Need some advice about realistic cheating/adultery story.

[sonicdriller05]

Hello.

I was thinking of post this in the Story Ideas forum, but I think this forum fits better.

I'm a fan of adultery/affair/cheating stories of girlfriend or wife, which could be categorized as corruption/seduction stories. And I wish to try Literotica writing for the first time.

Here's my preference and ideas.

1) My plan is the story of a married woman or girlfriend, with the "beautiful lawful good" trait or "alpha girl" trait, reluctantly and slowly being seduced by an evil, mean, ugly, dirty male antagonist. It can be a fat old man. It can be a mean evil villain or criminal mastermind. It can be a dirty vagrant, etc... As she explores the realm of "taboo" or "prohibited" from morality and social standards, she feels too tempting though it is so wrong.
I know some people don't like this kind of thing, but this is just my personal thing, just a plan. Please remind the preference is in the realm of subjectivity.

2) I don't want the cuckold or sharing story. No offense, they are just not my thing. I prefer the situation of the "normal" husband. The husband should not know anything about the affair between the heroine and antagonist until the end, or just a tiny hint at the end with an open ending so that readers can freely imagine.

3) I prefer no drug and no mind control. Maybe a little bit of alcohol? But anyway, seducing heroine with drug or mind control feels too easy to me. I prefer to describe the ugly evil antagonist's persistent efforts and cunning plans to take the heroine from the protagonist.

4) I also don't want to describe "too slutty" or "too easy" heroine. So many adultery/affair/cheating stories I've read so far have this problem: all of a sudden, our good, loyal, conservative heroine becomes a complete whore just because she saw a BBC. For me, it is hard to imagine, any "normal" wife or girlfriend with a sound mind opens their legs so fast and easily just because she saw a big dick while her husband's dick is small. I mean, big dick might be one factor, but it cannot be the only reason IMHO.

5) I think the heroine should show a reasonable degree of resistance and reluctance to seducer. But the antagonist continuously tries to seduce her and tempt her, and make a trap she cannot resist but cannot escape. For some reason, she can't report to her husband or police. Her defense and resolution slowly get weakened, and little by little, she allows little more to antagonist. Finally, she falls.

6) I'm trying to escape from too obvious and widespread cliches of such situations.



But here is my problem: I found that the story is getting too long and tedious. I'm not sure how to find the balance point between explanation and progress and the balance between realism and smuttiness.

As I tried to write an outline, I tried to write enough build-up and describe the slow staging up of the tension. But I found myself trying to explain the reason and motivation of the act of characters. But this makes the story somewhat long and boring. For example, I'm trying to make a realistic cause for some acts of the heroine, but I find myself creating another motivation for that reasonable cause. I'm trying to explain about that motivation too. But if I neglect these explanations, sometimes it feels like characters act stupid without any valuable reason.

I need to cut some of these explanations at some point, But I'm not sure how much I should need to explain and how much I could skip and let readers imagine/assume.

How can I write a good, realistic, and reasonable affair story without getting too long and boring? I didn't know writing a realistic build-up yet keep it simple and short would be so difficult like this...

How about writing all-important personal traits in the character introduction at the beginning? This could make the character introduction bit long but can help me skip explanations in the main body.

 

[SamScribble]

As a general rule, don't explain anything unless you absolutely have to. Characters largely explain themselves by their own words and actions - especially if you are going for third-person narration (which I assume you are).

If you already feel that you have 'too much', I'd suggest that you make a copy and then go through and cut out everything that isn't absolutely necessary. You may find that you need to put a few bits back again just to get the 'pace' right, but I think you'll be surprised how few words you really need to tell a good story.

Good luck.

 

[KeithD]

There is no universal reader. There is no answer to your questions that would require the response of the universal reader. Write what you want, submit it, and take whatever responses you get. If one of your respondents claims to be the universal reader, they are wrong.

 

[Bramblethorn]

HAs I tried to write an outline, I tried to write enough build-up and describe the slow staging up of the tension. But I found myself trying to explain the reason and motivation of the act of characters. But this makes the story somewhat long and boring. For example, I'm trying to make a realistic cause for some acts of the heroine, but I find myself creating another motivation for that reasonable cause. I'm trying to explain about that motivation too. But if I neglect these explanations, sometimes it feels like characters act stupid without any valuable reason.

IME, this kind of thing works best if you can get your readers empathising with the characters by showing them the things that persuade the character. Sometimes you need to describe thought processes, but as far as possible, bring them along through experience.

Think about film: very rarely do we get a voice-over narrating the protagonist's emotions. The soundtrack does a bit of the work, but mostly films show us the events that motivate a character rather than explicitly telling us what they're feeling.

How about writing all-important personal traits in the character introduction at the beginning? This could make the character introduction bit long but can help me skip explanations in the main body.

Writing stuff like "Jane was a conscientious wife who loved her husband, but she also couldn't resist a bargain" etc. can get very heavy-handed. One alternative is to show those character traits, e.g. Scene 1 is Jane planning a big surprise party for her husband, and collecting a lot of coupons to save money on the food, so that later on in the story readers already understand these two facts without you having to spell it out.

