a new haiku

[jsh3180]

This is not necessarily "erotic"..but I view this website periodically....I posted one haiku here months ago.....tonight I am "lol" inspired again......the title is:

My Son's Friend....haiku by Scott Haskell

sun shallow water
skimboard so graceful natural
ouch that hurts so bad

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haha...last line alternative is:

coral greets my face

i am young so what

it does not matter


----------------heck thats a poem in itself.....have a great evening

 

[wildsweetone]

Hi and welcome to Literotica jsh3180.

Glad you came on in and wandered around.

The Poetry Forum might be an interesting place for your poems. Or, you could also submit them by going to your own Author Submission page.

Poetry Forum:
https://forum.literotica.com/forumdisplay.php?s=&daysprune=&forumid=25

Enjoy your stay.

 

[snooper]

My Son's Friend....haiku by Scott Haskell

An eighteen syllable haiku?

 

[wildsweetone]

Ahh now I wondered the same thing... but don't know enough about poetry to ask or comment. I think there are different syllable amounts for haikus but the 17 syllable is the only one I've had anything to do with.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Well, there's such a thing as haiku form, and there's such a thing as haiku spirit.

I don't mind not having 5-7-5 syllables, but the idea of adding a title to a haiku is like adding a title to a metphor. It just ain't done.


---dr.M.