How would YOU tell the Ugly Duckling story?

[joy_of_cooking]

Why would an ugly duckling story have to include revenge? Seems like an odd take. How about: a plain wife and her dumpy unappreciative husband move in next to an older fit man. The fit neighbor gets the wife in shape and she blossoms into a beauty. Wife and fit neighbor hump, fall in love, and decide to marry. The dumpy husband is happily tossed aside. Tell the story from the perspective of the fit neighbor and you’d have a winner for the LW category.

Well, would you look at that? Intervention Wife by MajorRewrite is currently at 4.72 in LW with 77k views.

 

[JaxRhapsody]

Why would an ugly duckling story have to include revenge? Seems like an odd take. How about: a plain wife and her dumpy unappreciative husband move in next to an older fit man. The fit neighbor gets the wife in shape and she blossoms into a beauty. Wife and fit neighbor hump, fall in love, and decide to marry. The dumpy husband is happily tossed aside. Tell the story from the perspective of the fit neighbor and you’d have a winner for the LW category.

Doesn't have to- couldn't hoit.

 

[AchtungNight]

Why would an ugly duckling story have to include revenge? Seems like an odd take. How about: a plain wife and her dumpy unappreciative husband move in next to an older fit man. The fit neighbor gets the wife in shape and she blossoms into a beauty. Wife and fit neighbor hump, fall in love, and decide to marry. The dumpy husband is happily tossed aside. Tell the story from the perspective of the fit neighbor and you’d have a winner for the LW category.

For bonus points, have a passing high-ranking member of a Swingers’ Club from my ficverse pick up the disappointed husband and take him to an Adamski Sorrow Charm School for a makeover.

Makeover!

 

[MajorRewrite]

Well, would you look at that? Intervention Wife by MajorRewrite is currently at 4.72 in LW with 77k views.

I’ve often encouraged writers to tell fun sex stories from the “other man’s” perspective in LW, but almost nobody does. The revenge guys don’t do fun sex and the cuckold guys ain’t interested in the other man’s point of view. It’s a missed opportunity to create good stories (or at least stories that I’d like ).

 

[jaF0]

Why would an ugly duckling story have to include revenge?

It doesn't. That's why I worded it to be more open.

Considering the number of opinions and approaches here, I ask again if there is enough for a Challenge?

 

[AchtungNight]

Per one of my favorite Ugly Duckling characters, Revenge is a sucker’s game.

Yes, David Xanatos is an Ugly Duckling. Ask his dad.

 

[theWollstonecraftWoman]

With a big black duck impregnating her with half-duck half-swan eggs.

 

[SeraphNocturne]

Sounds more like The Craft.

I can see that… only the coven in The Craft turned out to be a bunch of power hungry bitches.

 

[jaF0]

Would anybody go the Trans route?

Consider Caroline Cossey, Carmen Carrera, Leyna Bloom or similar. Geeky guys who became internationally known models. How would they interact with bullies from their past Suppose there was a secret crush involved somehow.

 

[JaxonHill]

I would be fond of a storyline that could be considered typical but hopefully there would be some sophistication brought to the table.

MMC grows up in a family that has no concept of healthy eating or healthy lifestyles.

Through a personal journey that started after being diagnosed with Diabetes at the age of 19, MMC learns about health, nutrition, and the food system to the extent that he ends up getting his own farm and raising his own food.

While offering his wares at a local farmers market, he gets approached by 3 former female classmates, who think they recognize him, but they can't believe that he's now in incredible shape and his new farmer-lifestyle.

One of the friends always thought he was smart and admired that aspect of him even when he was overweight and sloppy. She pursues trying to get to know him by showing up to the farmer's market every week for several months before things finally click and their relationship progresses.

Eventually, MMC must wrestle with the fact that he still struggles to see himself for who he is, since he is still feeling the insecurities of his youth. These insecurities threaten to send him down the path of isolation even though he wants nothing more than to be loved.

His desire to be loved, and the pressure he feels causes MMC to make some decisions that threaten the chances he has with the FMC who has been pursuing him at the Farmer's Market. Ultimately, this story would generate a nice happy ending where the FMC dies causing MMC to realize that he's playing with fate. MMC is now finally capable of finding love.

