A triple beauty

[roc1knight]

I saw a triple beauty, from the bottom to the top.
First is her hip, tight, thin and round.
Then goes her hair, flow down across her shoulders,
that falls suddenly stop at the slender waist.
What make the viewer wonder,
is the last which arouse her life force.
A white rose's scent explains her sculptural standing,
the desire has her enchanted.
And the woman herself,
to me has the same toxic smell.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Hello and welcome. Might I ask if English isn't your first language as your grammar is a bit strange and why would someone your describing as beautiful, smell toxic?!!

 

[roc1knight]

Well, I was describing the same condition I faced. Which she was freezed by the rose's magic smell, and I was freezed by this woman too. Like a hero before the Medusa. In order to break the spell, I guessed I had to curse her smell.

Hello and welcome. Might I ask if English isn't your first language as your grammar is a bit strange and why would someone your describing as beautiful, smell toxic?!!

 

[Senna Jawa]

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Regards,

 

[roc1knight]

You could write:

And
in my humble opinion has the same [...]​

Of course, you could abbreviate to:

And IMHO has the same [...]​

Regards,

Well, that seems too polite, not my style. My heart beats like a drum whether I love or hate.