Help Needed

[AlannaGray78]

Hi guys

I'm new to erotic writing and have recently written an erotica short story, mingled with some humour.

Would really apprecaite some feedback from you experienced guys, as I'm hoping to write a series.

http://www.amazon.co.uk/The-Arousal...H2H4/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1337617906&sr=8-1


Many thanks

Alana

 

[sr71plt]

Put it on Literotica and we'll take it a look at it. This isn't really a critique board for stories not posted to this site--especially ones we'd have to pay to read (which really makes this advertising spam).

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Put it on Literotica and we'll take it a look at it. This isn't really a critique board for stories not posted to this site--especially ones we'd have to pay to read (which really makes this advertising spam).

Hooroo, Hooray. For once I can say I totally agree with you.

This is a total abuse of Lit's hospitality.