a new idea: non talking sex

[NASCARaddicted]

I have this one fantasy:

there is this nude girl on a remote beach. She is laying on her belly, reading a book

Suddenly, a guy come bye. He sees the girl and gets horny. So he drops his pants and walks over to her. She doesn't notice him. So he pushes his rock hard dick into her pussy, without saying a word. The girl also says nothing she enjoys to be fucked by this stranger.

Do you think this could be an erotic story, or do I just watch too much unrealistic porn movies ?

 

[Guest]

If I answer the name calling will begin again.

 

[Tatewaki]

If I answer the name calling will begin again.

Fuck 'em. Say what's on your mind.

-T

 

[Tatewaki]

Do you think this could be an erotic story, or do I just watch too much unrealistic porn movies ?

You made me laugh w/that statement. Just as I was thinking "That's the plot of a few dozen porn's I've seen," you come out and ask if you watch too much porn.
I think we both do, NASCAR.

Cheers!

-T

 

[Tatewaki]

I have this one fantasy:

there is this nude girl on a remote beach. She is laying on her belly, reading a book

Suddenly, a guy come bye. He sees the girl and gets horny. So he drops his pants and walks over to her. She doesn't notice him. So he pushes his rock hard dick into her pussy, without saying a word. The girl also says nothing she enjoys to be fucked by this stranger.

Do you think this could be an erotic story, or do I just watch too much unrealistic porn movies ?

Just gave this a second read. Porn plot or no, such sex-centric stories are a definite welcome change of pace from the more literary Erotica that I read.

Sometimes you wanna get inside their head, other times you just wanna get your head inside 'em. Variety is definitely what porn -- sorry, Erotica, is all about.

Take care,

-T

 

[Guest]

Well, I was going to say that it sounded too much like "unrealistic porn", but, I guess, some at Lit like the non realistic stories. That's why I wasn't going to post. I didn't want to get into a big, long debate about pointless shit where after people think I am just some mean bitch as usual...

 

[Tatewaki]

Well, I was going to say that it sounded too much like "unrealistic porn", but, I guess, some at Lit like the non realistic stories. That's why I wasn't going to post. I didn't want to get into a big, long debate about pointless shit where after people think I am just some mean bitch as usual...

It definitely IS unrealistic porn. You called it right. Just that some readers want the two minute wank tale, others the 25,000 word saga.

Just like people, it takes all kinds.

-T

 

[Guest]

Just like people, it takes all kinds.

That's quite true. I was going to add "to each their own", but I didn't want to edit my post. lol

 

[Tatewaki]

That's quite true. I was going to add "to each their own", but I didn't want to edit my post. lol

-T

 

[Monazwx]

Interesting idea, but I'm wondering how you will develop the plot with no dialogue. Is there a plot?

There are sounds I assume, right? Sex isn't erotica without the senusal moans, pent-up groans and sighs of satifisation. With those, who needs dialogue right?

 

[deliciously_naughty]

I couldn't write it, but then I'm way too verbal.

 

[Chicklet]

The absolute most frustrating thing in the entire world is when you write a long response to an idea and when you go to send it, your computer freezes.

The thing about this story is that it * is * unrealistic. This is a scenario that many would fantasize about, a stranger fucking them senseless on the beach without a word of introduction, but something people would * know * could never happen in real life. They just want to think about it. The closest they will ever get to this fantasy is reading a story about it. (or watching a pornographic video, I suppose)

I would probably not be able to write this story because I put a lot of pressure on myself for dialog. I want the characters to be somewhat realistic, the chemistry between them to be believable, and the fact that they like each other to be apparent before they end up together.

To do this story you would have to take the POV of one of the two involved, rather than a 3rd person. With 3rd person you really need to have dialog to explain what the characters are thinking about. Without dialog, you’re going to have to be inside one of their brains, up close and personal. I would suggest the man.

The reason I would suggest the man as the character for this story is that he is the one that sees her first. She wouldn’t have much to say at this point “I was lying in the sun, enjoying the warmth on my naked skin…” he could have a better perspective. “I was walking on the beach. I could feel the tiny grains of sand squelching between my toes as I walked halfway in the water. Sometimes my eyes would drift out to sea, sometimes they would stray onto the shore, skimming over the bodies taking full advantage of the nude beach. Unfortunately for me, most of the patrons seemed to be older women and men with not so much to show off. But then I saw her.”

So, overall, this seems like it could be an interesting story. As usual I would like to write it, and as usual I doubt I would finish it.

