Annonymous

[SEVERUSMAX]

Those death threats just have a way of sticking to you. *sigh* I remember mine.

Hugs.

 

[starrkers]

Death threats? Damn, I really am missing out! About the worst I've ever received was my old friend Masterofsmiles (remember him? Posted in high dudgeon about getting his stories rejected) who used to 1 bomb me and send anonymous emails about how my writing ability was only suitable for the Garden Club newsletter...pity he left his email address in one of them.

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Dear Anon

I appreciate that you seem to intend constructive criticism, but I don't get what you mean by "lame and immature, but okay". Nor what you think is inaccurate about the BDSM lifestyle in the story. It's not a consensual BDSM story, so it is fiction, already, by definition. This is a form of TPE described, and perhaps not the sort with which you are familiar. Maybe you're Gorean or non-TPE or something else. I don't know. I do know that I've read of BDSM lifestyles that even I have to force myself to tolerate, because they are presumably "Safe, Sane, and Consensual". And that's from someone who has been in the lifestyle/community for nearly 4 years!

Enlighten me, perhaps, on what you deem so unrealistic or wrong about their particular form of TPE (Total Power Exchange). It's not a romantic D/s deal, at least where Helen is concerned, but that's the whole point of the story. She was blackmailed by an angry redneck and his TG lover. Nothing is going to be normal about life after that. She is attracted to them and discovering her repressed submissive side in the process, as well as facing her interest in women, especially her former boss. This isn't going to be a typical D/s tale.

So, by all means, clarify what your issue is with it, beyond being unusual even for BDSM.

 

[WRJames]

I guess I am now a real Lit veteran. Before this the worst I had was that Texas Mermaids was "antiTexan"

My Gosh!
07/21/07 By: Anonymous in Frankfurt
I do not believe I have ever read anything as uterly stupid and boring as this. A total waste of the five minutes anyone needs to predict where the pathetic attempt at plot is going. No, make that two minutes. Save yourself two minutes of your pathetic life and avoid WRJames vacant erotican't.

This this was an excerpt from the middle of a novel (Kiss My Ass, which is two chapters out of the middle of A Murder in Eden) it is remarkable AinF found it so simple to figure out what was going on. Maybe they could provide their analysis of the plot, and how easy it was to determine?

 

[SweetWitch]

I guess I am now a real Lit veteran. Before this the worst I had was that Texas Mermaids was "antiTexan"



This this was an excerpt from the middle of a novel (Kiss My Ass, which is two chapters out of the middle of A Murder in Eden) it is remarkable AinF found it so simple to figure out what was going on. Maybe they could provide their analysis of the plot, and how easy it was to determine?

Welcome aboard. The worst one I got was from a person who wanted me to kill myself.

 

[rgraham666]

Welcome aboard. The worst one I got was from a person who wanted me to kill myself.

Got one of those myself recently.

 

[WRJames]

Welcome aboard. The worst one I got was from a person who wanted me to kill myself.

If they told me to go fuck myself I might take them up on it.

 

[SweetWitch]

If they told me to go fuck myself I might take them up on it.

*Snort*

 

[MarshAlien]

This message contains feedback for:
This feedback was sent by: Anonymous

Comments:

"living dolls" Hey marshie baby, how many computers do you have access to? I've never seen so many anonymous comments on a story that is supposed to be so great. I love how you spread it out over several different countries. But you can't fool a fooler.

Just the one, but it came with a lot of extra fake mustaches.

 

[SweetWitch]

Garbage
07/30/07 By: Anonymous in USA
Rednecks and whores, what a load of crap, all your characters need to be removed from the planet.

Of course, Darling. I'll line them up right behind you.

 

[SweetWitch]

On Forget the Bitch...

Not bad at all
08/07/07 By: Anonymous in South Africa
Quite well written and thankfully not the usual blood & gore (or cum & precome) that one encounters on Literotica. Speaking of which, is this really the type of story for a site devoted to erotic stories?

Another question: Are you and Marsh Alien a couple?

Um... *snerk* ... You wanna field that one, Mr. Alien?

 

[showdolly]

I understand that this thread is mostly a joke. Yet, I suspect this particular "Anon" may actually be around these parts, so I'm posting here.

About the submission: Chad and Chelsea: Mutual Display

Comments:

Gentle but honest comments:

I gave this story a 4 out of 5 mainly due to a few small errors... In
Paragraph 6 you used the name Melinda when I think you meant to say
Chelsea.

Another: In Paragraph 9, you said "manor" when you meant "manner"

and finally, what does the phrase "tort him back" mean?

I'm an old fart and I don't know whether that's a piece of shorthand
for text messages or is a mistake. In any event, if it's shorthand, the
amount of time it takes to use the full word is of no consequence and
makes it a lot easier for people to read.

