**brilliance!!**

[Riven___Caulfield]

This is something I've never done - posted a boost to someone else's work. But dare I say it, there is a genuine artist among us.


http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=46037


..um... I think that's how you do a link. I don't know message boards.

This poem is brilliant. It's gritty, it's sexy, it's truth.
Let's hear a round of applause for Angeline.


Yours,

-Caulfield

 

[TheDR4KE]

agreed ... great poem. Rhythm that's not constant, almost like a syncopated beat, and good concepts. A lot of fun to read

Thanks for the heads up.

Drake

 

[00J]

Yeah its very nice...

 

[Angeline]

Overwhelmed

Sometimes the truth is almost too much too bear, and the hypocrisy of it all is overwhelming. When that happens to me on a good day, poetry is born. (On a bad day, I lash out and well, never mind.) It was on such a good day that, feeling the feelings, disposa-girl was born. Thank you for reading it and understanding it.

And Riven, as you well know, it is a mutual admiration society (really, he didn't pay me to say that). Castles in the Sand blew me away when I read it. It is appoccalyptic and erotic and complex and I think, most of all, the evidence of a major literary talent. SMOKEscreen is more of the same. Somehow, Riven's writing manages to be simultaneously dark and hopeful. Amazingly good!

So to return the favor:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=50650

 

[Lauren Hynde]

she is brillant

well, it was about time!

Angeline is a true artist, Riven, and I won't be the only one who says Dispos-a-Girl isn't even remotely her best... You should make her show you some of the poems she isn't even posting... She's the best...


Lauren Hynde
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=103442

 

[Guest]

Angeline, if you really want to grow as a poet, please don't let "brilliance" go to your head. Your poem is good but not brilliant. That's ludicrous, and it's praise from your "fan club." Some here have had their fan clubs. Once you get past that, you'll realize you have work ahead of you to be truly good.

As far as brilliance goes, I don't think there are any poems at literotic that qualify as brilliant.

 

[Angeline]

All Opinions Welcome

Unregistered, your comments are well put and taken. I have been writing most of my life, I love playing with words, and I write primarily for myself. I think that Yeats is brilliant, as is Rilke, Baudelaire, Ashberry, Bishop, and so many others. I do not delude myself that my writing approaches what my training in literature has taught me to recognize as inspired excellence. I am also well aware that being a "darling" or having a "fan club" is lovely but fleeting, while the poetry remains.

I read poetry here written by Daughter, by Judo, by SmithPeter, by WriterDom, by Smaugfire, by so many here, and I blush in the embarrassment that someone chose to single me out. And make no mistake, Mr. Caulfield is very very talented--I do not take his praise lightly, and I am grateful for his sincere appreciation of something I wrote. So, yes, read these poets' work here, read Riven's or Scarfaccio's stories and yes, you will see flashes of brilliance and why it's silly to make a contest out of all this.

Still, i have to wonder at the rather mean-spirited intent of someone who goes so out of their way to ensure that I understand my relative insignificance as a writer.

 

[Guest]

I've been reading stories and poetry at Literotic since last year. I've read some good poems, but I was simply surprised to see one that was "brilliant." When I saw this thread, I had to check out what was being called brilliance.
It's a good poem, but...

"Still, i have to wonder at the rather mean-spirited intent of someone who goes so out of their way to ensure that I understand my relative insignificance as a writer."

I don't see how my intent was mean-spirited or how I went out of my way to ensure that you understand your relative insignificance as a writer.

I did not point out your "insignificance as a writer." And that's because I don't agree with that statement. And I was not being mean. I was hoping to bring some balance to the thread. I'm sorry I didn't lavish you with brilliant praise. I should have said nothing at all. I just wanted to say, "don't let it go to your head." When you do, that slows your progress down.

Sorry my attempt to be helpful was misread.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

dear unregistered

Well, unregistered, not wanting to be anyone's champion, but i guess that criticism, constructive or not, would be better welcomed from someone who shows himself instead of hiding behind the shield of anonymity. Just a thought, to prevent future misinterpretations...



Lauren Hynde
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=103442

 

[Angeline]

Well perhaps I am wrong, and if so please accept my apology but if I see someone praise someone else's work--whatever it is--I do not make an assumption that the person needs to be told not to let it go to their head. And "ludicrous" is a fairly strong word to use if one's criticism is truely constructive.

