Writing Challenge ~ August 2014 ~ Comments and Reviews

[Britwitch]

WRITING CHALLENGE REVIEW THREAD ~ AUGUST 2014​

Just a few little rules for this thread:-

• This thread is for comments and reviews only. Submissions go here!

• Please keep your comments focused on the pieces posted for the challenge running from 3rd – 31st August 2014 only, this is not really intended to be a thread for conversation/flirting/mayhem and so on (Sorry to be a bore!). Writers should be able to find reviews/comments for their pieces without having to trawl through pages of banter (no matter how amusing/sexy it might be!)

• Readers/Reviewers:- Please keep your comments and reviews polite and, wherever possible, positive. If you have constructive criticism or advice for writers please do give it but be polite about it! You don’t have to like everything you read but if you really don’t have anything nice to say about something then I would suggest you refrain from posting. And if all you want to say is you liked a piece and no more…that’s great too! We all know how writers like to be appreciated!

• Authors:- Please take constructive criticism as it is intended, as an attempt at improving possible flaws/problems/areas of confusion in your piece. They are not (hopefully!) personal attacks on you or your work.

• This is supposed to be a fun way to get to know new writers and potential partners, to exercise our writing brains, it’s not a competition, please keep that in mind!

• One more thing…suggestions for future prompts are very welcome and should be PM’d to me – Britwitch – as a link ideally.

Previous challenges and reviews can be found here.

Happy reading!

 

[Essie1]

Oh, Miss Pretty Serpentine - exquisite. That's all I shall say.

 

[prettyserpentine]

Oh, Miss Pretty Serpentine - exquisite. That's all I shall say.

Why thank you. I thoroughly enjoyed yours too. It was sweet and summery, and sinful too. Very well written.

 

[Britwitch]

Your Love Surrounds Me ~ prettyserpentine

This was beautifully written and clearly came from the heart. Gorgeous, just gorgeous!

Untitled ~ Essie1

And this was a lovely piece too. So sweet and tender and deliciously naughty. Loved it!

 

[DesEsseintes]

In order of posting -

Ms. Serpentine, this was beautiful - it flowed rather than stepped, by which I mean that the rhythm felt natural but was clearly there. Impressive counterpoint with the 'chorus' sections, too, to break the longer, more lyrical lines: like a river strewn with waterlilies, it was both profound and pretty. Thank you.

Essie - I loved reading this, and boy, was it erotic! Playful, tender, balanced (in every sense!) - though it was short, I gained a real sense of the affection of the protagonists, as well as their desire. The latter wouldn't have been nearly so powerful without the former. That's a heck of a lot to cram into less than 2,00 words, and I was hugely impressed. Thank you.

Britwitch - Another expertly paced piece of Gothic horror, leaving so much to the imagination but content to shade in the outlines like a Japanese miniature. Your writing is so natural, swift and unforced. Thank you.

 

[Britwitch]

Britwitch - Another expertly paced piece of Gothic horror, leaving so much to the imagination but content to shade in the outlines like a Japanese miniature. Your writing is so natural, swift and unforced. Thank you.

High praise indeed...
Thank you very much, glad to know you enjoyed it!

 

[TheAntiRebel]

Gah. I tried to write an entry and it came back at entirely too many words.

 

[Britwitch]

Gah. I tried to write an entry and it came back at entirely too many words.

Post it anyway. The word count is just one element of the challenge. I know I've posted pieces that were too long in the past, as have others.
Am sure we'd all like to read what you've come up with.

 

[TheAntiRebel]

Post it anyway. The word count is just one element of the challenge. I know I've posted pieces that were too long in the past, as have others.
Am sure we'd all like to read what you've come up with.

No way, I am a stickler for the rules! I've already started cutting it anyway.

 

[Britwitch]

No way, I am a stickler for the rules! I've already started cutting it anyway.

Good luck with the edits and can't wait to read it!