It was a great story - has the beginnings of a good series and my
critical comments should not deter you, but you might want to find an editor
here on this site.

This was by far the most helpful, honest comment I recieved. You are correct in that you have not deterred me, but in fact encouraged me. If you are around and see this, I welcome more feedback from you. (I may even need a bit of a reality check, so helpful and kind criticism from the likes of you is MOST welcome.) Thank you very much for taking the time to comment, and so very specifically. You have quite made your point, and I'll not only actually read my stories before submitting but will also utilize the volunteer editing program here. (I knew nothing of this program before submitting this story.)
You are kind, and helpful! Thanks again!

 

[MarshAlien]

Not bad at all
08/07/07 By: Anonymous in South Africa
Quite well written and thankfully not the usual blood & gore (or cum & precome) that one encounters on Literotica. Speaking of which, is this really the type of story for a site devoted to erotic stories?

Another question: Are you and Marsh Alien a couple?

Um... *snerk* ... You wanna field that one, Mr. Alien?

A couple of what?

Oh, you mean like a married couple. I get it. Sorry, I'm a little slow. Did that coffee have caffeine in it this morning, Sweet(Witch)ie?

No, we're more of an internet couple. Just like the Brady Bunch would have been if they only communicated by e-mail.

 

[SweetWitch]

A couple of what?

Oh, you mean like a married couple. I get it. Sorry, I'm a little slow. Did that coffee have caffeine in it this morning, Sweet(Witch)ie?

No, we're more of an internet couple. Just like the Brady Bunch would have been if they only communicated by e-mail.

The Brady Bunch!? I wanna be Marsha!

 

[MarshAlien]

The Brady Bunch!? I wanna be Marsha!

Well, I'm sure as hell not being Marsha. You also have to be Jan and that annoying little one, whatever the hell her name was. You have to be all the women, including Alice. It's a big responsibility but you are a witch.

 

[SweetWitch]

Well, I'm sure as hell not being Marsha. You also have to be Jan and that annoying little one, whatever the hell her name was. You have to be all the women, including Alice. It's a big responsibility but you are a witch.

Actually, I was thinking that I'll be Marsha, you'll be Greg and we can meet in that communal shower between the bedrooms. Hmmm... sounds like something for Incest/Taboo. Wanna write it?

 

[MarshAlien]

Actually, I was thinking that I'll be Marsha, you'll be Greg and we can meet in that communal shower between the bedrooms. Hmmm... sounds like something for Incest/Taboo. Wanna write it?

Me write it? I have Cast Adrift, and Who Snite, both lying around incomplete, and that frickin' Halloween story. But we can talk about it in the shower.

 

[SweetWitch]

Me write it? I have Cast Adrift, and Who Snite, both lying around incomplete, and that frickin' Halloween story. But we can talk about it in the shower.

Fine. I'll bring the soap. That stuff you use always makes me break out. Do you want me to bring the bathtime toys too?

 

[MarshAlien]

Fine. I'll bring the soap. That stuff you use always makes me break out. Do you want me to bring the bathtime toys too?

You can't help but bring my favorite bathtime toys with you.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Oh, Good God!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This feedback was sent by: Anonymous

Comments:

Jenny Jackson, girl crusader. Who you after this week? I'm telling you
hun, we all just hold our breath waiting for your very next utterance.
You trying to make us other girls look bad, aincha? Shutse Upse
Political Nutsy!

Actually, I really don't think I have to do anything to make YOU look bad, Anon. You do a fine job by yourself.

Have I attacked anyone? Have I come out with some really screwball political position? Are you sure you sent your rediculous feedback to the right person? Do you even know what planet you are on?

 

[SweetWitch]

Oh, Good God!!!!!!!!!!!!!



Actually, I really don't think I have to do anything to make YOU look bad, Anon. You do a fine job by yourself.

Have I attacked anyone? Have I come out with some really screwball political position? Are you sure you sent your rediculous feedback to the right person? Do you even know what planet you are on?

WTF was that? They are out in force this week.

 

[rgraham666]

He's baaaack!

Just got this in my e-mail.

you is sure big mouth. why you not write stead you make selly talk with other numbskells. canada dry boy you right now make story rite write right. okay

Hilarious!

 

[SweetWitch]

He's baaaack!

Just got this in my e-mail.



Hilarious!

I was wondering where that guy was hiding.

 

[Boxlicker101]

He's baaaack!

Just got this in my e-mail.

Quote:
you is sure big mouth. why you not write stead you make selly talk with other numbskells. canada dry boy you right now make story rite write right. okay


Hilarious!

I get those now and then too. I think this anon especially dislikes anal stories.

 

[MagicaPractica]

Deleted because after writing another story and working in the garden for a bit, I feel ashamed to have reacted so juveniley to someone who set out to troll me.