Chicklet

 

[Quasimodem]

I have this one fantasy:

there is this nude girl on a remote beach. She is laying on her belly, reading a book

Suddenly, a guy come bye. He sees the girl and gets horny. So he drops his pants and walks over to her. She doesn't notice him. . . .

At EXACTLY this point, you have your first real plot crises.

 

[Un-registered]

rANDOM tHOUGHTS

To do this story you would have to take the POV of one of the two involved, rather than a 3rd person. With 3rd person you really need to have dialog to explain what the characters are thinking about.

Exactly why it has to be third person. The reader would need to know the thoughts of both, then that would be a substitute for dialogue, and probably be much better than dialogue could ever be.

An example is the cartoon of the boy throwing a stick and the dog chasing it. There are thought bubbles over both of their heads and both are thinking "I'm getting tired out doing this, but HE needs the exercise."

On the topic of "non talking sex", when I was very young (just after WWII) we used to classify girls. Class 1 was "Fantastic. Must have" etc. Class 8 was "OK to take to bed provided you are allowed to keep your fingers in your ears the whole time."

 

[finfan]

the only thong I can say is that this is a fantasy, and if the person thinks it would ever really happen they need to get off drugs, and out of te fantasy world and back to reality.

 

[Chicklet]

Re: rANDOM tHOUGHTS

Exactly why it has to be third person.

I still think that 3rd person wouldn't work. I'll have to write it to prove it to you <wink>

Chicklet

 

[flawed_ethics]

I could imagine it being better first person. Fancy for a minute:

Story is about a woman who, thanks to some fortunate time off, gets to spend the day reaxing, tanning at the beach. She finds a nice secluded spot on the beach, breaks out a book and begins reading while soaking in the rays.

As she turns over on her belly, the story takes an erotic turn (the hero of the story embraces the damsel in distress and they make love - whatever). She gets distracted so much that the caressing of her thighs by a stranger, although not unnoticed, don't disturb her. As she continues to read about the lusty couple, the strange makes his advance. He pulls down her bikini thong and begins to fuck her. She gets carried away in it - sorta a pseudo-role-playing thing maybe.

In the end, they get off, her resting in the sand, the mysterious stranger disappers. Just once again, her and her book.

One could tack on "did she just imagine it, or was it real", but that'd be too corny.

I like the idea - certaintly not and in-depth story, but a nice little read if written properly. It could be angled that age isn't a factor (could be a 20-yr old or a 45-yr old or even 70 yr-old - whatever your mind pictures). One less limiting factor to worry about.

 

[cybercon]

the only thong I can say is that this is a fantasy, and if the person thinks it would ever really happen they need to get off drugs, and out of te fantasy world and back to reality.

With a little twist, you could keep it somewhat realistic...

What if the woman had been out at a club the night before, dancing and having a good time. As the night wears on, she notices an attractive man staring at her. The two eventually end up next to each other on the dance floor, and share some intimate contact. With the loud music, they never speak, but it's clear that there's a sexual attraction between them. At some point they seperate, and she doesn't see him for the rest of the night (maybe he went home with someone else). The next day out on the beach, she's lying there thinking about the night before when the mystery man appears again... The sound of the waves crashing on the beach are loud like the music was in the club. No need to talk...

I had something vaguely similar happen to me years ago, back when I was still cool. I had met a woman at a club, and we just briefly shared a little small talk. "How's it going", "Nice shot" (we were playing pool), stuff like that... I didn't even get her name. Anyway, I left with my friends, and about two hours later she showed up at the condo where I was staying, and was let in by a friend. I had already gone to sleep. She came into my room and I woke up to the silhouette of her taking her clothes off. She climbed into my bed and we did "the dance" without ever saying anything to each other. It was very surreal, and I admit that it was a once in a life time kind of experience... but I'm here to say that just because something seems unlikely does not mean that it can't happen...

 

[redathena]

I have this one fantasy:

there is this nude girl on a remote beach. She is laying on her belly, reading a book

Suddenly, a guy come bye. He sees the girl and gets horny. So he drops his pants and walks over to her. She doesn't notice him. So he pushes his rock hard dick into her pussy, without saying a word. The girl also says nothing she enjoys to be fucked by this stranger.

Do you think this could be an erotic story, or do I just watch too much unrealistic porn movies ?

I think you have a great idea for a story here. Its very romantic and the fact that she's reading a book at the time adds on to the fantasy/romance quality of the idea. The fact that she reads implies something about her. Most readers i know like to lose themselves in a book, so why cant she lose herself to the book and to you all at once??