Need help writing a cuckold story

[Ph03n1x028]

Hi,

I'm looking for an author that I can use as a sound board as I write a cuckold story. I'd like to discuss concept, characters, flow, outcome and interactions between characters. I'd also like advise on how to structure the story so that the reader gets the most out of it.

The story would be looking at a newly wed couple. It would be written from the husband's point of view and describing what he sees and hears. She's a virgin and he's a little more experienced and has watched thousands of hours of porn and has developed a fantasy. One day she stumbles his porn history and deduces what he likes as there is a common thread in the articles, stories and videos.

She decides to surprise him with this and makes arrangements etc.

If you need more detail then I'd be happy to discuss in this thread of via PM.

Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks!

 

[SimonDoom]

I don't have enough time to get deeply involved, but I have a few broad thoughts and suggestions:

Right off the bat I see there's a contradiction in your set up. You want to tell it from his point of view, but she's the one who stumbles on his porn history and she's the one who makes the arrangements, which are a surprise. That's contradictory. If it's from his POV and her actions are a surprise he cannot possibly narrate what she does and sees.

So I'd recommend thinking hard about which perspective you want, and stick with it. That means if it's from his POV then he won't have any idea that she's stumbled on his porn, unless she tells him, and he won't be privy to her arrangements, unless she tells him. It could still be a very sexy story. Surprise can be a fun element in an erotic story.

Or tell it from her POV. She's virginal and innocent and finds out about his cuck fantasies and ultimately decides to surprise him. The story would be about how she gets involved and uncovers her inner "hot wife." The husband doesn't know while it's going on.

Or tell it from his POV, and he orchestrates the whole thing rather than her. He brings her into the hot wife/cuck world. That could be sexy too.

Or you could tell it from both POVs, using the third person omniscient POV. Then the story can narrate what both of them are doing the whole time.

Think about which story variation turns you on the most and stick with that.

In terms of crafting your story, think of motivation. What is each character's need and motivation? These kinds of stories are perfect for these questions, but you need to think them through. The problem I see with your set up is that the husband, who is the POV character, has the hotwife/cuck fantasy, but he's not the one acting; she is, behind the scenes. So I'm not sure what he is doing during the story, and what his inner conflict is. If his inner conflict is, How do I become a cuck? then you have to give him something to do during the story. Or if you focus on the wife's conflict, How do I please my husband when I'm innocent and inexperienced? then you focus on what she does.

Good luck!

 

[Ph03n1x028]

I don't have enough time to get deeply involved, but I have a few broad thoughts and suggestions:

Right off the bat I see there's a contradiction in your set up. You want to tell it from his point of view, but she's the one who stumbles on his porn history and she's the one who makes the arrangements, which are a surprise. That's contradictory. If it's from his POV and her actions are a surprise he cannot possibly narrate what she does and sees.

So I'd recommend thinking hard about which perspective you want, and stick with it. That means if it's from his POV then he won't have any idea that she's stumbled on his porn, unless she tells him, and he won't be privy to her arrangements, unless she tells him. It could still be a very sexy story. Surprise can be a fun element in an erotic story.

Or tell it from her POV. She's virginal and innocent and finds out about his cuck fantasies and ultimately decides to surprise him. The story would be about how she gets involved and uncovers her inner "hot wife." The husband doesn't know while it's going on.

Or tell it from his POV, and he orchestrates the whole thing rather than her. He brings her into the hot wife/cuck world. That could be sexy too.

Or you could tell it from both POVs, using the third person omniscient POV. Then the story can narrate what both of them are doing the whole time.

Think about which story variation turns you on the most and stick with that.

In terms of crafting your story, think of motivation. What is each character's need and motivation? These kinds of stories are perfect for these questions, but you need to think them through. The problem I see with your set up is that the husband, who is the POV character, has the hotwife/cuck fantasy, but he's not the one acting; she is, behind the scenes. So I'm not sure what he is doing during the story, and what his inner conflict is. If his inner conflict is, How do I become a cuck? then you have to give him something to do during the story. Or if you focus on the wife's conflict, How do I please my husband when I'm innocent and inexperienced? then you focus on what she does.

Good luck!

I think you're 100% right. I didn't think that through.


I think it would be best to look at it from the wife's POV because of the whole journey aspect and how she can please her husband. I think having it told from her perspective and how she can bring his fantasies to life would be sexy as she loves him and he loves her and seeing her go from innocent to becoming a fully fledged hotwife.

Thanks for the input.

 

[SimonDoom]

I think you're 100% right. I didn't think that through.


