Office story Cold Open….

[Soma99]

As I opened the office door my first reflex was to turn around, but I knew she had heard me come in. She was on her hands and knees under her desk, her skirt raised up her hips just enough for me to peak her cream colored panties, her mouth wide open.

She looked over her shoulder and saw me, we both froze.

She stood up and straightened her skirt, and with her mouth still open she held eye contact with me. She then put all 10 sour patch kids that she had just spilled onto the floor into her mouth at once.

“What’s up” she managed to mumble, her mouth still full of corn syrup.


I got nothing else, and I will neither confirm or deny that I ate sour patch kids off the floor today.

 

[Carnevil9]

Nitpick: How could you see her panties and her open mouth at the same time? Was she facing toward you, or away from you?

Other than that, it's a cute way to start a story.

 

[Soma99]

Nitpick: How could you see her panties and her open mouth at the same time? Was she facing toward you, or away from you?

Other than that, it's a cute way to start a story.

That is a good point.

I mean- I was just kinda picturing what I looked like when I was getting my candy off the floor- ass towards my window - face towards the door of my office

 

[Carnevil9]

That is a good point.

I mean- I was just kinda picturing what I looked like when I was getting my candy off the floor- ass towards my window - face towards the door of my office

Maybe it was dark outside, and the window reflected the view of her ass.

 

[gunhilltrain]

That is a good point.

I mean- I was just kinda picturing what I looked like when I was getting my candy off the floor- ass towards my window - face towards the door of my office

It's a minor editing glitch. Just have her mouth open when she stands up and turns around, as you already have. For one thing, it's going to be open because she is surprised! But yeah, it's a nice start.

So Soma99, are you getting back into things here? You don't seem to have anything posted since last October.

New York, huh? I assume you mean New York City, not Utica, NY. So you must ave worked in an office. Try to use some first-hand settings or situations that you know - you can fictionalize them, of course. Try to give some specifics. Where is this place? What kind of building is it in? What does the company do?

Some of my office stories are in publishing companies. They are on Lower Fifth Avenue, Clifton, NJ, and Upper Saddle River, NJ. They are based on real ones I have known. There is one in a law firm where it is not revealed that it is New York until the end. One is in a typesetting firm on West 24th Street in the 1970s.

Why does that matter? Because it affects the personalities of the your characters. It's what they see when they go to lunch or whatever. Are they car-driving suburbanites or transit-taking city dwellers? It pays off in plot points. Like I have two characters who have sex in a car in the office parking lot at night.

P.S.: Are her panties visible through her pantyhose? Or does she have thigh-high stockings? Maybe no stockings at all?

 

[Hypoxia]

OP didn't specify a location like New York. Think of how setting influence moods and actions. Think of setting this in Omaha, San Diego, Guadalajara, Budapest, Cairo, Kabul (choose a comfortable era), Saigon (in a dicey time), or anywhere.

A possibility: the same action set in many different places, with short-short tales featuring each, for cultural comparison.

 

[Soma99]

It's a minor editing glitch. Just have her mouth open when she stands up and turns around, as you already have. For one thing, it's going to be open because she is surprised! But yeah, it's a nice start.

So Soma99, are you getting back into things here? You don't seem to have anything posted since last October.

New York, huh? I assume you mean New York City, not Utica, NY. So you must ave worked in an office. Try to use some first-hand settings or situations that you know - you can fictionalize them, of course. Try to give some specifics. Where is this place? What kind of building is it in? What does the company do?

Some of my office stories are in publishing companies. They are on Lower Fifth Avenue, Clifton, NJ, and Upper Saddle River, NJ. They are based on real ones I have known. There is one in a law firm where it is not revealed that it is New York until the end. One is in a typesetting firm on West 24th Street in the 1970s.

Why does that matter? Because it affects the personalities of the your characters. It's what they see when they go to lunch or whatever. Are they car-driving suburbanites or transit-taking city dwellers? It pays off in plot points. Like I have two characters who have sex in a car in the office parking lot at night.

P.S.: Are her panties visible through her pantyhose? Or does she have thigh-high stockings? Maybe no stockings at all?

I'm actually pretty close to Utica NY.

My interest ebs and flows- I went away for a long time when my boyfriend moved in, felt weird coming here. But I kinda missed it- so I told him about it, he thinks its weird but also knows my weird interests are kinda what he likes about me, and he for sure likes that I'm, well, the kinda girl who writes porn stories.

 

[gunhilltrain]

OP didn't specify a location like New York. Think of how setting influence moods and actions. Think of setting this in Omaha, San Diego, Guadalajara, Budapest, Cairo, Kabul (choose a comfortable era), Saigon (in a dicey time), or anywhere.

A possibility: the same action set in many different places, with short-short tales featuring each, for cultural comparison.

The thing is, people don't act the same in different times and settings. She can do different places if she wants to, but the action is going to be different in each place. I doubt that Cairo and Kabul, even at their most liberal times (that did happen for a while in the 1950s and '60s) were ever exactly like what happens in Western countries. The women may have dressed similarly to our styles back then, but that doesn't mean they acted in the same way.

If anybody has some knowledge about Muslim countries back then, please let us know.

 

[gunhilltrain]

I'm actually pretty close to Utica NY.

My interest ebs and flows- I went away for a long time when my boyfriend moved in, felt weird coming here. But I kinda missed it- so I told him about it, he thinks its weird but also knows my weird interests are kinda what he likes about me, and he for sure likes that I'm, well, the kinda girl who writes porn stories.

Utica was strictly a guess on my part. Actually, I wanted to say Oneonta, but I didn't know how to spell it.

That's an interesting idea: a woman who writes porn and how her boyfriend sort of likes it and doesn't like it at the same time. Does he feel threatened by possibly being used as a model for one of her characters?

By the way, don't think of it as porn. Think of it as fiction where all of the unsaid stuff was put back in. Actually, mainstream fiction (including film) has become so explicit recently that the difference from porn is a matter of degree.

 

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I was stunned, unable to respond, because now that she was standing in front of me, I was staring at the boobage she had accidentally exposed while crawling under the desk.
...but alas, another dead end...