soulhouse
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I have the long-overdue third and final part of my first story on Literotica, "Fucked Stupid", almost ready for submission. It is approximately 7,500 words in length and will be filed under mind control. Since I appreciate some find any hint of it objectionable, I should warn that it includes an element of non-consent/reluctance. To my mind, the dominant theme isn't mind control, or non-consent, but rather seduction and resistance-crumbling, for want of a better phrase, with a strong femdom element.
Having written the first two parts without any input, I thought it would be good to see this time if I can get feedback that will help me in polishing this third part before it's published. I'm looking for beta readers, rather than an editor, so if you think you might be interested in helping me with your comments, please take a look at the first two parts here:
https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=4999872&page=submissions
There should be little or no need for spelling (British English) or grammar corrections, because I'm pretty careful about that, but if you were to notice any I'd be happy to have them pointed out, obviously. Instead, I'm looking for feedback on how well it reads, show don't tell, credibility, characterisation, dialogue, pacing etc - any observations you might have on how it might be improved, in other words.
Thanks
Having written the first two parts without any input, I thought it would be good to see this time if I can get feedback that will help me in polishing this third part before it's published. I'm looking for beta readers, rather than an editor, so if you think you might be interested in helping me with your comments, please take a look at the first two parts here:
https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=4999872&page=submissions
There should be little or no need for spelling (British English) or grammar corrections, because I'm pretty careful about that, but if you were to notice any I'd be happy to have them pointed out, obviously. Instead, I'm looking for feedback on how well it reads, show don't tell, credibility, characterisation, dialogue, pacing etc - any observations you might have on how it might be improved, in other words.
Thanks
