Idea for a story - Mind Control category?

[MayorReynolds]

I just started laying the groundwork for a story I'm going to write.

Here's the gist: A college virgin, unlucky in love, has his luck turn around when he meets a (Tinkerbell-sized) pixie. He agrees to help her get back to her homeworld in exchange for a wish, in this case getting laid, obviously. But pixies are tricksters in this universe, and she casts a spell/curse on his penis that suddenly causes all the women he's wanted to bed him. My working title for this is 'Lucky Peter.'

This starts to get out of hand later, especially when he goes home on summer break to a family full of women.

I'm thinking that since these girls probably wouldn't fuck him otherwise, or be so eager to jump his bones right away, that this should probably go in the Mind Control category, although the main character isn't really malicious and agonizes over the moral quandaries of having women want to fuck him just because he has a magic dick.

 

[Carnevil9]

Interesting idea. But it doesn't sound like it belongs in Mind Control, since he isn't doing the controlling. It sounds more like a sci-fi/fantasy genre to me.

 

[Strangebuddy]

I don't know Sean's pixie trixxx series was in mind control. How does the charm/curse work? Does he have to show his cock to them or do they instinctively feel the need to take him as soon as he walks in the room ?

 

[MayorReynolds]

The curse works like an invisible, odorless pheromone. It does not require his cock to be out in the open. The women pick up on it while in his presence and and grow increasingly horny to the point of insatiability.

 

[Whispor]

I like it! He's going to have some definite challenges when all the female members of his family are desiring him. It'd be funny if he found out that his grandma gives the best blowjobs because of her ability to remove her dentures!

 

[Strangebuddy]

I think mind control would be appropriate then. Now since they are just getting horny, do they know it's him who's getting them hot or would they try to first find other sources of relief until they finally realize he's the only one who can scratch their itch

 

[MayorReynolds]

I think mind control would be appropriate then. Now since they are just getting horny, do they know it's him who's getting them hot or would they try to first find other sources of relief until they finally realize he's the only one who can scratch their itch

They're left wondering what suddenly came over them to drive them into sex with him, the conclusion sometimes being that he has just some appeal about him that other males don't (not necessarily a magic dick) or otherwise that they were pent up and unfulfilled to begin with and he just happened along at the right moment.

 

[Mello_SixtyNine]

The only problem I can think of is if I found a pixie that would grant me a wish, I'd wish for infinite wishes.

 

[MayorReynolds]

The only problem I can think of is if I found a pixie that would grant me a wish, I'd wish for infinite wishes.

He only gets the one, and it's not so much a 'wish' as her granting him the one thing he desires most for helping her get home, which at that moment is getting laid.

She also delivers this curse by hugging, sucking and humping (without penetration) his cock. I've always wanted to write a story about a male receiving sexual pleasure from a fairy/pixie, either one or a whole swarm of them.

 

[BurningMonkey]

It'd be funny if he found out that his grandma gives the best blowjobs because of her ability to remove her dentures!

Now there's an image I didn't need in my head. Thanks a lot...

 

[MayorReynolds]

Yep, grandma is staying at home for those chapters.

 

[Hypoxia]

... she casts a spell/curse on his penis that suddenly causes all the women he's wanted to bed him. My working title for this is 'Lucky Peter.'

I did that in RANDY RANDY (The Pornomancer) about a guy whose pheromones aroused every woman within range... except one woman, whose pheromones aroused every man within range... except Randy. So they become the perfect pair, totally uninvolved in each other, while the rest of humanity threw themselves at their feet, er I mean genitals. I posted it in Humor & Satire.

The drama: What do you DO when EVERYONE desperately wants to fuck you? When you can't go out in public because crowds will beg you to fuck them? When you need a cadre of asexual bodyguards to screen you from the masses? That's the implication of the "magic penis" (or "magic pussy") spell/curse. Work on it.

 

[MayorReynolds]

I did that in RANDY RANDY (The Pornomancer) about a guy whose pheromones aroused every woman within range... except one woman, whose pheromones aroused every man within range... except Randy. So they become the perfect pair, totally uninvolved in each other, while the rest of humanity threw themselves at their feet, er I mean genitals. I posted it in Humor & Satire.

The drama: What do you DO when EVERYONE desperately wants to fuck you? When you can't go out in public because crowds will beg you to fuck them? When you need a cadre of asexual bodyguards to screen you from the masses? That's the implication of the "magic penis" (or "magic pussy") spell/curse. Work on it.

That's interesting because one idea I had for Lucky Peter was that after he fucks a bisexual girl who lives in a dorm room across the hall, it gets the attention of her roommate...who is not affected by the curse at all because she's a lesbian. She ends up reluctantly (the roommate is her lover) helping him figure out how to break the spell with no sexual involvement between either of them.

