Buried Treasure

[Cyberguy]

This thread seeks to unearth the hidden gems amongst the over 2100 erotic poems on Literotica that aren't on the top list. I've done some mining, so feel free to read them, vote on them, and comment on them. Then discover some "buried treasures" and shine some light on them here

 

[Cyberguy]

Ten 5's

Perfect 5's may not last on the top list for long, but there are over 300 erotic poems on Lit boasting a perfect 5 score!

Here are ten chosen at random and guaranteed to be at least 3 months old (no new list entries either):

1. Elements: Fire
2. Lover Lost
3. Virgin Kiss
4. Shamelessly Horny
5. Cummmmmm For Me Sweet Lady
6. Come Taste My Wine
7. You Chose Him
8. National Masturbation Month
9. Forbidden Blue
10. Needful Lust

 

[mskittykatt]

nice idea, thanks for the list

 

[tigerjen]

Right on, Cyberguy!
It'll make those "who want to see variety on the toplist"
real happy!

 

[tigerjen]

JImster71's "Virgin Kiss.......

A simple poem by Jimster71...."Virgin Kiss".......in one
word: sensual.

Favorite verse:
She shyly preserves the sweetest of all fruits,
Saving it for the one she has not yet met.

I viewed this as saving this kiss for "the one"......
this particular kiss is the "kiss" of her pussy.......

Until then, she offers her fiery passionate kiss,
Slippery and gliding, to sate the one she is with.

This kiss here......refers to the one from the lips
on her face.......lover has to be satisfied w/ this
kiss until "the time is right" for the other kind of kiss...

Short, simple, sweet, sensual........

More of Jimster71 here at:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=21465


tigerjen

 

[tigerjen]

DeadlyNyghtshayde's "Forbidden Blue".......

This poem is similar in a way to my poem "Liquid Blue"......has the
touch of Greek Mythology to it......

favorite line:
You see the world through
two deep oceans
Bluer than Poseidon's throne.

I'd love to look into those deep blue eyes.......


More of DeadlyNyghtshayde's writing:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=38776



tigerjen

 

[tigerjen]

**peering across the crowd**

Anyone else going to check out one of those
"forgotten poems"? That is...before I move on
to the next one..........

 

[daughter]

will take more than a list

Sorry, guys

But I need more than a list to check these out. I scroll the New Poems daily. If the title didn't entice me the first time, I don't see why repeating them here is going to generate interest.

One or two line description like what's done on the New Poems list might get this thread and reads for those poems up.

Good luck.

Peace,

daughter

 

[mskittykatt]

*raises her eyebrow*

*pondering Daughter*
what are you looking for? Tiger Jen's last post's caught my attention far more then the original list did... i'm off to read both poems mentioned now =)

*waves*

 

[daughter]

comments

*pondering Daughter*
what are you looking for? Tiger Jen's last post's caught my attention far more then the original list did... i'm off to read both poems mentioned now =)

Exactly, tigerjen's comments caught your attention. I'm not looking for anything. Seeing another list isn't going to excite me more than the first time I saw these titles. An endorsement might.

Sorry, if that wasn't clear.

Peace,

daughter

 

[Debbie]

Amongst the poems I found a rare jewel.

http://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=24563


A grip of lust

by ammre

We’re laying on our side..
My head is on your arm..
I can smell your skin..
Your arm is wrapped over my shoulder and holding onto my chest..
The smooth in the hollow of your palm on my nipple..
You arm pulling my shoulders back into you..
Your other arm..
The fingers..
Draggling lightly along my skin on my thigh..
On my hip..
On my stomach..
On my groin..
The hand going back to my hip..
Pulling my ass back to meet your hips..
Feeling my back arch as you’re deep inside me..
You kiss my neck and lick my ear..
Thrilling and Filling me with sensations of little fingers all over me..
Our legs intertwined in some knot no pretzel maker or god could have ever formed better..
I reach back and grab your ass pulling you as close to me as possible..
Both your hands find my sweet spots..
Fondling and touching them till I bite your arm..
I don’t bite hard..
Only enough to let you know..
Your driving me w i l d
No rushing..
No pounding..
No thrusting..
Only deep sweetness..
Being entwined in you..
We can outlast the energizer bunny..


To me this poem is very erotic! "Sweet spots, being entwined in you... "

"Our legs intertwined in some knot no pretzel maker or god could have ever formed better.."
*bravo* I like this line, a lot. Why? Because to me it speaks figuratively. Caught up in passion, limbs everywhere! Entangled.

 

[mskittykatt]

will someone please explain the use of .. and ... in poetry, specifically in this case at the end of every line? i quickly lost interest, my eyes traveled down the page to see all the dots and i only went back to read after i read the comments on it.

 

[tigerjen]

will someone please explain the use of .. and ... in poetry, specifically in this case at the end of every line? i quickly lost interest, my eyes traveled down the page to see all the dots and i only went back to read after i read the comments on it.

hiya KittyKatt.....

