An editor for a Rough (controversial?) story

[Seamen]

A little background :
A little while ago I wrote my very (!) first story. Okay. So, I submitted the said story to Literotica. It got rejected. No issues. I'm a persistent kinda guy.

Then I set out to find myself an editor. The editor replied back. Okay. So I sent him the story. Two weeks pass by; no reply. I sent a polite reminder; still no reply.

So I set out to find yet another editor. He replied back; I sent him the said story. Two weeks and a polite reminder later, still no reply. Hmm, okay.

The story :
The thing is, the story isn't that controversial; it is a simple tale of two married couples swinging. So it's a little rough, but it is still a lot tamer than some other stories I've read here. It's got absolutely nothing that would shock a reader (in my opinion at least).

So, is there anybody here who'd be willing to take a look as to why the story got rejected, and as to whether there are any changes that can be made as to make it a candidate for a successful submission?

Thanks in advance

 

[PennLady]

If you got rejected, there should be a reason. If it's still on your list of stories, then where it said "pending" should say "rejected" (or whatever) and then if you click on it, there should at least be a general reason. Try that, and then maybe someone can help.

 

[Boxlicker101]

A little background :
A little while ago I wrote my very (!) first story. Okay. So, I submitted the said story to Literotica. It got rejected. No issues. I'm a persistent kinda guy.

Then I set out to find myself an editor. The editor replied back. Okay. So I sent him the story. Two weeks pass by; no reply. I sent a polite reminder; still no reply.

So I set out to find yet another editor. He replied back; I sent him the said story. Two weeks and a polite reminder later, still no reply. Hmm, okay.

The story :
The thing is, the story isn't that controversial; it is a simple tale of two married couples swinging. So it's a little rough, but it is still a lot tamer than some other stories I've read here. It's got absolutely nothing that would shock a reader (in my opinion at least).

So, is there anybody here who'd be willing to take a look as to why the story got rejected, and as to whether there are any changes that can be made as to make it a candidate for a successful submission?

Thanks in advance

First, what was the reason for rejection in the first place? There are certain taboos on Lit., and I'm sure you know them. I have never heard of a story being too rough, unless by "rough" you mean violent. Swinging couples are a staple on Literotica, and I have posted many tales of swingers or cheaters.

I am not officially an editor here but, if you email the story to me, I will look it over and either edit it or tell you why I believe the other editors have not done so.

I hope you know that most editors are also writers, and sometimes they are busy on their own work, especially with a contest approaching, such as the Halloween Contest. It may be the others just haven't finished editing yet.

 

[Seamen]

Thank you for replying

If it's still on your list of stories, then where it said "pending" should say "rejected" (or whatever) and then if you click on it, there should at least be a general reason.

There was. It said Rejected , and then there was a link Reason; it began with "Dear Writer" and suggested spelling and punctuation errors as possible causes for rejection. Not really helpful at all.

I am not officially an editor here but, if you email the story to me, I will look it over and either edit it or tell you why I believe the other editors have not done so.

I couldn't email you on account of your privacy settings, so I sent you a PM with the story instead. Thanks in advance

 

[PennLady]

If Box doesn't find a problem, I'd be willing to look it over as well. Sometimes, though, there's just a glitch.

 

[sr71plt]

Well, you posted that it wasn't controversial--indicating that's why it was rejected--and when pressed to give the rejection reason, it turns out that it was because of punctuation and spelling. These are not the same things. To get help, you need to correctly define the problem.

Hope box can help you stop spinning your wheels on the story.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Well, you posted that it wasn't controversial--indicating that's why it was rejected--and when pressed to give the rejection reason, it turns out that it was because of punctuation and spelling. These are not the same things. To get help, you need to correctly define the problem.

Hope box can help you stop spinning your wheels on the story.

Read your rather vitriolic comments back and consider whether you are fit to advise new writers. Penn and Box offered help - you never do.

 

[sr71plt]

Ah, crazy Elfin. The image I have of you is a leech on the ass.

This was just one of those mulberry bush threads. Reasons are given for rejection. Writers could actually read the reason before tromping off on sending their blood pressure up--and everyone else's--on a nonreason.

This isn't a kindergarten. Gotta face the real world one of these days.

And you don't give a crap for the thread or the OP; you're just a leech on my ass. You couldn't give any help on this topic at all. You haven't posted anything to Literotica for nearly six years--and that one wasn't erotica anyway. That was an essay on bra sizes. You don't demonstrate any knowledge of writing erotica or posting it to Literotica in the modern era.

 

[Boxlicker101]

Ah, crazy Elfin. The image I have of you is a leech on the ass.

This was just one of those mulberry bush threads. Reasons are given for rejection. Writers could actually read the reason before tromping off on sending their blood pressure up--and everyone else's--on a nonreason.

This isn't a kindergarten. Gotta face the real world one of these days.

And you don't give a crap for the thread or the OP; you're just a leech on my ass. You couldn't give any help on this topic at all. You haven't posted anything to Literotica for nearly six years--and that one wasn't erotica anyway. That was an essay on bra sizes. You don't demonstrate any knowledge of writing erotica or posting it to Literotica in the modern era.

I believe the reason given isn't completely true. As far as I have read so far, and the story is a short one, there is nothing much wrong with either spelling or punctuation. The problem seems to be long paragraphs, twenty lines or more. I will break them up, and make a few other corrections later today or tomorow.

 

[sr71plt]

That's great, Box.

 

[PennLady]

I believe the reason given isn't completely true. As far as I have read so far, and the story is a short one, there is nothing much wrong with either spelling or punctuation. The problem seems to be long paragraphs, twenty lines or more. I will break them up, and make a few other corrections later today or tomorow.

Way to go, Box.

You know I have to say some of this must be just arbitrary. I was skimming a story today (about Black Falcon, a superheroine thing) and they had huge paragraphs, some must have been 30 lines -- so how did that get through? Ah well. A little mystery in life.

 

[sr71plt]

Way to go, Box.

You know I have to say some of this must be just arbitrary. I was skimming a story today (about Black Falcon, a superheroine thing) and they had huge paragraphs, some must have been 30 lines -- so how did that get through? Ah well. A little mystery in life.

I tend toward long paragraphs too. I think after a while, the selection bot just goes to sleep as works by frequent contributors fly through. (I do some other things on the edge too.)

 

[lovecraft68]

This isn't a kindergarten. Gotta face the real world one of these days.

So face the real world! Like Pilot does

see it's right here!

Habu

habu, a bisexual former supersonic spy jet pilot, intelligence agent, and diplomat, is a published mainstream novelist and short story writer under another name and in another dimension of his life. For illustrated GM stories, visit Sabb, habu and Shabbu's web site.

Yeah. I think this speaks for itself.

For me just looking at supersonic jet pilot is worth reading this all day long.

 

[lovecraft68]

I tend toward long paragraphs too. I think after a while, the selection bot just goes to sleep as works by frequent contributors fly through. (I do some other things on the edge too.)

You post paragraphs that are longer than acceptable? Oh my God! Oh Pilot you are so fucking cool!!

I take back everything I have said about you being boring!

And you do other on the edge things too? Like what? single spacing instead of double?

You mad man! You bad boy! You wild thing! Hey ladies, parties over here!!

Sigh. Pathetic Pilot, really pathetic.

 

[sr71plt]

I do think that those seeking advice on posting to Literotica and writing erotica here would serve themselves well to do comparisons of the story lists, profiles--and posting elsewhere and to the marketplace of those offering advice (and making comments on other posters)--yes, I certainly do.