New LW suggestion?

[Sir_Maveric]

I'm at the point where I want to mess with the LW trolls. Their comments range from rude to absurd and I want to warp their little minds.

Rough outline: Young woman has child and is forced to give up for adoption. Ruins her womb on the way out. After she recovers she turns to sex to fill the emptiness she has because she can never have more kids. Eventually she marries and the guy is Ok with her satisfying her appetite with other men. He likes to watch at times. She meets a young stud willing to nail her and the husband wants to watch. Husband ends up tied to the chair while young guy nails her.

This is where I warp their minds. He ties her up. Throw in some rough anal and dp, with a little bdsm, toys and a talking parrot who only sings Justin Bieber. Then just as the young guy is about to blow his load he pulls out and covers her face with it instead, admitting that he's always dreamed of doing that to his real mom. Now he can cross it off his bucket list. Then just to take it a step further he slices her open from neck to navel and chops off the husbands dick. Then walks out leaving them both to bleed to death.

Technically it's a Loving Wife story. She does love her husband, and it is a happy ending, the kid found his real mom.

Thoughts?

 

[JJonah]

I'm at the point where I want to mess with the LW trolls. Their comments range from rude to absurd and I want to warp their little minds.

Rough outline: Young woman has child and is forced to give up for adoption. Ruins her womb on the way out. After she recovers she turns to sex to fill the emptiness she has because she can never have more kids. Eventually she marries and the guy is Ok with her satisfying her appetite with other men. He likes to watch at times. She meets a young stud willing to nail her and the husband wants to watch. Husband ends up tied to the chair while young guy nails her.

This is where I warp their minds. He ties her up. Throw in some rough anal and dp, with a little bdsm, toys and a talking parrot who only sings Justin Bieber. Then just as the young guy is about to blow his load he pulls out and covers her face with it instead, admitting that he's always dreamed of doing that to his real mom. Now he can cross it off his bucket list. Then just to take it a step further he slices her open from neck to navel and chops off the husbands dick. Then walks out leaving them both to bleed to death.

Technically it's a Loving Wife story. She does love her husband, and it is a happy ending, the kid found his real mom.

Thoughts?

What did I just read?

 

[GrandTeton]

Any chance you could make it interracial?

 

[Sir_Maveric]

Any chance you could make it interracial?

Of course. And it would have to be non-con as well. I'm trying to make sure to include an element from every category as I go.

 

[SimonDoom]

It all made sense, except, you know, the part about the parrot.

I'm going to go out on a limb and say . . . I think you're on your own with this one.

 

[Sir_Maveric]

It all made sense, except, you know, the part about the parrot.

I'm going to go out on a limb and say . . . I think you're on your own with this one.

Originally thought trained monkey to fetch the toys as needed, but didn't want PETA on my case. This way a singing bird can envelope the hungry lovers in the mimicked sounds of JB. And maybe quote Cheech and Chong...

 

[SimonDoom]

Originally thought trained monkey to fetch the toys as needed, but didn't want PETA on my case. This way a singing bird can envelope the hungry lovers in the mimicked sounds of JB. And maybe quote Cheech and Chong...

It's all good except Justin Bieber is a boner killer for me.

 

[Sir_Maveric]

It's all good except Justin Bieber is a boner killer for me.

Same here. It's why Canada exported the little shit....

 

[Hypoxia]

I suspect Laurel might think mayhem unerotic. I had trouble with a trephination story.

 

[Touch_type]

Mastersofwar3 and a random user both posted stories on LW about cheating girlfriends. Smiled through both of them imagining the trolls' reactions.

 

[Carnevil9]

When he chops off the husband's dick, make sure he stuffs it deep into the wound he just slashed into the mother.

The interracial angle could come from the original pregnancy being sired by a big bull Mandingo-type. The kid takes after his dad.

I'd save the tentacles for Chapter 2.

 

[glheinz]

JB parrot

Tentakel? Mit der grausamen Szene des Justin-Bieber-Papageis übersteigst du bereits in Ch.1 alle sittsamen Grenzen des BDSM, wahrscheinlich wird das ein triftiger Grund für eine rejection.
Also: Vorsicht!

 

[Sir_Maveric]

Tentakel? Mit der grausamen Szene des Justin-Bieber-Papageis übersteigst du bereits in Ch.1 alle sittsamen Grenzen des BDSM, wahrscheinlich wird das ein triftiger Grund für eine rejection.
Also: Vorsicht!

Unfortunately the parrot is vital to the scene. Without the right mood music, how would the long lost son nail, then murder his mother.

I mean, seriously.....

You're just jealous because I thought of it first.......

 

[Sir_Maveric]

Mastersofwar3 and a random user both posted stories on LW about cheating girlfriends. Smiled through both of them imagining the trolls' reactions.

Found Mastersofwar3's story and laughed my ass off. I was in tears at all the "GAG..SLURP SLURP...GAGGG."
I can imagine the little LW trolls heads exploding at the fact that they couldn't vote or comment on the story.

 

[Hypoxia]

Everyone is tied up and the parrot nibbles them to death. It's erotic at first.

 

[Sir_Maveric]

Everyone is tied up and the parrot nibbles them to death. It's erotic at first.

I'd have to somehow train the parrot to tie people up. That might actually work...

 

[davion2308]

Wow

Any chance you could make it interracial?

I literally, and I mean literally, sprayed coffee all over the monitor when I read that. I have to go get some paper towels now.

 

[Hypoxia]

Any chance you could make it interracial?

I've written multiracial incest. The logistics are tricky but doable. Make this a kin-fucking story and it'll grab eyeballs.

 

[Sir_Maveric]

I've written multiracial incest. The logistics are tricky but doable. Make this a kin-fucking story and it'll grab eyeballs.

Already figured that part out. Working on training the parrot. Little bugger keeps biting me instead of figuring out the ropes.

 

[Hypoxia]

Already figured that part out. Working on training the parrot. Little bugger keeps biting me instead of figuring out the ropes.

Iroquois slut has son by a Swedish sailor and daughter by a Haitian stevedore. They all get together 20 years later. The parrot is leftover from some Amazonian adventure or just flew in from a bankrupt pet shop and swears like a Korean choreographer (prior owner). LEFT foot, you fucktard! LEFT foot!

 

[Sir_Maveric]

Iroquois slut has son by a Swedish sailor and daughter by a Haitian stevedore. They all get together 20 years later. The parrot is leftover from some Amazonian adventure or just flew in from a bankrupt pet shop and swears like a Korean choreographer (prior owner). LEFT foot, you fucktard! LEFT foot!

Still need to work in the Justin Beiber. There's probably a few 'Beliebers' on here because they can't get laid, and I want to make sure the parrot ruffles their feathers.

 

[Oblimo]

The parrot has been trained by a mad cognitive scientist named Searle to translate any English sentence 12 words or shorter into perfectly fluid Chinese. Of course, it has no idea what it’s saying.

Or does it?

 

[Sir_Maveric]

The parrot has been trained by a mad cognitive scientist named Searle to translate any English sentence 12 words or shorter into perfectly fluid Chinese. Of course, it has no idea what it’s saying.

Or does it?

A Justin Beiber loving mad cognitive scientist named Searle, and the parrot sings in Chinese.... could work.

As long as the beat it the same. If only we could find some sort of rhythm that occurs during sex....

 

[Hypoxia]

Tentacles are a must.

 

[Sir_Maveric]

Tentacles are a must.

And there's my idea to piss off the fantasy board as well! Thank you!!

Now, does the son, or the mom get the tentacles......