I just read the poem Debbiexxx found and posted up here....
I thought it was good myself, except that the use of those
".." practically every line drove me batty! Maybe its worth checking
to go thru the archives and see when the poem was originally posted
up. Perhaps this author did this as a first time poem?

tigerjen


PS......Debbiexxx...hiya there...thanks much for finding the poem you
posted!

 

[Unmasked Poet]

...

mskittykatt,

The ... is meant to imply additional thought or action. This punctuation does not belong in a poem and is better suited to inner dialog in prose.

The writer obviously thought the punctuation would add to the read.

U.P.

 

[Cyberguy]

this thread

Poems submitted to this site spend their allotted time on the new poems list and then disappear into oblivion, with the exception of the lucky few fortunate enough to garner 10 votes and make it onto the top list. My intent in starting this thread was to provide a forum where the gems amongst the thousands of poems that are not on the top or new lists could be discovered and shared.

To put it another way, the #1 thread focuses on the current #1 on the top list, and the new poems thread discusses the poems posted in the last seven days. This thread is a place created for a discussion of outstanding poems amongst the other 3000 poems residing on Literotica.

There has been plenty of discussion on here about how stagnant the top list is and how it is dominated by a relatively small number of poets. Voluntary disabling of voting has increased the variety, but when I look at the entire list of poems and see over 1000 poems with scores high enough to be on the top list, it's clear that there are many deserving poems out there that simply have not accumulated the necessary number of votes. This thread is for them. Dig in and post your finds here, and maybe we'll start seeing some older poems by unknown authors showing up on the top list. Now that would really give it variety!

The poems I listed were selected somewhat randomly, but all met the criteria of having perfect 5 scores, less than 10 votes (not on the top list), and being old enough that most of us were probably not reading the new list when they were submitted (the newest was from October 2001).

I suppose it might have helped if I had summarized them, but then the top list and new poems list (not to be confused with the #1 and new poem threads) don't provide any details about the poems either. I could see how more info would have helped get the ball rolling, but understand that I'm trying to encourage reading and discussion of forgotten poems, not specific poems that I am personally trying to promote. I planted a seed by starting this thread, but I'm not going to nurse it. If enough readers find this a worthy place to post, they will keep it alive, it not, it will die and deservedly so.

Many thanks to mskittykat and tigerjen for getting things started, and to debbiexxx for getting into the spirit and unearthing a gem that wasn't on my initial list.

To answer mskittykat's question, I don't even know what a proper use of ".." is in English, and "..." is overused in general, so my guess is it is an annoying bad habit of this author. Having said that, I must say that I completely overlooked them in my reading of the poem!

 

[daughter]

promotions

Cyberguy--

Kudos on posting this thread. It is appreciate. I'd like it to succeed and that is why I suggested some info to accompany the poem.

The New #1 started out with detailed discussion and as best as we can, contributors share a few lines about the current #1. New Poems is less detailed, but the idea was to provide a snippet in hopes that readers would read poems that were'nt on the toplist.

Again, thanks for another venue of finding good reads.

Peace,

daughter

 

[Whispersecret]

As a teacher, let me assure you...

...there is never a time when the use of ".." is correct.

Three dots (...) is an ellipsis, and it implies, as U.P. said, there is something more to be said.

In prose these days, people are also using the ellipsis to show a longer pause than a comma, especially in dialogue. Whether one can properly use an ellipsis in this second way is up for debate. I think that perhaps common usage will eventually push it toward acceptability, but I'm not sure.

And I have to disagree with U.P., who seems to think the ellipsis is the poor step-child of the other punctuation marks. If in a poem there are words left out, I see no reason why a poet could not employ those three little dots.

 

[WickedEve]

Van Goghhttp://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=8878
by Kessler
02/16/01

How you left in quiet solitude,
such thoughts of starry nights requiem.

To be tossed by a painters anger,
in colors of sanity lost.
Upon nights canvas love brushed recklessly,
for all to see.

Without rhyme or reason (as love does
portray) its scintillating beauty can just
as easily call of ill love and lovers past,
by anger in colors of sanity lost.

Such a starry night is not of tranquility,
its musical sound not all lovers can hear.

Made in painful sacrifice from one to the other,
not soul, not heart, not words spoken of.
Rather a piece of ones self,
a gentle offering of flesh and bone.

A remembrance,
given for lovers to come.
How you left in quiet solitude,
such thoughts of starry nights requiem.

fini

I like Van Gogh, and I like to paint, and I really do like this poem.

This line is good:

Such a starry night is not of tranquility,
its musical sound not all lovers can hear.

It makes you think of what Van Gogh did, but without being graphic.

 

[Ded Poet]

we are the world...

Hey, here's a buncha poems that not one person bothered to vote on. Does this mean they must suck? No my friends. They simply fell through the cracks in space…waiting…lonely zeros…for someone to love them.