 

[NotWise]

The advice above is all good, but I don't think you'll have any idea of what you're doing until you write it.

So write it.

 

[CyranoJ]

1) My plan is the story of a married woman or girlfriend, with the "beautiful lawful good" trait or "alpha girl" trait, reluctantly and slowly being seduced by an evil, mean, ugly, dirty male antagonist. It can be a fat old man. It can be a mean evil villain or criminal mastermind. It can be a dirty vagrant, etc... As she explores the realm of "taboo" or "prohibited" from morality and social standards, she feels too tempting though it is so wrong.

If you're aiming for "realistic," the biggest obstacle for infidelity isn't race, and given the right Kinsey score it isn't even sex (if you want to go LGBTQ+): it's class. If the partner has the right class signifiers, with a bit of play (lower-middle-class Black man for an upper-middle-class White woman, for example) that's realistic.

You can go beyond that to make them as evil and as gross as you please if that's your premise, but "realistically" no middle-class woman is actually going to go out and fuck a homeless guy unless something extraordinary (and possibly supernatural) intervenes.

2) I don't want the cuckold or sharing story. No offense, they are just not my thing. I prefer the situation of the "normal" husband. The husband should not know anything about the affair between the heroine and antagonist until the end, or just a tiny hint at the end with an open ending so that readers can freely imagine.

Simple enough. Have them exercise discretion.

3) I prefer no drug and no mind control.

In that case, your antagonist (protagonist?) would need to have some serious psychological game. This is not impossible: a fat dude with sufficient charisma and who is not seriously deformed has a serious shot at almost any woman in the room with sufficient charm. To that, I am a living witness. But the uglier and more repellent you make your antagonist, the steeper the difficulty curve. If he's someone so disgusting that nobody would willingly touch him, he would have to have some kind of leverage beyond Charm and Game.

(Further note about fat characters: if you're aiming for "realism," male characters have leeway to be up to 50 or 60 pounds overweight before they start suffering serious deficits in the pickup game unless they completely lack social skills. Past that, it gets harder the more pounds they pack on, but certainly, a character isn't automatically repellent b/c they're "fat.")

4) I also don't want to describe "too slutty" or "too easy" heroine. So many adultery/affair/cheating stories I've read so far have this problem: all of a sudden, our good, loyal, conservative heroine becomes a complete whore just because she saw a BBC.

As someone with IRL experience of adultery (something about which I have very mixed feelings) it's rare for people to just randomly fuck someone they've never seen before unless their marriage is extraordinarily unhappy. One of the main benefits of marriage, if you're both sexually functional, is much more reliable sex than single people enjoy, however they posture.

That said: if there's some severe dysfunction or if there's been minor dysfunction over a period of time, just about anything is plausible. This is particularly possible if the antagonist has some prior relationship with the heroine (doesn't have to have been sexual, though some undertone of sexuality can help: maybe they can discover that).

It is ENTIRELY possible for someone to decide to try something outside their comfort zone as a fling. If you're going deeper than that, you can leverage the psychology of the Taboo (which can be a massive and self-reinforcing temptation) to enable it, with the right preconditions.

the antagonist continuously tries to seduce her and tempt her, and make a trap she cannot resist but cannot escape. For some reason, she can't report to her husband or police. Her defense and resolution slowly get weakened, and little by little, she allows little more to antagonist. Finally, she falls.

So, basically, this sounds like either a situation of Extreme Persistence or of Questionable Consent (b/c the antagonist has some kind of leverage on the heroine), or some mixture of the two. In the former case, the antagonist needs to have at least some species of charm. In the latter (no judgment if you go this way), he has to some serious leverage that makes sense in an era where sex tapes and Internet leaks are normal. This might mean that he has been witness to her doing something genuinely wrong instead of just some random upskirt shot or a shot of her kissing a dude or something.

How can I write a good, realistic, and reasonable affair story without getting too long and boring?

My general experience in erotic stories (though I don't write this specific type of story) is this: focus on the inflection points for the characters. If you're writing an erotic story, at least some of those should be sex scenes, but they don't always have to be. But every scene should be driving forward the conflict, the struggle, the battle between them.

Try to make the most of description. You don't have to spell out the particulars of every encounter, the specifics of the wife's relationship with her husband. A lot of that can be done with visual details: how she dresses, what her daily rhythms look at, likewise for the Seducer.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Some women are attracted to men who are "bad boys" who may or may not be criminals.

It seems like there has to be something about this guy, some access to money or power that allows him to trap her (maybe blackmail?) He could have an organized crime connection that makes him attractive. I'm thinking of characters like Tony Soprano and Tony Montana. If it's a black guy he can be like Nino Brown in New Jack City. It can't just be some schlub. That's only one way to do it.

If it seems too long, consider publishing it as a series. Maybe only a few chapters would do it.

