Avoiding repetition when describing sex

[MillieDynamite]

I prefer it too. Like I use the word "cock." They are straightforward. Not for the anal attentive. Unless I'm writing a story with a character who would use the words that way, I don't use them to refer to the person, though, but to the sexual equipment. So, I wouldn't suggest reading my stories. I don't write for the squeamish or those needing babysitting. My readers are made of stronger, more robust stuff.

In the world I came from before I lived in a foster home, the word was always about a person. I prefer pussy, clam, or twat to the C word. Just me, no one else need be that way. I have used the words in stories but always toward a person not a part of the anatomy.

 

[Bubo_bubo]

In the world I came from before I lived in a foster home, the word was always about a person. I prefer pussy, clam, or twat to the C word. Just me, no one else need be that way. I have used the words in stories but always toward a person not a part of the anatomy.

I can see where you are coming from, especially if the word was used to refer to women (and not as it sometimes is used in the UK (or Oz?) for men).

 

[MillieDynamite]

I can see where you are coming from, especially if the word was used to refer to women (and not as it sometimes is used in the UK (or Oz?) for men).

It was used at me, I say at me, to avoid thinking how it was about me.

 

[Bubo_bubo]

It was used at me, I say at me, to avoid thinking how it was about me.

I know I'm nothing more than some rando on the internet but:
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And I hope life finds you better now.

 

[KeithD]

I try not to inflict anything personal I'm wallowing in on readers through my stories (or onto other writers in what they can put in their stories). I don't think that's erotic.

 

[lovecraft68]

It was used at me, I say at me, to avoid thinking how it was about me.

I loathe the word, see it as on par with 'n-word' when used as an insult. It's never been allowed in my house the couple of idiots that said regretted doing so.

I came around to using it as anatomy, but only from the woman's POV and usually in my milf characters as I don't see younger women using it.

As for using it as a slur, I use it sparingly in my writing the same way I use some other unsavory words and in the sense of making sure the reader knows this person is an asshole. That's only in my horror novels and pretty sure all that used it have bought in fun ways.

 

[GrushaVashnadze]

You seem to really like the C word. My eyes are burning from seeing it, my nerves are shattered from comprehending the word, and my anger is elevated from how much I hate the word! Sorry, I really hate that word.

Millie, yes, I do like that word. I understand the reasons you don't, and I respect that.

However, here are just a few thoughts in defence of "cunt":

1. Its use varies in different parts of the world. In some localities and contexts, it does not have demeaning implications, but can see taken as ironic or irreverently playful.

2. In certain contexts I find it warm, earthy, rich, and primevally Anglo-Saxon. For me, it is a far more honest and lovely word than "pussy", which I find apologetic, coy and irredeemably bisyllabic. I think "cunt" has a visceral beauty all of its own.

3. Much of my use of the word is ironic. In A Smoking Trash Cunt Whore, the title quotes an insult hurled at the (anti?-)heroine by her emotionally abusive boyfriend. It is partly by embracing the slur that she learns to give him back what he deserves. (Actually, the original title of this story was A Worthless Filthy Fucking Smoking Trash Cunt Whore - which is precisely what he calls her, to his eventual woe.)

4. Alison Goes to London is a satire set in a future hyper-sexualised dystopia ("1984 with anal sex", one reader called it). As in many satires (from Jonathan Swift to Monty Python), exaggeration is a device which encourages readers to hold a mirror up to our own society. The language used by the youngsters in Alison Goes to London merely takes to its logical conclusion the degradation of language we already see around us in this age. I have lived long enough to see (in the U.K. at least) "fuck" pass from taboo to commonplace; I would not be surprised if "cunt" follows.

5. Finally, filthy talk is a common kink/fetish, and pervades certain brands of porn, both literary and visual, for that very reason. Violet_Vixen and I both revel in and satirise it in our story Fuck Talk, where we set ourselves the brief of using words like "fuck" and "cunt" as much as possible to mean everything except "fuck" and "cunt". The main character in The Cursed Cunt has that kink too: hence the title.

Hope that helps...?
Grusha

 

[AlexBailey]

A couple of characters in my story have the C-word conversation. I'd been checking YouTube videos and reading some other authors' Australian slang when I kept coming across the word. The word has always bothered me but I liked how it highlighted the cultural differences between the characters so I imagined how the conversation could go between two new lovers while providing a bit of a 'disclaimer.'

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"Hey Sam?"

"Yeah, love?"

I didn't really have anything to say, I just wanted to hear his voice. "I like that..." I say, "...the way you call me 'love.' It's better than 'mate.'" I chuckle. "When we were hanging around with your friends, you always called me mate, but you and the rest of the guys were always calling each other 'cunts'..."

I don't normally like the word 'cunt' but it's so common in Australia that it's lost it's meaning, it's almost a term of endearment, a vulgar version of 'mate.'

