reading some of the great Literotica stories, I'm atempting to write my own erotic tale and was hoping if anyone could help me out by descibing a couple of women I'm indending to use as a characters. It's their facial features I'm after mostly. All comments welcome, good or bad.
Thanks in advance for any Help ML

Number 1. http://www.filecabin.com/up1/1166346993-b3.jpg

Number 2. http://www.filecabin.com/up1/1166347245-JWImage1.jpg

I like the direction this story seems headed, but I cannot help you. Surely, you can come up with descriptions yourself. I hope these aren't women that you know in real life that you've posted pictures of, in prelude to writing erotic stories about them.

 

[only_more_so]

I have to agree with Sir Hugs. Leave a lot of the information to the reader to fill in unless the feature is somehow intrinsique to how the character should be viewed. A lot of people don't believe in physiognomy, but I think people still pre-judge based on it. Thus it can be a powerful technique to subtly imply something about a character based on their appearance.

For example if someones eyes are close-set, then people think they are shrewd and calculating. If they are wide-set (and large) people will assume the person is naive perhaps even stupid. If the nose is narrow and hooked they might assume greedy and manipulative, whereas a short and upturned nosed implies mischief and good-nature.

As a warning some of these facial feature connections to personality traits are racist in origin and I have never read of actual scientific correlation. Although things like wrinkles, or plumpness/thinness, degree of tan, etc, are positive indications of personality. But they can still be presented differently (call them crow's feet or laugh lines, they are just wrinkles around the eyes).

Another possibility it to refer to a archetype or someone famous. BUt again, only do as much as you need to, and don't feel obligated to give the whole description at once.

 

[Mesachie]

As a newbie writer, I probably shouldn't even have, much less express, an opinion. But I rather disagree with Sirhugs even though I very much admire his descriptions of the two photos in question. I see nothing wrong with describing your character.

Too much description? Well, if it got in the way of the story's pacing, I can see that being a problem. And I know there is a continuing debate about mentioning some specifics. Like actual breast size or does it matter if he has six inch or six and half inch hard on. But leaving description to the reader is an abrogation of a writer's duty, it seems to me. Unless you are describing anonymous intercourse conducted in the dark. And even then, we (the readers) would be hanging on every discovered detail touched upon. (Pun intended.)

Who would enjoy a story like this:

A cute woman got fucked by a very horny guy.

Is that a masterpiece? I'll just let the reader fill in the details as they like them! Okay, a few guys will say it's fine, but does he get to do her very often? A couple of ladies may ask if he cuddles her afterwards?

But I think that doesn't cut it, and having set the example up, I am guessing many others won't either. If our protagonist has a slender build, rosy cheeks, blue bird tattoos, and penchant for Victorian wardrobe, I enjoy hearing it, not just that they are sorta Goth. If the other protagonist is a coffee colored sapling with flowing dreds and the fire of Jamaica in his eyes, I enjoy savoring those details, not that he was young rasta, and then leave it to me to fill it in.

Yes, sometimes detail can become too over-analytic. But normally I enjoy reading a vision shared.

p.s. I am curious about describing real individuals in a story, so long as you don't use their actual names. I mean, we all get our inspirations from somewhere and occasionally there can be actual people. I wouldn't want to get sued for libel or defamation of character by using someone's name, but I see nothing wrong with describing the physical attributes of the milf next door as a character in a story. I very much doubt that I would share the story with her though.

 

[macumbalove]

Hi, Thanks for all the replies guys. I have no idea who the 2 ladies in the photos are and even if I did I wouldn't use their real names or anything that would conect them. I just find them two attractive ladies one young the other mature. (I think the mature platinum blonde is a former pin-up model not sure though) I'm one of those people who likes to see their characters described in a story and was just looking to see how other writers would descripe them as peoples opinions of a characters features can variate.

Any way. again thanks for your help.

 

[Weird Harold]

As a newbie writer, I probably shouldn't even have, much less express, an opinion.

Too much description? Well, if it got in the way of the story's pacing, I can see that being a problem. And I know there is a continuing debate about mentioning some specifics. Like actual breast size or does it matter if he has six inch or six and half inch hard on. But leaving description to the reader is an abrogation of a writer's duty, it seems to me. Unless you are describing anonymous intercourse conducted in the dark. And even then, we (the readers) would be hanging on every discovered detail touched upon. (Pun intended.)

Who would enjoy a story like this:

...If our protagonist has a slender build, rosy cheeks, blue bird tattoos, and penchant for Victorian wardrobe, I enjoy hearing it, not just that they are sorta Goth. If the other protagonist is a coffee colored sapling with flowing dreds and the fire of Jamaica in his eyes, I enjoy savoring those details, not that he was young rasta, and then leave it to me to fill it in.

Yes, sometimes detail can become too over-analytic. But normally I enjoy reading a vision shared.

You don't have to be a writer to have an opinion on what you like to read.

I very much agree with your opinion that more than simply naming a stereotype is required. I would only add to your first point that it is not necessary to describe a character all at once -- A "Reward Poster" for each character with vital statistics does disrupt the flow of the story

To use your first description as an example, a slender build, rosy cheeks, and victorian garb are things that someone could determine at first glance. However, the victorian garb would make knowing about the bluebird tattoos at first glance difficult unless they are on her face; don't tell me about the tattoos until her young rastaman finds them. He might not find out that she has a "penchant" for Victorian garb for several days -- or until he goes through her closet trying to find a hot outfit for her to wear to dinner.