 

[Codoc24]

I would write it where a virgin guy has a small and horribly misshapen penis. (ever since birth) Anytime he gets a woman in bed, she either laughs or runs away. He finally meets a woman who falls in love with him before she knows about his penis. Then, when she does see it, she accepts it and him for who he is. She strokes, kisses, and sucks it until he cums. Then his dick transforms into the most beautiful magnificent dick ever. I'm not saying it is super large. It's the perfect size for the woman. The man and his cock gives the woman the most amazing orgasms in the world and as many as she wants. They lived HEA. That is a good kind of revenge.

 

[LetsMisBehave]

I would be tempted to go the lack of confidence/confidence route where moving from expecting to be rejected to expecting to be given a fair chance just improves perceptions.
The makeover route probably also still works for both sexes - moving from a slob to a three piece suit wearer or from shapeless baggy jumpers to being a sweater girl can still make a change.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

I've been toying for quite some time with the idea of a socially outcast girl finding some nerve, making herself over and getting revenge on all the cool girls by shagging all of their boyfriends. I'd have to write it with enough nuance to avoid it being tropey.

 

[jaF0]

A bug has been planted in Laurel's ear.

 

[MrPixel]

Okay, here goes. Not one that I would write, but one that I lived...

Girl in my West Coast high school class year was not in my circle of friends, but kind of adjacent. She was a wallflower; not unattractive, but not a head-turner, either. Sort of bland. She was always in the shadow of her sister one year younger, an outgoing cutie who was in the circle of young ladies I tended to hang with. I would have liked to have dated the cutie, but she was über-popular and gravitated toward the football guys, or I got the impression she did.

Fast forward to the 10-year class reunion party. The older sister and I happened to be sitting at the same table, comparing notes about unfortunate recent life events. She was career military and was quite interesting to talk to, had physically blossomed from skinny to subtle curves, and we connected, both commenting on how she didn't fare so well in school socially because of the sister thing. We both happened to live on the East Coast, and made plans to meet since I had infrequent opportunities to travel to her city.

Cutting to the ending... we dated briefly. The distance prevented it from turning into anything serious, and she "found someone" shortly after our time together. But my memories of her are fond.

Sadly, the backstory is unsuitable for LitE since it started because of the high school social experience. No sex in any of it, not even any attraction, but we know how touchy the <18 situation is here. Shame.

 

[AchtungNight]

I've been toying for quite some time with the idea of a socially outcast girl finding some nerve, making herself over and getting revenge on all the cool girls by shagging all of their boyfriends. I'd have to write it with enough nuance to avoid it being tropey.

Be sure to throw in at least one girlfriend also. If the story can include it. Next to Gideon, Roxy is my favorite Scott Pilgrim Evil Ex.

 

[MajorRewrite]

Ultimately, this story would generate a nice happy ending where the FMC dies causing MMC to realize that he's playing with fate. MMC is now finally capable of finding love.

The FMC dying = happy ending?

 

[Lovecraft_Lore]

The best form of revenge ... involves a shotgun.

I have tried a few times to write some type of ugly duck revenge story, it comes across like those strange over the top wish fulliment stories of the guy who is a billionaire, ex-navy seal, business owner, body builder. Or the 'hero' of the story is a murderous jerk, OR it breaks some lit rule about underage something.

In real life the person doing best from high school is likely our school's weed dealer. He got real estate broker training and is now making bank or the guy who dropped out and got training as a welder- he was making six figures out on the oil fields while most everyone else was going into debt at college.

 

[NoTalentHack]

 

[NoTalentHack]

The FMC of After the Future is Gone has an ugly-duckling-gone-bad backstory. Pudgy nerd, gets taken advantage of by jock and his girlfriend as part of a cruel prank, goes to college and gets in shape, starts breaking up couples like the jock and his girlfriend. Escalates, realizes she’s become the kind of monster she hates, and tries to get her shit together.

 

[lovecraft68]

Revenge is meh level motivator for me. Normally not my thing and this moves even more towards "two wrongs not equalling a right."

Your opinion/ideal in a perfect world. Being better than the other person, taking the high road and the expression which grates on me to no end "They're not worth it."

My philosophy, both in my more serious work and real life is Lex Talionis or takers take until they're taken. You know who came up with "They're not worth it." the ones who aren't worth it. The ones who shit on people, attack them, and hurt with impunity do it because they know a lot of people won't sink to their level.

Turn the other cheek gets that cheek slapped, mercy is lost upon those you show it to. They only stop when stopped. The bully stops when he runs into the kid who hands him his ass and that extends to any example.