 

[SimonDoom]

Your heroine needs a motive. There must be some unmet need that this bad man fills and that causes her to cheat. It could be anything. You as the author must decide what it is.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

A common complaint of people in relationships is their partner just not acting interested in them as a person any more and not listening to them.
A lot of affairs start when they find someone who does appear interested in what they are thinking and worried about and provides sympathy. Add some sharing of confidences and emotions and you can get to a big hug, and then body contact can give ideas about what if there were more body contact...

'My husband/wife doesn't understand me' is a cliche because it happens so often.

 

[Handley_Page]

Hello.
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How can I write a good, realistic, and reasonable affair story without getting too long and boring? I didn't know writing a realistic build-up yet keep it simple and short would be so difficult like this...

How about writing all-important personal traits in the character introduction at the beginning? This could make the character introduction bit long but can help me skip explanations in the main body.

Please define what you mean by "too long and boring."
Don't forget that there are about 3700 words on a Lit page, and a goodish length is 3-6 pages

 

[gunhilltrain]

Your heroine needs a motive. There must be some unmet need that this bad man fills and that causes her to cheat. It could be anything. You as the author must decide what it is.

Yes, that is the other part of the equation. For example, in Scarface, Elvira becomes tired of Tony and eventually leaves him. So is your heroine truly trapped or is she just going along with what is convenient? There are a lot of ways to handle it. Trump's wives come to mind too. Jeffrey Epstein's Ghislaine Maxwell, or someone like her, is another case. There seems to be plenty to work with here if you let you let your imagination ponder it.

By the way, the longest stand-alone story I've done so far - it hasn't been published yet - is about 10,000 words. I know others have done longer stories.

 

[mfan2112]

By the way, the longest stand-alone story I've done so far - it hasn't been published yet - is about 10,000 words. I know others have done longer stories.

I have seen contest winners over 24k words. So there is no "perfect" length.

 

[lovecraft68]

You're seriously over thinking this. Just write it, give in to the muse and let the story have its way with you. When you're finished, let it sit a few days so your mind-and other parts-has cooled down, then go back through it and see what you think you should keep, lose or change.

Asking for advice is a good thing, but advice is meant to enhance what you already have, and right now all you have is ideas, you need to be your own writer, then if you feel something is off, start asking what people think.

As a longtime friend of my wife keeps saying about pretty much everything , "There's nothing to it, but to do it."

 

[CarnalLusts]

Realistic Characters

There are several good responses above. I have two stories on Literotica that fall under the cheating/adultery category (shameless plug ).

For me, I base the characters motivation on events that either I have lived through personally or have friends that lived through it. From feeling sexually frustrated (don't feel sexy anymore and/or no sex) to abuse. And while some situations you place your protagonist in may sound completely unbelievable, just watch the news or read news posts - there are people out there that do some crazy shit. So, really nothing is too unbelievable.

Therefore, I think the easiest thing is to just come out and say what is motivating your character. Be concise to the point - some people will be able to relate, some won't. I think I do this somewhat in my two stories but not as well as I would like.

But most importantly - just write! Take the feedback you get, filter out the crap, and use the gold nuggets to refine your style.

Best of luck! I look forward to reading your story!

 

[RichardWark]

Holy crap, you're writing about Harvey Weinstein, aren't you?

 

[Zeb_Carter]

As so many have already said, just write the story, don't analyze it to death, just write. See the story unfold in you mind like say... a movie. Watch the characters as they interact, as they talk, as they live their lives. Then write the story you just saw in your mind.

If you want you can read what I have done, here on lit. I have many types of cheating wife stories. Some are RAAC other BTB and other niether. Click the link in my sig for Lit stories.

 

[gordo12]

How can I write a good, realistic, and reasonable affair story without getting too long and boring? I didn't know writing a realistic build-up yet keep it simple and short would be so difficult like this...

In a word. EXPERIENCE!

Write it, post it, learn from it. Comments are a great source...sometimes.

Size-wise, I have everything from 750 up to 48,000 words. That isn't an issue unless you like to go on and on about some trivial issue. Or get overly detailed.

As others have said, write it!

 

[NoJo]

The first 6 numbered points indicate clearly that this SHOULD have been posted in story ideas.

Far too vague.

Authors here ain't going to help much in firming up your ideas because as they currently stand they're all over the place. You have to do that work yourself.

Once you're clearer, come back and post if you'd like help in crafting the story. Pretty much every author here has a useful take on that process - the writing process!

 

[jsmiam]

It’s probably pointless at this stage, the OP is gone poof after just two posts.

Anyway. If a poster such as this person were asking, I would agree with everyone saying they’re overthinking it, and they should just write.

I’ll add that (ahem) based on the length of the OPP (Original poster’s post, I don’t know what you were thinking), that (a) OP clearly writes well, but also has no qualms with word quantity, so there’s room for caution there, and (b) the risk of getting too preachy is worth noting, so there’s room for caution there also.


Interviewer: “Why did you cheat?”

Male response: “She had a vagina. She let me put my dick in it!”

Female response: “Let me tell you the twenty seven reasons why I did, and why each reason is all my husbands fault. Point one...”