I think it would be best to look at it from the wife's POV because of the whole journey aspect and how she can please her husband. I think having it told from her perspective and how she can bring his fantasies to life would be sexy as she loves him and he loves her and seeing her go from innocent to becoming a fully fledged hotwife.

Thanks for the input.

Glad to give it.

It could be a good story. One additional piece of advice: This story probably will work best if you take your time with it. Don't rush things. You'll need to work on making it plausible that the sweet innocent wife wants to become a hotwife for her husband. It can be a great story if you take your time with it.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Hi,

I'm looking for an author that I can use as a sound board as I write a cuckold story. I'd like to discuss concept, characters, flow, outcome and interactions between characters. I'd also like advise on how to structure the story so that the reader gets the most out of it.

The story would be looking at a newly wed couple. It would be written from the husband's point of view and describing what he sees and hears. She's a virgin and he's a little more experienced and has watched thousands of hours of porn and has developed a fantasy. One day she stumbles his porn history and deduces what he likes as there is a common thread in the articles, stories and videos.

She decides to surprise him with this and makes arrangements etc.

If you need more detail then I'd be happy to discuss in this thread of via PM.

Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks!

It's not really a cuckold story unless someone else is brought into the picture, but that could be plausible depending on what her plans are.

I assume you're going to describe the content of his porn in some degree of detail. Anyway, it does sound like an excellent story idea. As for the POV of the wife; that would make sense because she's planning this on her own. It would be interesting to know her reactions to the porn - how much of it is new info for her? - and how she plans to interpret it for own personality.

The way I usually do it, the women are natural-born directors when coming up with plots, costumes, and so forth for something like this.

 

[Salacious_Scribe]

if it's from his POV then he won't have any idea that she's stumbled on his porn, unless she tells him, and he won't be privy to her arrangements, unless she tells him. It could still be a very sexy story. Surprise can be a fun element in an erotic story.

Thisis an easy fix. Tell it from his point of view..

I got home from work and walked inside. As I reached for the door I saw a note, with myname on it.

Dear Cuck,

I found all your cuckold porn. Today I am going to make you a cuckold.

He stopped reading and adjusted his cock which was threatening to burst through his pants right in front of old Mrs Prager. The old biddy neighbor was pulling weeds and looking right at him.

Once it was in a more comfortable position he continued to read...

I have a few guys here and am hot and horny. If you want me to do this strip all your clothes off and meet me in the bedroom.

Your Loving Hotwife

He groaned and almost creamed his shorts at teh thought of his prim and proper virginal bride being tagged teamed as he watched.


problem solved.

 

[ElectricBlue]

Dear Salacious_Scribe,

Your story is too short for Literotica. Please resubmit with at least 750 words.

Love, Laurel.

 

[Salacious_Scribe]

Dear Salacious_Scribe,

Your story is too short for Literotica. Please resubmit with at least 750 words.

Love, Laurel.

Are you saying you want me to write this?

I only saw that message once. I added some adjectives and additional dialogue tags and it was accepted.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Are you saying you want me to write this?

I only saw that message once. I added some adjectives and additional dialogue tags and it was accepted.

It's a plausible story idea. I'd like to know who is in this group of guys she recruited. Are they "similar" or are there a variety of ages, ethnic groups, or whatever? How did she find them? How many of them are there? Three sounds reasonable, but maybe she went over the top with that. All of that would put you way over 750 words.

 

[Salacious_Scribe]

It's a plausible story idea. I'd like to know who is in this group of guys she recruited. Are they "similar" or are there a variety of ages, ethnic groups, or whatever? How did she find them? How many of them are there? Three sounds reasonable, but maybe she went over the top with that. All of that would put you way over 750 words.

Well if you want to find out, follow the instructions. Strip then come to the bedroom... if you can handle it.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Well if you want to find out, follow the instructions. Strip then come to the bedroom... if you can handle it.

But won't the story tell us what happens when he gets there? Or is it just going to be left up to the reader's imagination?

If you don't write it, then maybe I will - eventually. I'm pretty backed up now and it's not really my genre anyway. Maybe I'll put another lady into the mix; another secret revealed about our young bride. Some BDSM in there is another option.

And just how old is Mrs. Prager? Maybe she's a hot granny.

 

[ElectricBlue]

^^^^^ Attaboys!

You gotta love it when someone runs on from a prompt! We'll have another idea for a story anthology next .

 

[Salacious_Scribe]

But won't the story tell us what happens when he gets there? Or is it just going to be left up to the reader's imagination?

If you don't write it, then maybe I will - eventually. I'm pretty backed up now and it's not really my genre anyway. Maybe I'll put another lady into the mix; another secret revealed about our young bride. Some BDSM in there is another option.

And just how old is Mrs. Prager? Maybe she's a hot granny.

