Hey all:
I've just had my very first story published here. This is the first story I’ve ever written anywhere. I’ve been an avid reader on Literotica, and felt inspired to try my hand at it.
I’d really appreciate some feedback on it. The title is “Songstress” https://www.literotica.com/s/songstress-1 in the Mature Category. The sex scene comes at the end as a natural progression from the rest of the story, and the focus is heavy on romance and music, with a significant age difference between the two main characters. It’s already rolled off the New Stories list, so you’ll have to look it up alphabetically.
Here are some excerpts:
The green overhead sign said, 'Charlotte 25 mi.' My heart began to race, and the adrenaline flowed, reviving me from my 14-hour driving marathon. At last! I was so close to finally seeing face to face the woman I had adored from afar.
Even now, I could see her stunning beauty in my mind, and I glanced at my phone once again to see my favourite picture of her, that dazzling smile lighting up my world. Her picture is what kept me going through this thousand-mile journey from my town just east of Toronto, all the way down to North Carolina…
… I stepped out from behind Mandy and managed to blurt out the greeting I had rehearsed endlessly in my mind:
"Hi, I'm looking for a Ms H.t. South? (H.t. South was her FB handle). I believe she needs some cheering up, so I thought I'd bring some music to her."
Beth's blue eyes flew open in shock as recognition sank in:
"Joel? Is that you? Oh my God, what are you doing here? How? Why?"
At which point further, words seem to fail her…
… Suddenly the years melted away and we were just two people madly in love with each other. Our lips came together in a desperate, long overdue kiss. She tasted of strawberries and coffee, and I never tasted a better combination. It was a kiss of deep affirmations, unfulfilled longings, and desperate hopes finally come true…
I've just had my very first story published here. This is the first story I’ve ever written anywhere. I’ve been an avid reader on Literotica, and felt inspired to try my hand at it.
I’d really appreciate some feedback on it. The title is “Songstress” https://www.literotica.com/s/songstress-1 in the Mature Category. The sex scene comes at the end as a natural progression from the rest of the story, and the focus is heavy on romance and music, with a significant age difference between the two main characters. It’s already rolled off the New Stories list, so you’ll have to look it up alphabetically.
Here are some excerpts:
The green overhead sign said, 'Charlotte 25 mi.' My heart began to race, and the adrenaline flowed, reviving me from my 14-hour driving marathon. At last! I was so close to finally seeing face to face the woman I had adored from afar.
Even now, I could see her stunning beauty in my mind, and I glanced at my phone once again to see my favourite picture of her, that dazzling smile lighting up my world. Her picture is what kept me going through this thousand-mile journey from my town just east of Toronto, all the way down to North Carolina…
… I stepped out from behind Mandy and managed to blurt out the greeting I had rehearsed endlessly in my mind:
"Hi, I'm looking for a Ms H.t. South? (H.t. South was her FB handle). I believe she needs some cheering up, so I thought I'd bring some music to her."
Beth's blue eyes flew open in shock as recognition sank in:
"Joel? Is that you? Oh my God, what are you doing here? How? Why?"
At which point further, words seem to fail her…
… Suddenly the years melted away and we were just two people madly in love with each other. Our lips came together in a desperate, long overdue kiss. She tasted of strawberries and coffee, and I never tasted a better combination. It was a kiss of deep affirmations, unfulfilled longings, and desperate hopes finally come true…
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