Back from a long break - anyone want to proof/offer feedback?

[spankmytentacle]

I was last active here in 2016, and then took a long break (before anyone starts theorizing, the state was not involved in my absence.) I have two parts of a multipart story posted, and I have part 3 ready to go (4K words right now.) Is anyone interested in giving just a light "second pair of eyes" treatment to this new part to make sure it agrees in tone and form with the previous parts, and is at least somewhat coherent? I am a native English speaker, and I can use most punctuation marks correctly, if that will help anyone make a decision.

Previous story here: https://www.literotica.com/s/jennys-journey-ch-01-1