Well if you want to find out, follow the instructions. Strip then come to the bedroom... if you can handle it.

I added it to my list of ideas. That list is about 122 ideas now. That's not including stories I started, stories that need editing and serials I need to continue, series I need to finish... etc

FYI
I got the name from TV. There was a commercial for Prager U on. She can be 50-90 up to you.

Go ahead and write your take on it. Feel free to use Mrs. Prager, I'd probably change her name anyway.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Well if you want to find out, follow the instructions. Strip then come to the bedroom... if you can handle it.

I added it to my list of ideas. That list is about 122 ideas now. That's not including stories I started, stories that need editing and serials I need to continue, series I need to finish... etc

FYI
I got the name from TV. There was a commercial for Prager U on. She can be 50-90 up to you.

Go ahead and write your take on it. Feel free to use Mrs. Prager, I'd probably change her name anyway.

Oh, so you are going to have a longer story to post? At the rate I'm going, I couldn't write a version of it until October at the earliest.

Some of these older ladies on-line really throw themselves around in their photos and videos. Maybe they've lost their youthful inhibitions. I'm getting rather old myself. I'm aware too that some of these women, back when we were all young, might not have given me the time of day. I didn't stop clocks, but I wasn't a Chad either.

My grandfather clued me into that years ago. He said, "So where we're all these women back when I was young?"

 

[Salacious_Scribe]

Oh, so you are going to have a longer story to post? At the rate I'm going, I couldn't write a version of it until October at the earliest.

Some of these older ladies on-line really throw themselves around in their photos and videos. Maybe they've lost their youthful inhibitions. I'm getting rather old myself. I'm aware too that some of these women, back when we were all young, might not have given me the time of day. I didn't stop clocks, but I wasn't a Chad either.

My grandfather clued me into that years ago. He said, "So where we're all these women back when I was young?"

In Florida, the community with the highest incidence of new STDs per capita is a town called The Villages. It's an age-restricted community of 55+. Rumors of orgies and wife swapping abound.

 

[gunhilltrain]

In Florida, the community with the highest incidence of new STDs per capita is a town called The Villages. It's an age-restricted community of 55+. Rumors of orgies and wife swapping abound.

I've heard about that STD problem occurring elsewhere. Apparently they think that if there is no possibility of pregnancies any longer, there is no problem in doing whatever they want.

 

[Zeb_Carter]

People, people, people...

There are 34,063 stories in the Naked City and in Loving Wives. Of those who knows how many deal with this exact same thing.

 

[Wilson Spalding]

Hi,

I'm looking for an author that I can use as a sound board as I write a cuckold story. I'd like to discuss concept, characters, flow, outcome and interactions between characters. I'd also like advise on how to structure the story so that the reader gets the most out of it.

The story would be looking at a newly wed couple. It would be written from the husband's point of view and describing what he sees and hears. She's a virgin and he's a little more experienced and has watched thousands of hours of porn and has developed a fantasy. One day she stumbles his porn history and deduces what he likes as there is a common thread in the articles, stories and videos.

She decides to surprise him with this and makes arrangements etc.

If you need more detail then I'd be happy to discuss in this thread of via PM.

Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks!

AS Zeb mentioned, this exact scenario has been literally a thousand times or so, right here at Literotica. Here's one that only 87% of that idea: Christmas Surprise. So, yes: a thousand.
...That's not to say there isn't room for 1,001, or a thousand more than that, but let's consider what makes yours different.

My first recommendation would be to do a tag search in Loving Wives and include "porn" as the tag in the search. You might consider searching exh/voy as well.

Then look at the type of "cuckold" that this guy is angling at. There is a HUUUGE spectrum, from submissive and/or bi-dudes, to middle-of-the-road "stag" types, to alpha wanna-watch-as-foreplay types. The approach that works for one of the spectrum is not going to work for a leans or falls on the other end of the spectrum.

Of course, not getting it right is a great source for dramatic tension (and/or comic relief), and that can open channels of communication. It can also be a terrible drag if you're looking to write a short one-off.

Build your characters first. Start simple: what they look like. For better or worse, that will affect their social interaction, self-confidence, sexual history and so on. Then what their personal relationship history is. Married, sure, but is it a strong marriage? What they're comfortable with sexually versus what they'd be at least willing to try.

Where to they work? Where do they live? How is it he didn't share his kinks with her before they got married? What spark in her did he catch that at least hinted he'd be good in a life-long relationship with her?

Look at what the guy has in book marked or saved off to his collection. What specific signals is she going to get from that?

Note that 99% of this stuff will never see the light of day, but the more you know about the characters, the more it rings true when you build out a scenario and follow it into a narrative.