Any ideas for the sequel?

[TheNovelist2000]

I have a story that was published a few months ago called Nikki's First Bull Ch: 1-8. It's supposed to be a LW stroker, but it ended up being a slowburn. So, it took a few chapters for Nikki to go on dates with the guy her father had chosen for her, to the excitement and frustration of her boyfriend Paul. So far, Nikki has gone on two dates with Han, the first date being in a cafe, where she is fingered in public, and the second being in a hotel, where she loses a bet and has to dine naked. So far, she's given a blowjob to Han, and Han has made her cum using his fingers or mouth (the story doesn't explicitly state which method was used.) The story ended after Nikki had recounted the hotel date to Paul in a motel room, where he cummed without even having to touch her. That was all written a few months ago, and now I feel obliged to write a sequel to this.

More than a few people have asked for it, but I find writing about the third date to be very boring for a number of reasons. First of all, Nikki and Han have only gone on two dates, and since Han hasn't got a clue about the existence of Pual, bringing that up abruptly now only after two dates seems jarring. Secondly, I know Paul, and it wouldn't be natural for him to want to meet Han now. But another date of Nikki and Han without Paul being present in some way sounds very boring to write and read about. Any ideas to escalate the story so that Han outright enjoys (doesn't have to be full-on sex) Nikki in front of Paul without quicking the pace of the story at breakneck speed? Also, the problem stems from the fact that Nikki and Paul do not live together since they are yet to be married and Nikki comes from a very conservative family. So, putting all three parties in the same place for a sexual adventure sounds so difficult without all three parties enter into a cuckolding relationship knowingly. I think I have written myself into a corner.

Story link: https://www.literotica.com/s/nikki-s-first-bull-ch-01-08

 

[Rob_Royale]

I've not the time to read your story, but after seeing that you are 15K words into it, let me ask you this - when is the right time to quicken the pace?

It seems like Paul is discovering his cuckold beta nature and she is discovering her ravenous sexuality, so why not combine the two where he acts as voyeur watching her with Han? Maybe from a closet? Or a closed circuit video system?

They do it in their home and it's at her invite, she's finally ready to take it all the way and Paul needs to see if he's strongenough to see her with another man in the way that he's fantasized.

Or - this chapter can be about Nikki and Paul fantasizing about her upcoming affairs. She wants to go further with Han but isn't sure how Paul will take it so they role play.

"Tell me what you want him to do to you," Pauls asks.

 

[000zing]

Nikki's Second Bull.. ?

 

[Husky_Embrace]

You're suggesting part 3 is another date. It would make sense in a way. The audience i expecting a further ramp up of the sex. So a 3rd date seems natural where they go further, and it siunds so boring.

You need to give them what they want, but from a different angle. The dates seem to be going well, so the first thing we do is introduce conflict. Not horribly manufactured conflict just to have it, but something more natural.

A natural conflict is easy to imagine luckily. Maybe Paul gets suspicions, or has plans on the time during the 3rd date. It can be that she learns she's not the only one wanting Han, which puts a strain on the relationship. Is she supposed to fight for it? Go all the way? Or let him go?

Second I would do away with the date. It can still be written well, but it still presents a rut. We have been down the road of a date twice now. Instead have them meet unintentionally. They happen to meet in the same china shop. Or there's a meeting at work with another company and they see each other. Sparks aren't supposed to fly, and yet they do. Nikki tries to hide it. The secrecy and excitement eventually ramps it up when they get their alone time.

Paul can be near. Maybe he's out and about himself, or it appears he's a colleague of Han. Maybe he looks up to him for being a bull, and as a joke he suggests to go after Nikki. He knows she's in his grip. The impossible task for the bull, or so he thinks. The genuine chemistry between Han and Nikki surprises. It can still be over the clothes or secretly under the table stuff, but Paul is there.

 

[TheNovelist2000]

I've not the time to read your story, but after seeing that you are 15K words into it, let me ask you this - when is the right time to quicken the pace?

The pace should've been quickened from the very beginning.

so why not combine the two where he acts as voyeur watching her with Han?

Yes, the problem has been with finding a natural path to this.

Or - this chapter can be about Nikki and Paul fantasizing about her upcoming affairs. She wants to go further with Han but isn't sure how Paul will take it so they role play.

