Can I have a little help with some descriptions?

[unimaginative]

Hi there, I'm writing my first story at the moment and would like to make it as descriptive as possible.
I'm going to use a few pictures of models to illustrate what I mean with a few words of what I'm trying to describe, they will not be in the story.


The way her ass sits on her heels, the roundness and size, the red clothing, the ass to waist ratio.

I would describe this as; "She sat on the edge of the bed touching her knees, back straight with her ass proudly standing out behind"

Whatever this garment is haha:

The way she is bent over the chair:

The way she is legs spread, elbows forward and ass sticking up with material that cant stretch across it. Also the way her ass is level/higher than her head if that makes sense:
http://*******/images/full/40/790/790247309.jpg

The way her ass keeps its roundness and its shape whilst on top of a penis, and with her arms stretched by his head.

http://xxxbunker.com/kelly_divine_fuck_a_fan_manhunt.jpg

The way her breasts are pushed against her chest and the bed and how they cushion out and get squashed:

http://www.********.com/photo/1008112992/dusty8044.jpg

Much appreciated

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... I'm going to use a few pictures of models to illustrate what I mean with a few words of what I'm trying to describe, they will not be in the story. ...

A couple of the pictures seem to have been censored. That will always happen if they come from the company that owns this site, as their name is utterly forbidden on here!

 

[callmeismael]

The one piece of advice I'd give is that one of the best ways to describe something is to give a reaction to it. One of my favorite examples is from the great Raymond Chandler: "It was a blonde. A blonde to make a bishop kick a hole in a stained glass window." There's only one adjective in the entire description (well, not counting stained-glass), and yet we know she's the sort of woman who would make a very good man do very bad things. And we bring our own ideas of what that woman looks like. When you get the reader fleshing in those sorts of details yourself, you get them more involved in the story. Describing every detail for them will leave them unengaged. An equivalent for your story might be: "She had an ass that could lead a man like a dog on a leash."

It's a personal pet-peeve of mine when a writer wants to describe every element of a scene, whether it's a sexy woman or a sunset. Which isn't to say that detailed description isn't good. But description can kill a story. Make sure that it's either interesting, or part of the story, or both. "She had a tiny waist and an enormous, sexy ass, covered by a pair of red shorts." That sort of description brings your story to a stop. Instead keep it active: "His eyes were drawn down from her narrow waist down over the curves of her wide, inviting ass. Once his gaze happened there he found it immovably fixed, just as her bright red shorts seemed immovably wedged between those two glistening cheeks." Obviously I'm no Chandler, and I'm poking a bit of fun at the image, but hopefully you get my point. Describing the experience of observing is more evocative than simply describing the thing that's being observed. Don't overuse that technique though: only for elements where you really want the reader to feel the visual impact on the guy.

I'm not going to go through the other photos, but maybe that gives you some food for thought.

 

[unimaginative]

Thanks very much for that advise, I suppose less is more.
Think I'm too caught up in trying to make it too perfect, and your right- too much description would kill the ebb and flow of the story.
Cheers