Two naughty college girls escape detention naked...

[LupusDei]

Two naughty college girls escape detention naked...

...thanks to clothes eating telepathic alien nanites forging a key in the palm of the worried sick blonde, while the balsy, outdoorsy redhead is trying to find something to pick the lock.

Question is, why they got locked up by some administrative type in an rather ordinary room rather than given out to campus police? They're in perceived great danger if they let the situation evolve.

One or both might be naked at the moment of the arrest, and fail to explain this condition even to themselves (remember the clothes eating nanites). And yes, this was not by far first their similar transgression.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Two naughty college girls escape detention naked...

...thanks to clothes eating telepathic alien nanites forging a key in the palm of the worried sick blonde, while the balsy, outdoorsy redhead is trying to find something to pick the lock.

Question is, why they got locked up by some administrative type in an rather ordinary room rather than given out to campus police? They're in perceived great danger if they let the situation evolve.

One or both might be naked at the moment of the arrest, and fail to explain this condition even to themselves (remember the clothes eating nanites). And yes, this was not by far first their similar transgression.

As I have said, barely dressed women look better with a little something on, like footgear. Have one in sneakers and ankle socks, and the other with heels, nylons, and a garter belt with straps. (No panties, however.) I'm sure those aliens would agree.

 

[LupusDei]

As I have said, barely dressed women look better with a little something on, like footgear. Have one in sneakers and ankle socks, and the other with heels, nylons, and a garter belt with straps. (No panties, however.) I'm sure those aliens would agree.

Generally, I have fetish level fixation on total nudity. To the point I strongly dislike tattoos, for them not not being easily removable and thus, in my perception, a tattooed woman can never be truly naked and that's a serious deficiency for my appeal.

However, situationally, I could and may agree. The preceding scene, the one I'm missing clarity and asking about here could well be. Especially given how I need some unused material still on her to be reprocessed into said newly forged key. And footwear they almost definitely have on, this being in school during business hours.

The alien(s) -- or whatever it is -- may not really care, being microscopic dust. But it love to settle on/(in?) human skin (where it is unually in its wet form, a clear slightly oily soft gel) and seems to prefer that skin uncovered. I guess, for ease of spreading and access to resources, and perhaps that's how it sees clothes, as an obstacle, but also a favorite resource for self-replicating.

And even our point of view blonde wasn't aware of its presence up to this point herself, even though carrying and spreading it, and unknowingly communicating with it for some time (at least a week I think), despite her clothes repeatedly disappearing and people behaving increasingly strange.

Plot wise, this point is the culmination, the god is out of the machine, reality is breached enough for the world as we know it to effectively come to an end as the merger into the hive mind happens, ascending the combination being of those two girls ad the nano thing to near godhood. Next and last scene is from different viewpoint.

But I still want to know why and by whom we got locked into this room, afraid to death, and still, attempts getting out to run somehow seemingly did make sense?

 

[gunhilltrain]

Generally, I have fetish level fixation on total nudity. To the point I strongly dislike tattoos, for them not not being easily removable and thus, in my perception, a tattooed woman can never be truly naked and that's a serious deficiency for my appeal.

However, situationally, I could and may agree. The preceding scene, the one I'm missing clarity and asking about here could well be. Especially given how I need some unused material still on her to be reprocessed into said newly forged key. And footwear they almost definitely have on, this being in school during business hours.

The alien(s) -- or whatever it is -- may not really care, being microscopic dust. But it love to settle on/(in?) human skin (where it is unually in its wet form, a clear slightly oily soft gel) and seems to prefer that skin uncovered. I guess, for ease of spreading and access to resources, and perhaps that's how it sees clothes, as an obstacle, but also a favorite resource for self-replicating.

And even our point of view blonde wasn't aware of its presence up to this point herself, even though carrying and spreading it, and unknowingly communicating with it for some time (at least a week I think), despite her clothes repeatedly disappearing and people behaving increasingly strange.