 

[pghfriendly]

That's interesting because one idea I had for Lucky Peter was that after he fucks a bisexual girl who lives in a dorm room across the hall, it gets the attention of her roommate...who is not affected by the curse at all because she's a lesbian. She ends up reluctantly (the roommate is her lover) helping him figure out how to break the spell with no sexual involvement between either of them.

I like that

The story could lend itself to bouncing around a variety of different categories as different scenarios present themselves. I wouldn't be too concerned which category it starts in.

 

[Sean Renaud]

The only problem I can think of is if I found a pixie that would grant me a wish, I'd wish for infinite wishes.

You're making a multitude of assumptions here that may or may not apply.

The first is that you are thinking clearly and don't accidently screw yourself over. I think the number of people who would "Wish so and so could see this!" would be al ot higher than you think and bam you just dun goofed.

The second and these are fairly major hinge points in my Pixie Trixxx stories. Fairies=/=Genies. They are not bound to you in anyway shape or form. They are helping you out because it amuses them. So for starters you have infinite wishes already so long as she enjoys your company she'll keep doing things.

The final is that your dealing with a "good" entity. I've seen enough Faustian Tales to know that infinite wishes sucks pretty goddamn hard when the entity granting your wishes is actively trying to murder you.

I don't know Sean's pixie trixxx series was in mind control. How does the charm/curse work? Does he have to show his cock to them or do they instinctively feel the need to take him as soon as he walks in the room ?

You could you know ask someone who clearly knows.

Bottom line is that Laurel tends to trust us and put our stories where we want. It's not set in stone especially if you clearly goofed but you really should be more concerned about what audience you are actually aiming for.

Sci-fi/Fantasy and Mind-Control have a lot of cross over. You'd probably get away with either one but I'd lean toward Mind Control. The fact that the protagonist isn't the controller is (IMO) less important than the fact that someone is being controlled. Even if control in this case is a bit strong a term.

A question on how the charm works though what happens if they cannot for whatever reason get what they want? I mean this is pornworld so there are no unnattractive women and you've always lusted after your family but there is a limit to how many women a guy can. . .service. . .simultaneously. Buffy the Vampire Slayer has two episodes (one being a slightly funnier if darker retread) that basically explore the fact that having every woman who can spot you wanting to fuck your brains clean out of your skull is a lot less healthy than it sounds.

 

[MayorReynolds]

A question on how the charm works though what happens if they cannot for whatever reason get what they want? I mean this is pornworld so there are no unnattractive women and you've always lusted after your family but there is a limit to how many women a guy can. . .service. . .simultaneously. Buffy the Vampire Slayer has two episodes (one being a slightly funnier if darker retread) that basically explore the fact that having every woman who can spot you wanting to fuck your brains clean out of your skull is a lot less healthy than it sounds.

Ha...I actually did remember that 'Buffy' episode when this idea occurred to me, specifically that scene where Buffy's mom starts hitting on Xander and his head drops in that defeated "Fuck, not again" way. Then I pictured Pete (the main character in this story) looking exactly the same when he goes home and his sisters start climbing on him.

You raise an interesting point. The whole time I've been thinking about the curse making these girls horny on a more individual basis, so we have one chapter where he's fucking the once unobtainable best friend, another with the sexy professor, the bi roommate, etc. I wasn't considering the bigger picture of Pete walking across campus and the curse hitting the girls' olfactory senses/vaginas in a large public venue. It would certainly make for a good comic/tragic sequence.

Then it's vacation time and he's so desperate to get away from this college campus full of girls aching for his cock that he practically burns up the road racing home, only to discover that he'll be sharing the next eight weeks with...oh yeah.

 

[Mello_SixtyNine]

You're making a multitude of assumptions here that may or may not apply.

The first is that you are thinking clearly and don't accidently screw yourself over. I think the number of people who would "Wish so and so could see this!" would be al ot higher than you think and bam you just dun goofed.

The second and these are fairly major hinge points in my Pixie Trixxx stories. Fairies=/=Genies. They are not bound to you in anyway shape or form. They are helping you out because it amuses them. So for starters you have infinite wishes already so long as she enjoys your company she'll keep doing things.

The final is that your dealing with a "good" entity. I've seen enough Faustian Tales to know that infinite wishes sucks pretty goddamn hard when the entity granting your wishes is actively trying to murder you.



You could you know ask someone who clearly knows.

Bottom line is that Laurel tends to trust us and put our stories where we want. It's not set in stone especially if you clearly goofed but you really should be more concerned about what audience you are actually aiming for.

Sci-fi/Fantasy and Mind-Control have a lot of cross over. You'd probably get away with either one but I'd lean toward Mind Control. The fact that the protagonist isn't the controller is (IMO) less important than the fact that someone is being controlled. Even if control in this case is a bit strong a term.

A question on how the charm works though what happens if they cannot for whatever reason get what they want? I mean this is pornworld so there are no unnattractive women and you've always lusted after your family but there is a limit to how many women a guy can. . .service. . .simultaneously. Buffy the Vampire Slayer has two episodes (one being a slightly funnier if darker retread) that basically explore the fact that having every woman who can spot you wanting to fuck your brains clean out of your skull is a lot less healthy than it sounds.