I wrote a poem called "Lester Leaps In," about the jazz musician Lester Young. I love the poem, possibly my favorite that I have written (and I do think, by the way, that it's ok to love one's own work, but I'm hedonistic that way). Anyway, one of Lester's favorite sayings was "to each his own." Guess that applies here.

 

[smithpeter]

you go girl!

Angeline

Thank you for enjoyable reads both as poems and in this forum thread.
It's easy to see who is happy.
Besides, anyone who writes about a love of jazz and the creation of art, lust, experience and lives near water knows brilliance. To some the brightness resembles smudges. To others the opportunity to express.

 

[The Huntsman]

Sí

A delightful poem, Angeline.
Let me compliment you on the ease of reading, which some might term flow or fluidity. I also like the subject, and think it speaks volumes about the depraved condition of human relationship - in reality, as in cyber-reality.

Now, a criticism. I enjoy the ending, but it seems hurried. As though you had more to say, and wished to conclude. Or, as though you had less to say, and forced a conclusion. I would like to see it just a few lines longer, but finishing with the same directive - kissing the "real" wife.

Now, a tangent. Sayings such as "each to his own," and "it takes all kinds" do not at all point to any maxim or even constructed social reality. They do, however, speak loud and clear, "molested." Call it an inside joke, and by all means take no offense.

Ihmara Huntsman

 

[Angeline]

The Best Defense

is to keep writing, and I have no plans of slowing down! Thank you SmithPeter and Huntsman, for your kind words.

SmithPeter your presence on these boards and prolific poetic production (how's that for alliteration) are inspiring. Plus, I feel~~from your comments on other threads~~that I know you so well. Only on a site like this can one both read a poet's works and learn his nickname for his underwear and the comfort level of his prostate!

Huntsman, thank you for your lovely comments. Loved In Her Middle Dug it Out: bleeding, pain, sweetness, death, birth! Wow!

I wasn't sure where to end Diposa. I had the sense that if it went on too long, it would lose power. So, yes, maybe the ending is forced somewhat. I need to think about it (and I will--that sort of thinking is fun--isn't it?).

As to your point on "molested," I receive your meaning! Lester Young usually said "to each his own" when confronted with what he believed was racist behaviour (he also supposedly coined the phrase "I feel a draft" to suggest that). Maybe when I quoted it, I was feeling kinda molested!

 

[Elda Furry]

Plus, I feel~~from your comments on other threads~~that I know you so well. Only on a site like this can one both read a poet's works and learn his nickname for his underwear and the comfort level of his prostate!

To know a man's prostate and his nickname for his underwear is all you need to know him well? Well, I want to know Mr. smithpeter better. What's his nickname for his underwear? tee hee I bet it's oh so naughty... just like smithpeter. *blushing*

Please smithpeter, share your underwear secrets with me? Do you like boxers or briefs? I named my panties Mona and Cindy. Mona is missing right now. You haven't seen her have you, smithpeter?

 

[smithpeter]

In all seriousness

My Dear Ms. Furry

If you really need to know I outgrew my Underoos named Vince and Mike almost half a decade ago. Slugger hung in there for a while but did not survive the tenure of second marriage. There was a time when Stewart and Phil where the closest to me but they got a little too tight. So now it's just me and the 7 Dwarfs (Disney Logo snipped away).
If you have any more questions please feel free to contact my Derrière.
No cracks intended.
sp

 

[Lauren Hynde]

LMFAO!!!

 

[WickedEve]

smithpeter, snow white wants them back!

smithpeter wears grumpy when he can't get any; if he gets lucky, he changes into happy; after he's had some, he jumps into sleepy; he wears sneezy when his "head" feels all stuffy; dopey after a few beers; bashful on a first date; and doc when he has an itch that'll keep him out of happy for a while.

 

[Star At Sunrise]

funny

Smithpeter cracks me up, and I can't resist bumping my friend Ang's poem. *bump*

I wish my underwear had a name!!!

 

[Sex & Diamonds]

Riven ~

Hello, nice to see you again. I'm surprised to see you on a soap box I must admit, but after reading Angeline's poem, I can see why you are up there.


Great poem Angeline

 

[Riven___Caulfield]

isn't EVERYTHING subjective?

Well, Angeline's was the first poem I've read since I was a kid that made my jaw drop with joy.

So I figured I'd shout it.


-Caulfield