This little beauty is a tale of defloration at a rock concert or a rave or something-at least that's what I got. Some very nice imagery here.

Fusion
by Jennifer O. Kinney ©
(submitted 9/01/00)

Swirling, hot, fast
As your tongue meets me in doorways unimaginable
Smoothing rough edges
Roughening smooth edges
Breaking virginal boundaries
And creating immaculate areas of your own

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=5245

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This is a raw, raunchy romp, but with a twist-I promise. Surely it's worth a look and a vote…

I'm Ready
by Romeo Blue ©
(submitted 9/01/00)

I pump like a
fucking madman.
Hard, rough, mean.
Cum goes everywhere
obscuring my view.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=5220

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Now how you can you argue with a strong, sex-positive woman with a spike heel on your head, commanding you to fuck her silly? Yes Mistress Genesis, Yes Mistress Genesis!



by Mistress Genesis ©
(submitted 04/27/01)

So, alright, I'm a slut
Does that make it alright?
Can we fuck now?
Your prudence bores me

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=13692

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He's an angry young man, yes he is, and he wants to tell you 'bout how she done him wrong. Won't you hear his sad, sad song?

Hungover
by Lord Wolf ©
(submitted 9/01/00)

I am a lover of screw-top wines,
The student vintage, long on quality
But whose demand is reasonable.

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Remember folks, these poems have been sitting there with giant donuts, for over a year in some cases. Won't you please dig deep into your hearts and vote for those less privilaged than yourselves? ~Sally Struthers sneaking back into the supply tent to gorge on airlifted food supplies~


DP

 

[RisiaSkye]

Cyberguy, excellent idea. I've done 5 feedbacks tonight, and am off to vegetate for a while on the GB. But I will definitely go fishing for some older reads. Thanks for the good idea.

 

[RisiaSkye]

Okay, I've got some good reads for you. None of them are "perfect," but all have something to offer.



Sestina for a Vampire by HomerPindar
sucking upon both your heat and your juices. Tasting your skin
with my tongue I do not finish, but follow your curves
up your body. You stare down your naked body at me in the moonlight,
seeing my eyes aglow, my mouth painted red, you slowly
wrap your arms and legs around me. Holding me close, you
whisper your desire, and bare your breasts
Playing with a traditional and very difficult form, HomerPindar takes a look at the sexual charge of vampirism, and the seduction of the "embrace."


don't read this by Swollen Lips
can you feel me squeezing tight?
milking every little bit
can you hear me scream your name?
as you munch my horny clit?
Using simple rhyme and a lot of questions, Swollen Lips challenges the reader to understand a young woman's lust, and her anger.

Victoria Jean, Part One by Bissres
Skin upon skin, nipples upon nipples,
Hands and mouths upon all we writhe together
A creation of lust and desire, fueled by love.
We please each other, we three.
Using a refrain and free verse, Bissres explores the possibilities of successful three-way love, in a context of more than sex. It's not perfect, but it's a damn good read. And it's gone over a year without a vote.


Utopia You by JasperMan
This nymph of the sea,
came to and with me.
Take me to utopia.
Take me to the sea.
A deceptively simple little meditation which uses few words and a heavy dose of structured repetition to describe one man's love of a mermaid.

 

[RisiaSkye]

Let's not let a good idea die.

Reminder *bump*

 

[tigerjen]

I second that!

Let's not let a good idea die.

Reminder *bump*

I second that.......will try this weekend sometime
to dig up some "hidden poems".......first I must try
and get over this bug/virus I have......bleeeahhhh
time to down some ginger ale!

tigerjen

 

[tigerjen]

Stumbled on this "new but got lost in the shuffle" poem......

written back 9/24/01

Natures Matched
by Juspar Emvan ©

Bronze; Alabaster
Ying; Yang
Protector; Nurturer
Stem; Petal
Hunger; Thirst
natures matched

Glance - Interest
Inhale - Arousal
Whisper - Desire
Caress - Passion
Kiss - Lust
hungers awakening

Suck, moan
Lick, whimper
Enter, sigh
Thrust, grunt
Explode, scream
desires fulfilled

This poem by Juspar Emvan seems to be a "first time" effort. Not
a "real" poem to the technical poets out there, but I enjoy it because
of the use of analogies (reminds me of a bit of my "3.14" poem a long
while back!) and how they tie in together. An example is the
second stanza........but wait.....its not just analogies....its an action
causing the "reaction".......as in "Glance - Interest".....a "first glance"
can "spark interest".....I felt as I can fill in the missing words to
create my own sentences/phrases....another example is "thrust, grunt"...
a "hard thrust" causes a "deep grunt".......

A good first effort by the writer

tigerjen

 

[Debbie]

A lovers Carafe by SexplorN

"consuming fruit from a lover's carafe,
tis' beautiful, never wrong."

A gem of a poem, erotic
and touching. May your cup of
love runneth over forever.


http://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=17732