"Aw now, that's just the talk, no one means anything by it."

"I know, but you never called me a cunt."

Sam chuckles. "It's not something I'd say to a beautiful girl. I couldn't say it to you. I may have even called you 'love' once or twice by accident..."

"No, you did not." I playfully poke a finger into his ribs. "I definitely would have remembered that."

"Maybe I just said it when you were asleep..." Sam laughs. "Want me to make amends now?"

I giggle. "You owe me."

He holds me tight and whispers in my ear. "Alright then, more dirty talk for my steamy..." he kisses my neck, "...hot..." another kiss, "...tight..." he growls and bites my ear, "...little love-cunt."

I swoon and turn so I'm sideways in his lap. His cock is firm beneath his shorts and under my skirt as I lay my head against his chest and listen to his heart beating -- Sam's precious heart.

 

[GrantBricksly]

So, I know this is a bit of an older thread (only 6 months...not THAT old...)

But I have a similar question. I try very hard to change up my verbiage and avoid the repetitive use of words (not just words like "cock" or "pussy" but names, or "him" "her" etc...)

So, now, I have a question for all of you writers out there. What word/words have you found to use to describe the fluid/excretion a woman had when orgasming. I can say she came. I can call it cum (though for some reason that always feels off to me...) I often times will use "juice" ("her pussy juices" But...I find myself at a loss for more words to use.

Thoughts?

 

[Dr_Strabismus]

I'm glad you resuscitated this thread. I can't help noticing that the O.P. was smart and witty, but probably fucked off after seeing some of the dour responses here.

Personally, I think (and I'm being serious here), the solution is not to put too much explicit sex into your story in the first place.

 

[KeithD]

So, I know this is a bit of an older thread (only 6 months...not THAT old...)

But I have a similar question. I try very hard to change up my verbiage and avoid the repetitive use of words (not just words like "cock" or "pussy" but names, or "him" "her" etc...)



Thoughts?

Forced avoidance of repeating words can wind up more jarring to the reader than just sticking mostly to basic, straightforward terms.

 

[GrantBricksly]

I'm glad you resuscitated this thread. I can't help noticing that the O.P. was smart and witty, but probably fucked off after seeing some of the dour responses here.

Personally, I think (and I'm being serious here), the solution is not to put too much explicit sex into your story in the first place.

And that is fine, but sometimes a good sex scene is needed. And when it is, having a collection of words you can use to avoid repetition is helpful. Especially when you may have characters that will talk about it in dialogue. There, you expect to have the same words over and over, because that is how people talk. When I talk about sex, I say cock. I don't often use other words to describe or refer to my cock. Most people don't most people have one word they use and that's it.

So now, you've had your character say Cock a ton of times in dialogue. And you need to describe a sex act, or perhaps someone's internal thoughts about the appendage. It's good to know some different words, because as a reader, regardless of how much I do like the word...reading it over and over gets old quick.

 

[GrantBricksly]

Forced avoidance of repeating words can wind up more jarring to the reader than just sticking mostly to basic, straightforward terms.

Its not so much forced avoidance, I am going for here, as it is tactical. I try to use my words to evoke an emotional image in the reader's mind. And sometimes "cum" or "pussy juice" just doesn't feel like it's going to do it.

 

[KeithD]

Its not so much forced avoidance, I am going for here, as it is tactical. I try to use my words to evoke an emotional image in the reader's mind. And sometimes "cum" or "pussy juice" just doesn't feel like it's going to do it.

On your specific question, I don't use the image much, but I sometimes call it "flow" when I do. But, again, the more flowery variations you use in the same scene description, the higher the danger of your reader being thrown off focus on the scene.

 

[Dr_Strabismus]

sometimes a good sex scene is needed

That's exactly what I tell my wife, but she hates it when I whine like that.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

. What word/words have you found to use to describe the fluid/excretion a woman had when orgasming. I can say she came. I can call it cum (though for some reason that always feels off to me...) I often times will use "juice" ("her pussy juices" But...I find myself at a loss for more words to use.

I've not had the pleasure of a woman who squirted enough to bother mentioning, though I'm assured they exist. I'd likely say something like "suddenly my face became even more wet than it had been already, as I mashed my mouth into her cunt and she convulsed against my nose, near-choking me with her thighs."

Sweet tastiness is good, honeyed nectar is OTT in my book. I don't like the word cum, but some of my characters use it anyway.

 

[GrantBricksly]

I've not had the pleasure of a woman who squirted enough to bother mentioning, though I'm assured they exist. I'd likely say something like "suddenly my face became even more wet than it had been already, as I mashed my mouth into her cunt and she convulsed against my nose, near-choking me with her thighs."

Sweet tastiness is good, honeyed nectar is OTT in my book. I don't like the word cum, but some of my characters use it anyway.

Oh, they exist. My wife is one of them, and it is quite the experience.