So I enjoy revenge stories whether they be violent or simply in the case of an ugly duckling the suddenly beautiful and successful woman or man turns around and spits on all those that did that to them, they don't bask in the sudden adoration of lemmings they tell them to piss off.

I had an event in past that fits this. I was a foster kid and that was known so myself and the girl who was in the same foster home were nick named the pound puppies. We were made fun of at every turn had few friends-okay she had a few I had none, and often sat with each other at a table by ourselves at lunch while other kids called us names.

But I made the baseball team, and I was good. Damn good, best pitcher on the team and could run down anything hit my way. After a game where I threw a shut out, had three hits and made a nice diving play the next day I have my lunch tray-because us pound puppies got free lunch being poor and all-and I'm heading for my usual table and these asshat jocks with their slutty Barbie wannabe girlfriends had the nerve to call out to me and say I could sit with them

What an honor, right? So I walked over, told them to fuck themselves and threw my tray in the top dogs face. Hilarity ensued(BTW I was already taking Kenpo and had a mean streak a mile wide and a dead red temper) They never asked me to join them again, but I never heard pound puppy again either, at least to my face.

Being a good person is often over rated and detrimental to ones survival. Unless of course you got to grow up nice and soft with no adversity, then you get to say things like "Oh, revenge is wrong"

 

[JaxonHill]

The FMC dying = happy ending?

Glad someone caught it

 

[Euphony]

Being a good person is often over rated and detrimental to ones survival. Unless of course you got to grow up nice and soft with no adversity, then you get to say things like "Oh, revenge is wrong"

There's a wide chasm between "not my thing/not getting enough motivational fuel from the concept" to led a pillow soft life and any disinterest in revenge writes = "revenge is wrong" and clearly comes from a place of privilege.

 

[lovecraft68]

There's a wide chasm between "not my thing/not getting enough motivational fuel from the concept" to led a pillow soft life and any disinterest in revenge writes = "revenge is wrong" and clearly comes from a place of privilege.

When all you know is comfort you can afford to have a different moral compass. That's fact, not fiction.

I see that in the differences between myself and my wife and our views on things. She was raised in a good family with good support and fortunate enough to avoid seeing the shittier side of life. Being raised that way puts you on a good path, college isn't a pipe dream its a given as is everything that follows.

She's very spiritual, forgiving, has a great heart and wants to see the good in people because she has. She's positive and at times not very grounded. I'm cynical and pragmatic. I keep her in reality and she keeps me from really giving up on there being anything worth a flying fuck in this shitbox we call society.

In the end good for her, good for anyone like her, I'm happy to see people happy and well adjusted. But if you don't think that gives you a better outlook on life than coming from a broken home, addiction, poverty, and other dysfunctions some are raised with, well you showed what side of the coin you're on.

That and your defensiveness.

You like to come across as Literotica Yoda with all your fancy thoughts and deep insights, but end of the day, you're as easy as it gets because you can't resist the bait when people drop it.

People like me know people like you.

That's what pretentiousness sounds like, how do you like it?

 

[Euphony]

Totally unnecessary "LC is spooled up again" foolishness.

Seriously man. My post even self-poked fun at my inability to write a plausible revenge tale because it's not a healthy space for ME to inhabit.

You take offense, fighting some culture war?, Paul Blartting the AH as you occasionally do which undercuts the contributions you've made here (and still do but the grievance ratio is moving in the wrong direction.)



Then, big ol' assumptions, personal attacks on how I handle myself here, the nature of my post, my language, etc.

It boggles why you care. You make a sport of trashing the place, those who frequent, perceived administration flaws, injustices (many valid, many not), or possible slights not even your own like it matters, like it EVER mattered (we've both been here long enough to know it truly doesn't.)

If I make rational statements. If f I don't engage in inet stupidity or, god help me I suggest how utterly silly this all is to defuse the situation, I'm OF COURSE an arrogant prick.

If I stoop to your level and go all 11 year old playing Counterstrike, I'm sure you'd chalk up another one of "only you are counting/care" Ws then too.

Same if I just ignore you.

You argue in bad faith. Not often but enough it's now become tiresome. It foolish. It's beneath you, your work, and MOST of your contributions to the AH.

AHer's are, on the whole, smarter than you tend to give them credit. They don't need you pointing things out like you seem to think they do.

They've more than figured me out. They've figured you out too.