Plot wise, this point is the culmination, the god is out of the machine, reality is breached enough for the world as we know it to effectively come to an end as the merger into the hive mind happens, ascending the combination being of those two girls ad the nano thing to near godhood. Next and last scene is from different viewpoint.

But I still want to know why and by whom we got locked into this room, afraid to death, and still, attempts getting out to run somehow seemingly did make sense?

We all have different fetishes. I agree with you about the tattoos. I don't think most young people can think that far into the future. I'm starting to see women in their fifties and even sixties with their "hot girl summer" tattoos of earlier decades. Buy that point their markings look pretty ridiculous.

Just microscopic dust? I thought they'd be like the naughty aliens in Mars Attacks! I love it when they're watching The Dukes of Hazzard on their spaceship's screen. As for your plot, it's kind of late and I have to think about it. To start with, the motives of the aliens are rather opaque. You're imaginative but sometimes I don't know what you're talking about. My imagination tends to be more prosaic.

 

[LupusDei]

Just microscopic dust? I thought they'd be like the naughty aliens in Mars Attacks! I love it when they're watching The Dukes of Hazzard on their spaceship's screen. As for your plot, it's kind of late and I have to think about it. To start with, the motives of the aliens are rather opaque. You're imaginative but sometimes I don't know what you're talking about. My imagination tends to be more prosaic.

Aliens on itself in this is not at all a focus, rather just a vehicle for kink, with is public nudity. I know nothing about their initial goals nor are they really aliens or even just our own games gone wrong. They're barely conscious before merging with a host, and perhaps all that stopped them from going for grey goo apocalypse was the emotions encountered upon that first contact. That happened when...

***

Gwen dragged her roommate Anne (our 3rd limited pov) with her for a hike in the nearby forested hills, possibly trespassing a closed zone -- to Anne's horror Gwen confessed they're in an abandoned army training ground. Gwen's attempt to explore a derelict vehicle of vague description they had come across ended with its collapse in a puff of dust that covered Anne, mostly.

They went further. Anne slipped on a log and fell in a pond. Gwen decided to skinny dip. Anne didn't strip completely, but somehow was naked in the water anyway. To quite a surprise for both girls they ended making love. Afterwards, their clothes were nowhere to be found, so they had to sneak back into dorms still nude.

Strange things started to happen around them. Mostly because their clothes kept disappearing in the most inconvenient moments. Like Anne went to visit someone living nearby (likely regarding her studies, but not yet decided whom exactly), and upon arrival she's nude without knowing it, for a delightful eyeful of whomever. Perhaps, but not necessarily leading into sex.

Such inadvertent lewd behavior puts them in conflict though, especially, but not limited to, with the local authorities, after such episodes as when everyone in the school's swimming pool ended up nude in an unexplainable way, but somehow they were signed out as likely causing that, despite no clear proof to that.

It may grow directly from that, but the conflict likely comes to head at yet another later episode, I don't yet know clearly.

They end up locked up and willing to escape, urgently. The entity reveals itself. The girls merge with it.

A guy (speaking in first person) observe the formerly shy Anne confidently walking through school nude while getting compliments for her (apparently imagined) dress from people who used to chastise her for improper behavior. He hail her and wonder about it. She's surprised he's seeing her nudity. Bit later, he goes to the female dorm as on command, where he has sex with both, but by the end of that it's not quite him, he's Anne, and Gwen, and something else entirely.

***

So, I know most scenes, everything that happens regarding kink and the main fantasy plot as far there's any to speak about, but little about the mundane life, the realistic plot, how the social conflict about them builds up and explode.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Hah, you went ahead and explained the whole thing all over again!

"The entity reveals itself and the girls merge with it." Do you mean those microscopic aliens? What are the girls like after this "merging?" From what I can gather, it seems like a rather downbeat ending. It reminds me of something from the original Outer Limits show, which usually had episodes with very dark endings.

