Looking for editor for my first story.

[Son_of_Battles]

I am just finishing up the first installment of a brother sister incest story. This will be the first story I have ever written. I would like to make a good first impression to the Literotica community and I'm in search of an editor.

The story is roughly 19k words. It is about a boy named Alexis Allen and his sister Audrey Aleen Allen, former cam-girl and Playboy model. (An actual Playboy model, Miss June 2013) Alexis gets accepted with a full scholarship to Mayweather University and upon arriving with his sister two weeks before his classes begin, realizes that it is an all-girl college. with his feminine name he had been accidentally accepted. With no other education prospects he is crushed. Sharing a motel, he and his sister get drunk and she convinces him to dress like a girl. With his small build and long hair they both realize he makes a good looking girl and Audrey convinces him that he should just dress up as a girl and go to Mayweather. During his transformation they become closer and the sexual tension between both of them rises.

I don't want to spoil it if you decide to read it, but it has brother/sister incest, Cross Dressing, Some Homosexual/Lesbian undertones and masturbation.

My working title so far is Women's Studies.

File type is .odt I'm using LibreOffice. I can convert to .rtf if needed. I'm a little new to this.

 

[sr71plt]

Just one suggestion. The names aren't good for a short story that long. They don't differentiate enough for readers not to confuse them. (Readers stop reading complete names--they scan right through them after a while; if they aren't distinct, confusion arises). Also, Alexis is both a male and female name. Unless the story requires the confusion it's usually best to avoid it.

 

[Son_of_Battles]

Just one suggestion. The names aren't good for a short story that long. They don't differentiate enough for readers not to confuse them. (Readers stop reading complete names--they scan right through them after a while; if they aren't distinct, confusion arises). Also, Alexis is both a male and female name. Unless the story requires the confusion it's usually best to avoid it.

I could change his full name to Alexandra. His female persona he adopts goes by Lexi. That being said the name confusion should be minimal. And thank you for the tip on the name. I have only heard it used as a girls name before. That is probably the only piece of research I missed.

Also, yes the story hinges on someone else's confusion, thinking that he is in fact a girl.

 

[Son_of_Battles]

I'm still looking for an editor if someone is interested. I would even go for someone who just wants to read it and tell me if they think its shit or not.