This was one of my favorite moments from that episode.

 

[Sean Renaud]

That terrifying moment when you realize doors open both ways.

 

[MayorReynolds]

Pasted from my notes, here's what I came up for a tentative chapter-by-chapter breakdown.

CHAPTER ONE
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Pete, unlucky in love, suddenly gets a lot luckier when he helps a fairy get home. Pete then finds himself at the mercy of the attractive, young Professor Storm.

CHAPTER TWO
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Pete finds out the truth about his curse, and then gets it on with Melissa, the girl from afar.

CHAPTER THREE
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A sudden encounter with Lacey, the girl across the hall, prompts Lacey's angered lesbian lover to help Pete cure his spell.

CHAPTER FOUR
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Pete's session with pretty psychiatrist Dr. Powell gets hotter than usual, and only worsens his anxiety.

CHAPTER FIVE
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Pete reluctantly goes home...only to have his visiting cousin fall on him.

CHAPTER SIX
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Lucky? Peter has his sisters get in on the action.

CHAPTER SEVEN
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Mom joins in. And then...

CHAPTER EIGHT
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Pete meets the Goddess of Lust.

CHAPTER NINE
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Pete travels to Fenza* to find Trixie, but finds an Elven princess first.

CHAPTER TEN
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Pete finds himself at the mercy of an Elven matriarchy.

CHAPTER ELEVEN (Finale)
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Pete finally tracks down Trixie. But will things be the same?

*Fenza is a fantasy world I've had in my head almost my entire life. I've submitted one story about it to Lit so far.

Based on what the suggestions have been and the bigger picture, I'm leaning toward Sci-Fi/Fantasy but Mind Control is still a distinct possibility.

I'll likely develop and add more elements/chapters as I write. If anyone has suggestions for tweaks please let me know.

 

[Hypoxia]

You explicitly state that Pete is victim of a spell and is NOT a willing controller. Thus, not MC. And once you bring in elves and a magic world you're in Fantasy, not MC. Sure, you can *try* to post it in MC but I'm guessing Laurel will slot it in SF/F. It's her call.

 

[MayorReynolds]

Yes, this is definitely a Sci-Fi/Fantasy story, I think.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Mind control is by definition Sci-Fi fantasy, as is Non-Human at least on a site where bestiality is forbidden and robot lovers are still a little ways off. A sex doll that wasn't AI would fall under toys and masturbatuion. I wouldn't count on Laurel here at all, I might be a little leery about the readership. . .but I'd still err towards Mind Control. It is her call mind you, but its my experience that she tends to trust us unless we goof pretty hard. Bottom line here is the women are not in control of their actions which leans MC in my opinon. Vs Sci-Fi Fantasy which is really more about Star Wars and Lord of the Rings.

That said I think you've got a decent set up also sorry for not responding to your earlier post. I sometimes click an option that takes me straight to the newest post in a thread and. . .yeah I missed one. Anyhow I think we've got a few minor snags that may need untangling.

1. Why is the lesbian interested in breaking the curse instead of fucking this guy? It's a magical spell aimed at females. It shouldn't matter that she's a lesbian. If on the other hand it somehow simply heightens existent desires without breaking down the details on how many psychologists think human sexuality functions on a scale lets just use the math. If gays make up 1% of the population (a low estimate but fine for this.) He's on a school of how many and travels home past how many more? I'm sorry but math tells us that if something happens one out of even ever thousand times once you repeat a motion some 5k times you're probably gonna hit it. And you may it it multiple times cus odds are funny that way. You have a 50/50 chance of a coin landing heads up. That doesn't actually stop you from flipping a coin and getting heads ten times in a row. . .

Now here is where that pesky unwritten hierarchy comes into play. Lots of guys are. . .squicked by gay sex. If you go this route you should probably put it under gay or ahave a helluva disclaimer at the start because. . .reasons. You can always slip in some lesbians, nobody cares. But guy on guy action should be labeled in a way that can be detected from orbit.

2. Once this guy figures out the curse how is he not starting to take appropriate precautions? I get forgetting your Cousin would be there and maybe sis was supposed to be away. But I would think after Sis and Cuz you're brain would be like. . .FUCK ME SIDE WAYS GOTTA GET OUT BEFORE MOM AND AUNTIE GET HOME! Unless he's genuinely enjoying this.

3. That last part with the fairy land may be a bridge too far but that's just my gut. Nothing I can really back up at the moment.

 

[MiddleAgedMan]

I like it! He's going to have some definite challenges when all the female members of his family are desiring him. It'd be funny if he found out that his grandma gives the best blowjobs because of her ability to remove her dentures!

You almost broke my keyboard! I wasn't sure I'd get the coffe out of it, and everything smells of coffee now since it came out my nose when I read this...