"Tell me what you want him to do to you," Pauls asks.

I like the idea, but would Han agree to step down to the role of the bull when he’s currently dating her with marriage in mind? I feel he wouldn’t naturally settle for that role when he could marry her and have her for life. What I need to write is a chapter between Han and Nikki, where Han becomes infatuated with her and she also becomes attracted to him, but not to the point of replacing Paul. That would leave the door open for a settlement between the three: Han gets to keep her as their bull, she gets to enjoy him physically, and Paul gets to keep Nikki and remain the cuck he’s meant to be.

However, since the story is narrated from the point of view of a bartender whom Paul confided in years later about his cuck experiences (all because of my stunt), it feels impossible to include an intimate romantic scene between Nikki and Han that Paul doesn’t know about — especially one that eventually pushes him to accept a wife-sharing arrangement. Do you think it would be a good idea to break the narrative structure I established earlier and switch to Nikki’s point of view, showing her secret meetings with Han until he becomes so infatuated with her that he proposes — and that’s when she reveals Paul’s existence? Paul doesn’t want Han to become a permanent part of their lives, but he’s ultimately forced to settle for it.

 

[TheNovelist2000]

Nikki's Second Bull.. ?

The first bull hasn't even realised that he is a bull yet. So, Nikki's second bull can come only after this saga has ended.

 

[TheNovelist2000]

You're suggesting part 3 is another date. It would make sense in a way. The audience i expecting a further ramp up of the sex. So a 3rd date seems natural where they go further, and it siunds so boring.

You need to give them what they want, but from a different angle. The dates seem to be going well, so the first thing we do is introduce conflict. Not horribly manufactured conflict just to have it, but something more natural.

A natural conflict is easy to imagine luckily. Maybe Paul gets suspicions, or has plans on the time during the 3rd date. It can be that she learns she's not the only one wanting Han, which puts a strain on the relationship. Is she supposed to fight for it? Go all the way? Or let him go?

Second I would do away with the date. It can still be written well, but it still presents a rut. We have been down the road of a date twice now. Instead have them meet unintentionally. They happen to meet in the same china shop. Or there's a meeting at work with another company and they see each other. Sparks aren't supposed to fly, and yet they do. Nikki tries to hide it. The secrecy and excitement eventually ramps it up when they get their alone time.

Paul can be near. Maybe he's out and about himself, or it appears he's a colleague of Han. Maybe he looks up to him for being a bull, and as a joke he suggests to go after Nikki. He knows she's in his grip. The impossible task for the bull, or so he thinks. The genuine chemistry between Han and Nikki surprises. It can still be over the clothes or secretly under the table stuff, but Paul is there.

The reason the third date sounds boring is that I can’t find a natural way to include Paul’s explicit involvement. He’s been involved implicitly twice already, and the audience has had enough of that. The only natural conflict I can think of is Han becoming adamant about making the relationship official — wanting to wife her up or at least make her his fiancée — but that would require a series of secret rendezvous between them without Paul’s knowledge, where they would develop feelings for each other, which the current narration doesn’t allow.

 

[000zing]

The first bull hasn't even realised that he is a bull yet. So, Nikki's second bull can come only after this saga has ended.

Methinks some just don't get sarcasm...

 

[Rob_Royale]

I like the idea, but would Han agree to step down to the role of the bull when he’s currently dating her with marriage in mind? I feel he wouldn’t naturally settle for that role when he could marry her and have her for life. What I need to write is a chapter between Han and Nikki, where Han becomes infatuated with her and she also becomes attracted to him, but not to the point of replacing Paul. That would leave the door open for a settlement between the three: Han gets to keep her as their bull, she gets to enjoy him physically, and Paul gets to keep Nikki and remain the cuck he’s meant to be.

Well then the three of them working towards a polyamorous relationship seems a natural way to go about it.
Han is falling for her and admits to it with Paul there and tells them they need to end it, before people get hurt. Instead Nikki suggests they share her in the biggest house. Maybe they are each having difficulty financially and combining households is a logical solution. Plus if Paul is leaning toward a cuck lifestyle, having all of them under the same roof is beyond enticing. Nikki is all for it, because all cards on the table. No lies or sneaking around. She can have everything she wants.