If I was trying this, I might get rid of the whole aliens concept as a needless complication. But then the story gets a bit dull without them. That's the problem with these "suddenly naked in public" stories. The writers have to jump through hoops to set up the scenario, then they have to come up with what happens next. I suppose that is why I've never written one myself.

Also, college students don't go into detention; high school students do. But then you run into Lit's age limits.

 

[LupusDei]

Hah, you went ahead and explained the whole thing all over again!

"The entity reveals itself and the girls merge with it." Do you mean those microscopic aliens? What are the girls like after this "merging?" From what I can gather, it seems like a rather downbeat ending. It reminds me of something from the original Outer Limits show, which usually had episodes with very dark endings.

If I was trying this, I might get rid of the whole aliens concept as a needless complication. But then the story gets a bit dull without them. That's the problem with these "suddenly naked in public" stories. The writers have to jump through hoops to set up the scenario, then they have to come up with what happens next. I suppose that is why I've never written one myself.

Also, college students don't go into detention; high school students do. But then you run into Lit's age limits.

The ending will be hard to write, and the jump into a random first person is in large part to make it possible as I imagine. It should be absolutely cathartic for the characters, but yes, can be read as totally horrifying for some when one thinks it through afterwards. Yes, very much Outer Limits -escue. That's fine and even indeed intended.

Yes, the [aliens or whatever] is there only for a weak excuse for a string of totally ridiculously absurd situations that are all on in themselves all the whole and only reason for this to be written out to weave them together. In those, very peculiar detail and attitudes matter for my full satisfaction, so realistically nobody would ever be able to write this for me. That's fine, no problems there.

But that need contrast and context to even work, even though it's all superficial fluff, boring reality. So I need drama. Mundane, ordinary social drama that indeed has absolutely nothing to do with the [aliens or whatever], but everything with the girls running around naked uncontrollably. Although, some tie in [the watever] might be nice as well, military or MiB types suddenly lurking around or some such might work to heighten the perceived danger -- but whatever it is it comes out of fellow humans.

You're absolutely right about detention. And yes, that's exactly where my problem is, as I have said repeatedly even though you seem to be hell bent on discussing whatever else. Making it high school and the whole a silly teen thing with zero (vaginal) sex may or not be easy cop out, but not to be discussed here. And doesn't cast my problem away either, only may lower the bar somewhat.

(And yes, even any sex as such on it self is superfluous to this, but nice decoration and intensification, plus plausibly more broad appeal).

And what the [aliens or whatever] are is for me to know -- it's a collective, many constantly reproducing when wet microbes, but it's all one thing, one mind --, but there's zero intentions to hold anyone's hand and explain it overtly. There's never a big block of exposition spewing made up technoblabble, no, not even in that scene where the thing emerges from stealth mode. With on itself is all but written down (living in my head for years as it is), and not really up to discussion apart of how it might be superficially informed by the previous scene -- with is the intended subject of this discussion.

So once again, how we got there, in that damn room? Locked up in non-detention detention, some kind of "citizen's arrest," but by whom and why exactly? Anne is afraid for her life, Gwen seems to think they just need to get out and away and it will somehow go right. So the great danger closing on on them likely isn't just police, they're not that naive. But who is chasing them, for who's benefit they are all but abducted?

• The Men in Black?
• Military?
• Slaves selling pimps?
• Gwen's slighted boyfriend?
• Anne's dad?
• The pastor?
• Some other pure load of fear that's not even real, but entirely in Anne's imagination?
• Who else?

How that situation is resolved, probably even rather radically, isn't ever shown either. Its implied it indeed was, and there might be or not some hints dropped in the next chapter (with is from the different viewpoint), but it never truly mattered anyway, fom my standpoint.

 

[LupusDei]

"The entity reveals itself and the girls merge with it." Do you mean those microscopic aliens? What are the girls like after this "merging?"