Thank you for your answer too. I've been struggling with coming up with a good alternative. I don't mind the word "cum" It just doesn't evoke the right imagery for me when from a woman.

 

[Djmac1031]

So, I know this is a bit of an older thread (only 6 months...not THAT old...)

But I have a similar question. I try very hard to change up my verbiage and avoid the repetitive use of words (not just words like "cock" or "pussy" but names, or "him" "her" etc...)

So, now, I have a question for all of you writers out there. What word/words have you found to use to describe the fluid/excretion a woman had when orgasming. I can say she came. I can call it cum (though for some reason that always feels off to me...) I often times will use "juice" ("her pussy juices" But...I find myself at a loss for more words to use.

Thoughts?

Variety can be fun, but also distracting. It's a fine line.

And some word choices are simply better than others.

For a woman, cum, juices, and cream are all pretty standard. I find "hunny" works well too, but not often.

From there you can get poetic, descriptive; "a warm stream flowed from her," or "pools of moisture formed" or "dripping strands."

When it comes to the sex organs, simple is usually better. I've seen way too many people trying way too hard to avoid "cock" and wind up using distracting, silly sounding terms like "meat puppet" or "johnson."

I find alternating between "cock" and things like "shaft," "glans," or head works well, especially in a blowjob scene. Switch the words up depending on what part she's focusing on.

Him / her, he / she can't be avoided, although you can eliminate some by using the characters name instead especially if it helps clarify who's speaking or doing something better.

 

[GrantBricksly]

Variety can be fun, but also distracting. It's a fine line.

And some word choices are simply better than others.

For a woman, cum, juices, and cream are all pretty standard. I find "hunny" works well too, but not often.

From there you can get poetic, descriptive; "a warm stream flowed from her," or "pools of moisture formed" or "dripping strands."

When it comes to the sex organs, simple is usually better. I've seen way too many people trying way too hard to avoid "cock" and wind up using distracting, silly sounding terms like "meat puppet" or "johnson."

I find alternating between "cock" and things like "shaft," "glans," or head works well, especially in a blowjob scene. Switch the words up depending on what part she's focusing on.

Him / her, he / she can't be avoided, although you can eliminate some by using the characters name instead especially if it helps clarify who's speaking or doing something better.

Interesting...I had never thought of (or to my recollection seen) cream used for it before...but when I was speaking to my wife not more than an hour ago on the phone, I asked her opinion on this, and that was her suggestion as well.

 

[Djmac1031]

Interesting...I had never thought of (or to my recollection seen) cream used for it before...but when I was speaking to my wife not more than an hour ago on the phone, I asked her opinion on this, and that was her suggestion as well.

I use it quite often.

Also, adjectives are your friend.

For instance, instead of writing "I pulled my cock from her, coated with her juices," instead you could write "I removed myself from her, slick and slippery," and we'd all know exactly what you mean.

 

[GrantBricksly]

I use it quite often.

Also, adjectives are your friend.

For instance, instead of writing "I pulled my cock from her, coated with her juices," instead you could write "I removed myself from her, slick and slippery," and we'd all know exactly what you mean.

Oh, adjectives are one of my best friends for sure. But on occasion, (like the one that prompted this conversation this morning) I need to use an actual word to describe it, and today, the words I typically used just didn't feel right..

 

[Djmac1031]

Oh, adjectives are one of my best friends for sure. But on occasion, (like the one that prompted this conversation this morning) I need to use an actual word to describe it, and today, the words I typically used just didn't feel right..

I get that. And if that's the case and you wind up deciding a common choice like cum or juices fits best, go with it, and perhaps just try eliminating that same word elsewhere with a different choice to avoid repetition.

My humble advice anyway.

 

[yowser]

So, now, I have a question for all of you writers out there. What word/words have you found to use to describe the fluid/excretion a woman had when orgasming. I can say she came. I can call it cum (though for some reason that always feels off to me...) I often times will use "juice" ("her pussy juices" But...I find myself at a loss for more words to use.

I've always been fond of the Victorian phrase 'cunt liquor'.

But probably best used sparingly.

 

[Dr_Strabismus]

Yes, that stuff is pretty potent

 

[Whanmore]

(ignoring getting into playground epithets) and a finite number of verbs to describe how they connect.

You write:

A fucked B’s pussy

C pounded D’s cunt

E deeply probed F’s inner depths

G inserted his penis into H’s vagina

I gave J his full length

K rode L hard

Etc. etc.

Isn't it more the feelings behind the sex that bring out the most when describing the scene and not so much the adverbs and nouns used. As writers we've got so much more than "insert peg into slot"

"Michael pounded Sarah and she cried out loud, as he used her body for his own gratification."

"Micheal pounded Sarah and she cried out loud, as Micheal dutifully made sure she was satisfied."

"Micheal pounded Sarah and she cried out loud, the two of them lost in mutual passion and pleasure."