light BDSM story needs a second set of eyes

[BoundariesBroken]

Open to any suggestions to make this better. I get decent praise for my story lines and concepts and beat up badly for my grammar and attention to detail.

Easy going, story available in .docx format.

Thank you in advance.

 

[InsatiableDsire]

You don't have PMs turned on so I'll tell you here--I'd be happy to take a look. Former English major, and was at one time an editor, and proofreader so i do have some qualifications...

 

[_Lynn_]

Open to any suggestions to make this better. I get decent praise for my story lines and concepts and beat up badly for my grammar and attention to detail.

Easy going, story available in .docx format.

Thank you in advance.

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You don't have PMs turned on so I'll tell you here--I'd be happy to take a look. Former English major, and was at one time an editor, and proofreader so i do have some qualifications...

Adding the instructions helps.