brokenvalkyrie
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I'm currently wanting one or perhaps two people willing to read through the first chapter of my first ever story. Specifically looking for opinions on readability and story flow. If any spelling or grammatical errors are spotted, all the better!
The story is a mix of bdsm and reluctance so far. Possible non-consent depending on one's perspective. I also wrote it with the possibility of the main character being transgender, but purposefully left out references to it in case I decide against it later. The first chapter covers a girl at a park being harassed by a guy she knows, and then it goes on to cover the very start of them re-igniting the relationship the protagonist had been avoiding. I want it to get heavier with more obvious submission / control play in later parts.
Right now, the first 'chapter' is just over 3000 words. I use notepad++, but if something besides a .txt file is greatly preferred, I can easily send as anything.
I'm not in a big rush. I'll probably work some on the second part or perhaps another concept altogether in the meantime if I get the urge to write more.
If you're interested and available to help, I thank you for your time.
The story is a mix of bdsm and reluctance so far. Possible non-consent depending on one's perspective. I also wrote it with the possibility of the main character being transgender, but purposefully left out references to it in case I decide against it later. The first chapter covers a girl at a park being harassed by a guy she knows, and then it goes on to cover the very start of them re-igniting the relationship the protagonist had been avoiding. I want it to get heavier with more obvious submission / control play in later parts.
Right now, the first 'chapter' is just over 3000 words. I use notepad++, but if something besides a .txt file is greatly preferred, I can easily send as anything.
I'm not in a big rush. I'll probably work some on the second part or perhaps another concept altogether in the meantime if I get the urge to write more.
If you're interested and available to help, I thank you for your time.