To be clear. The "merging" is only a mind meld thing. Physically, they're still very much the same girls. Just without the last shred of modesty and their skin is slightly oiled up permanently... and probably invincible and/or regenerating, with is never overtly tested other than, that key that appears in Anne's palm out of nowhere is implied to be red hot, but she apparently don't care. And yes, they can disintegrate objects on touch, create new out apparently from nothing (actually rather 3D printing from scavenged material on site, but again, there's never need/opportunity to demonstrate that beyond said key and disappearing clothing previously), of course they're telepathic between themselves and they are near-all-powerful mind readers/controllers as far the infection and thus the network of their <<fairy dust - stir with water to activate>> microscopic alien helpers reach. With at this point is pretty much entire campus if not town, and spreading further fast. So yes, the story's over, a godess has landed. Well, at least for pretty much anyone else unless they let them in to the hive; one such case is illustrated at the end.

 

[gunhilltrain]

I'm actually not hell-bent on discussing anything. Maybe you're taking me a little too seriously. Perhaps, at this point, not I or anybody else can answer the questions or advice you are seeking. Maybe it's best just to pull into yourself now and write it as you best see fit. No one else can know how to do that. I mean that in the best possible way, not as a criticism.

 

[LupusDei]

I'm actually not hell-bent on discussing anything. Maybe you're taking me a little too seriously. Perhaps, at this point, not I or anybody else can answer the questions or advice you are seeking. Maybe it's best just to pull into yourself now and write it as you best see fit. No one else can know how to do that. I mean that in the best possible way, not as a criticism.

Yeah, sorry for that bit.

Hoped on some little brainstorming about this secondary track in that story, because I really not know much about it.

Just writing it out and hoping something will spark until I actually get to those missing 20-30% of it in the middle, well... I know people claim it works for some. I see how it could in a free form whereas there just beginning and vague target status, but I'm afraid I know too much of it already, and, at the same time would like to, well, plan for that missing part from the beginning, so it's more natural.

But yes, who are likely human adversaries for a pair of girls seemingly unabashedly running around naked? Is that such a complex question?

 

[sirhugs]

Yeah, sorry for that bit.

Hoped on some little brainstorming about this secondary track in that story, because I really not know much about it.

Just writing it out and hoping something will spark until I actually get to those missing 20-30% of it in the middle, well... I know people claim it works for some. I see how it could in a free form whereas there just beginning and vague target status, but I'm afraid I know too much of it already, and, at the same time would like to, well, plan for that missing part from the beginning, so it's more natural.

But yes, who are likely human adversaries for a pair of girls seemingly unabashedly running around naked? Is that such a complex question?

nuns?

 

[LupusDei]

nuns?

Lol, yes, it could be a catholic boarding school... not that I know a thing of how those operate either. And trying to keep that publishable here might be futile.

 

[LupusDei]

nuns?

So they locked them up and sent for an exorcist?

Hmm... That's perhaps an option.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Yeah, sorry for that bit.

Hoped on some little brainstorming about this secondary track in that story, because I really not know much about it.

Just writing it out and hoping something will spark until I actually get to those missing 20-30% of it in the middle, well... I know people claim it works for some. I see how it could in a free form whereas there just beginning and vague target status, but I'm afraid I know too much of it already, and, at the same time would like to, well, plan for that missing part from the beginning, so it's more natural.

But yes, who are likely human adversaries for a pair of girls seemingly unabashedly running around naked? Is that such a complex question?

I'm sorry, I didn't mean to seem rude. I just didn't know what to tell you. I've had a few stories that just didn't work out - in fact, a whole series like that. I still have them if I get inspired. Sometimes it flows easily, occasionally it's like that expression, "like pulling teeth." If it gets really bad, then I know it's time to put it aside for a while.

No, it's not a complex question but, well, it just doesn't interest me. I think you should be able to figure out what you want there. If not, then as I said above . . .