sr71plt
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Perhaps you should first pay attention to what I posted.
But anything to keep having it all about you, right, sport?
FAWC 5: Line, Please!
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Perhaps you should first pay attention to what I posted.
But anything to keep having it all about you, right, sport?
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I don't have that kind of knowledge, so I have to say any inaccuracies of this type would go over my head. Or around it, or whatever. When I read the story, it sounded plausible to me, and I think for most readers and stories, "plausible" is what you need.
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Yes, this.
None of this would be posted here if JBJ wasn't running an irrelevant agenda just to keep himself as the center of attention.
It's the best of the stories I've read so far (and, no, I didn't write it).
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Nah, I don't do dudes, brah.
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Perhaps you should first pay attention to what I posted.
But anything to keep having it all about you, right, sport?
I invented self promotion, maybe I can help your book sales.
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... and here I thought scouries was the king of egomania. ;-) He posts hotter pictures at least...
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Did you write the awful story?
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Phoebe Pemberton had this exact experience. The soldier was shot, and she was unable to get at the bleeding artery, being alone and unequipped or trained. He bled to death. Woulda made a better story without the bullshit.
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Perhaps you should first pay attention to what I posted.
But anything to keep having it all about you, right, sport?
Why would I wanna pay attention to you? Youre the idiot who struts across the stage, fulla sound and fury that signifies nuthin.
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One of the 25 posted at least. Which reminds me: Can we get back to discussing stories for a bit? Feeding trolls is all well and dandy if one has nothing else to do (or the bridge is in dire need of cleansing), but we're here for a reason I thought.
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sr71plt
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"We" could, Blind Justice, although I haven't seen a post from you discussing the stories, so I don't think the butter is melting in your mouth on this quite yet.
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The lesson is get your fucking facts straight if you go writing historical fiction.
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The whole of human information at a keystroke and that was the best source you could find?
Joseph Lister used carbolic acid as an aseptic after the American Civil War was over, and he was following protocols to fight childbed fever developed in a Viennese hospital in the 1840s. He didn't have anything to do with heat sterilization. If there were literally no aseptic practices in medicine that he was familiar with whatsoever before then, how did he decide contamination was a problem in the first place?
Look, I get the whole rummage sale G. Gordon Liddy performance piece you have going on here, I've just opted out of it. If you're going to say a story is ruined by factual errors, at least be right.
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I suck at fact checking, so I don't write historical fiction.
Pilot: I'm not a reading vacuum cleaner, I need some time to read my stories or rather have them read to me, hello screen reader. Try listening to SAPI for more than three hours. If it's story discussion you want, here goes:
"Empire of the Stars" so far has been my favourite. I like clever humor, I like all the little geek references the author dropped throughout the story, and I also liked that the story perfectly mirrored how I feel when writing under a deadline and tossing ideas against the wall, hoping that something useful might stick. And no, I didn't write that one, although I wish I had thought of something that clever.
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"Invasion of the Orcs" had a promising title, but fizzled weakly over the finish line. Too much packing bags, too much everyday chores, not enough "bad, scary aliens". The trek through the nighttime woods, meant as the climax of the story I guess, was rich on outdoors advice and camp hygiene, but lacked heart-pounding panic and breathless "run-for-your-life" atmosphere.
The lead may have seen the aliens commit atrocities on the news, but a single alien trying to bash her front door in, making obscene gestures (or just blasting off half of the houses front fascia, if one is more into the Bay school of storytelling) would have helped wonders in making the threat much more immediate. From there, it could have evolved into a deadly cat and mouse game - a squad of invaders off in the distance, their light emitters cutting through the night, shouting orders which reach the panicked protag as distorted, inhuman noises. All that would have made the leisurely stroll through the woods that much more impactful. Also, she carried a gun but used it not one single time, not even to accidentially shoot another fugitive. Damn
Am I allowed to make guesses as to who might have written this one? I know about one author at least who's pretty much all the time in the campgrounds... ;-)
The lead may have seen the aliens commit atrocities on the news, but a single alien trying to bash her front door in, making obscene gestures (or just blasting off half of the houses front fascia, if one is more into the Bay school of storytelling) would have helped wonders in making the threat much more immediate. From there, it could have evolved into a deadly cat and mouse game - a squad of invaders off in the distance, their light emitters cutting through the night, shouting orders which reach the panicked protag as distorted, inhuman noises. All that would have made the leisurely stroll through the woods that much more impactful. Also, she carried a gun but used it not one single time, not even to accidentially shoot another fugitive. Damn
Am I allowed to make guesses as to who might have written this one? I know about one author at least who's pretty much all the time in the campgrounds... ;-)
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"Invasion of the Orcs" had a promising title, but fizzled weakly over the finish line. Too much packing bags, too much everyday chores, not enough "bad, scary aliens". The trek through the nighttime woods, meant as the climax of the story I guess, was rich on outdoors advice and camp hygiene, but lacked heart-pounding panic and breathless "run-for-your-life" atmosphere.
The lead may have seen the aliens commit atrocities on the news, but a single alien trying to bash her front door in, making obscene gestures (or just blasting off half of the houses front fascia, if one is more into the Bay school of storytelling) would have helped wonders in making the threat much more immediate. From there, it could have evolved into a deadly cat and mouse game - a squad of invaders off in the distance, their light emitters cutting through the night, shouting orders which reach the panicked protag as distorted, inhuman noises. All that would have made the leisurely stroll through the woods that much more impactful. Also, she carried a gun but used it not one single time, not even to accidentially shoot another fugitive. Damn
Am I allowed to make guesses as to who might have written this one? I know about one author at least who's pretty much all the time in the campgrounds... ;-)
If you're referring to me, I camp in a 30 foot travel trailer with heat, AC, and a decent shower. I watch the birds and the fish, drink wine, write smut and wave to the kayakers that float by.
Today I took a bike ride. To the camp store. To get ice for hubby's beer. (I'm drinking red tonight. No need for ice.)
Trust me. This girl will not survive the first 20 minutes of the zombie apocalypse.
But maybe you were talking about someone else.
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If you're referring to me, I camp in a 30 foot travel trailer with heat, AC, and a decent shower. I watch the birds and the fish, drink wine, write smut and wave to the kayakers that float by.
Today I took a bike ride. To the camp store. To get ice for hubby's beer. (I'm drinking red tonight. No need for ice.)
Trust me. This girl will not survive the first 20 minutes of the zombie apocalypse.
But maybe you were talking about someone else.
I remembered you posting about camping quite a lot, which may have influenced my guess, yes. But I'm not familiar enough with your style yet. Also, zombies and aliens, two pair of hiking shoes. Maxbe you'd suck in the zombiecalypse, but maybe your teacher kung-fu would decimate another sentient species, who knows?
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pl is one of the very hardest to pin down, I think. She is a bit of a chameleon. I have about seven dead-to-rights at this stage, I think. The rest...
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Well, if you become a brain craving zombie feel free to shamble down to Alabama and eat my brains. That way at least they will be good for something.
Fair warning it will have been marinated in rum by that point.
Or coffee.
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patientlee
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Coffee and rum. Yum!
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There aren't a whole lot of happy stories in this bunch, huh?
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Ditto for FAWC4.
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