Absurdly Specific Word Choice Conundrums

[Pureotica]

"Wine-stained crown?"

I'm trying to find a poetic/evocative alternative to "purple cock-head," lol. The phrase is a bit cliché and I'm working on something where I'd like to come up with something more creative, but still accomplishes the mission.

And if anyone is interested I released two new poems today. Sorry to slip self promotion in an unrelated post. Only a little though, tbh.
I need to head out to work. I write in the mornings.

 

[TxRad]

"Plum colored" might work if it's large. "Grape colored" if it's not.

 

[XerXesXu]

The turgid tip, congested and roseate, like the face of hanged man projected on an umbrella.

 

[onehitwanda]

purple cock-head

tumescent, dusky peak.

throbbing syrah pillar.

puce-headed piledriver

meat popsicle

 

[WyreBendr0417]

Majestic purple mushroom.

 

[alohadave]

"Wine-stained crown?"

I tend not to think of body parts as being stained by anything. This makes me think that he should love the wine a little bit less.

 

[onehitwanda]

This makes me think that he should love the wine a little bit less.

SACRILEGE! Get him!

 

[SimonDoom]

How about "violet" or "aubergine?"

"Throbbing aubergine man-helmet."

Seriously, these are hard questions to answer, because so much depends on the very specific context and tone of the story, and we don't know that.

My advice, such as it is, would be that if you're not sure skip the flowery metaphor and just use a simple word to describe the subject.

 

[GrushaVashnadze]

What fascinating alternatives! But, at the end of the day, there's nothing wrong with calling a purple cockhead a "purple cockhead"?

Or calling a hot wet cunt a "hot wet cunt".

Or a gaping asshole a "gaping asshole".

There is, to be sure, a time for poetry. But sometimes there's a time for directness. Both have their places.

 

[Pureotica]

"Plum colored" might work if it's large. "Grape colored" if it's not.

Let's just hope blueberry doesn't come into play.

 

[Pureotica]

What fascinating alternatives! But, at the end of the day, there's nothing wrong with calling a purple cockhead a "purple cockhead"?

Or calling a hot wet cunt a "hot wet cunt".

Or a gaping asshole a "gaping asshole".

There is, to be sure, a time for poetry. But sometimes there's a time for directness. Both have their places.

I agree. I have nothing against a slick tight cunt when the circumstance calls for one. The project in question is a bit more poetic to start with.

 

[Pureotica]

I tend not to think of body parts as being stained by anything. This makes me think that he should love the wine a little bit less.

But he REALLY loves his wine.

 

[Pureotica]

The turgid tip, congested and roseate, like the face of hanged man projected on an umbrella.

This is true poetry. Let no one tell you different.

 

[Pureotica]

tumescent, dusky peak.

throbbing syrah pillar.

puce-headed piledriver

meat popsicle

I might have to write something just to work some of those in.

 

[Pureotica]

How about "violet" or "aubergine?"

"Throbbing aubergine man-helmet."

Seriously, these are hard questions to answer, because so much depends on the very specific context and tone of the story, and we don't know that.

My advice, such as it is, would be that if you're not sure skip the flowery metaphor and just use a simple word to describe the subject.

I'll figure it out. It's always fun to see the suggestions, because some of them will be hilarious. I don't like flowery prose, but I like evocative metaphors. I try to pare prose the bone, but express things in a way that surprises. If that makes sense. It comes from my poetry background.

 

[TxRad]

like the face of hanged man projected on an umbrella

Lets hope the umbrella is closed.

 

[SimonDoom]

I'll figure it out. It's always fun to see the suggestions, because some of them will be hilarious. I don't like flowery prose, but I like evocative metaphors. I try to pare prose the bone, but express things in a way that surprises. If that makes sense. It comes from my poetry background.

There's nothing like a great metaphor when you hit it on the nose. But the margin between "damn this is good" and "ouch" can be paper-thin.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

Mulberry is underused as a colour, I feel.

 

[Voboy]

If your preferred audience are Americans of the right age to have seen old McDonalds commercials?

The head of his cock looked like Grimace. A cynic would say my mouth started to water by association, but I think it was because I wanted to suck him.

Still. A burger would taste great, too... no! Focus! I opened my mouth, made eye contact, and went to work.

 

[Pureotica]

There's nothing like a great metaphor when you hit it on the nose. But the margin between "damn this is good" and "ouch" can be paper-thin.

No disagreement. I have a sense of when something isn't working, and I won't chase a bad idea over the cliff. I'll always change anything that makes a piece better. When writing emotion, a solid metaphor can draw an abstract concept one step closer to the concrete. A really good metaphor can actually put a reader in the emotional state. I wrote a story about a dust storm once, and from reinforcing the right details in the right repetition, I got feedback from people who actually said they could almost feel the grit of the dust. Not saying I pull that off every time. I don't event ty to go that deep most of the time. But at my best writing, I'm capable of it.

I'm good at metaphors, and I didn't start writing when I showed up here. I've been doing it elsewhere, in some form, since I was in Jr High. I have a sense of what I can do well, and where my weaknesses lie. I might as well exercise my strengths, in case I want to use them someday. And if something doesn't work, I've survived worse than a low scoring Lit story. I like to experiment, and if I'm not having fun, why bother?

I don't know everything about writing smut, and I'm humble enough to learn from other people, but still have to write a story that's mine in the end. I'm okay with my weirder and more experimental stuff being niche and scoring low. I'm not going to win the contests and be on the hot-lists anyway. I just want to be writing, and for my wonky projects to find the people who enjoy them.

No one can completely account for the reader. My lowest scoring poem on here, placed in a fairly prestigious contest when I was in college, and is literally the only writing I've gotten paid for. I'm not surprised it doesn't do well here. It isn't tailored to the audience. But it doesn't do much good languishing on my hard drive, so I might as well put it it can be found. It's not a masterpiece. It's not even up to my current standards, but it's work I'm proud of.

Not arguing with you at all. Just giving some perspective of where I'm coming from. It's worth it to me to take some risks in a project, and I'm okay with the consequences if it doesn't work out.

 

[SimonDoom]

Not arguing with you at all. Just giving some perspective of where I'm coming from. It's worth it to me to take some risks in a project, and I'm okay with the consequences if it doesn't work out.

I think that's the right attitude, especially at Literotica. It's the perfect literary environment for taking risks.

 

[ElectricBlue]

There's nothing like a great metaphor when you hit it on the nose. But the margin between "damn this is good" and "ouch" can be paper-thin.

I dunno. Purple man-helmet has to be perfection in any scenario...

 

[Rob_Royale]

I dunno. Purple man-helmet has to be perfection in any scenario...

This thread did not disappoint.

 

[onehitwanda]

I dunno. Purple man-helmet has to be perfection in any scenario...

Mulberry womb-mover.