divinelyinspired75
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I am need of an editor. Iam currently writing 2 nonhuman category stories. I plan to wite in the genre of Nonhuman, Interracial and possibly Loving Wives. When responding to this thread please let me know if you edit for the genre's listed and what your turn around time is on editing. I would like some one who can assist with the flow of the story (so I don't lose the reader) and grammar/ punctuation (in case I miss something). Below is a portion of one of the stories I will need help editing. Be gentle as this is my first time posting though I am a long time member (under a different name) and fan of the site. Further Details of the story will be available to the lucky one chose to be my editor....Thank you for your time in viewing this post...Happy Reading
“Okay girl, get out of the car.” That’s what she kept telling herself. Keyanna was sitting in her car outside of the Hotel where they agreed to meet. “Shit, I can’t stop shaking. I am nervous as hell." She said to herself. She had all kinds of thoughts running through her head “what if he doesn’t like what he sees in person? Is my breath okay? Why did I decide to wear this outfit?” she sighed “I need to get out of the car now or I’ll chicken out.” she said to herself. Keyanna checked herself one last time in the mirror then opened the car door and got out. She adjusted her clothes and headed for the front lobby. Kevin watched Keyanna sitting in her car debating; he knew she’d be nervous, and that she would hesitate, but he knew she would come to him.
Keyanna got on the elevator and went up to the 3rd floor. She got off and walked the short distance to the door. She took a deep breath “no turning back now” she thought and knocked on the door. The door open and their eyes met “Hi there, come on in” Kevin said with a smile. Keyanna walked in slowly and stopped inside just enough for Kevin to close the door. She heard him turn the lock and her breathing picks up, getting deeper and faster as she stood waiting. From behind he is taking the view. His eyes probe her every curve and detail; from the style of her hair to the color of her toenail polish. He comes up to her and gently kisses her on the nape of her neck. She can feel the warmth of his breath as he kisses her again, he starts inching closer to her with every kiss until she can feel him pressed firmly against her backside.
“Okay girl, get out of the car.” That’s what she kept telling herself. Keyanna was sitting in her car outside of the Hotel where they agreed to meet. “Shit, I can’t stop shaking. I am nervous as hell." She said to herself. She had all kinds of thoughts running through her head “what if he doesn’t like what he sees in person? Is my breath okay? Why did I decide to wear this outfit?” she sighed “I need to get out of the car now or I’ll chicken out.” she said to herself. Keyanna checked herself one last time in the mirror then opened the car door and got out. She adjusted her clothes and headed for the front lobby. Kevin watched Keyanna sitting in her car debating; he knew she’d be nervous, and that she would hesitate, but he knew she would come to him.
Keyanna got on the elevator and went up to the 3rd floor. She got off and walked the short distance to the door. She took a deep breath “no turning back now” she thought and knocked on the door. The door open and their eyes met “Hi there, come on in” Kevin said with a smile. Keyanna walked in slowly and stopped inside just enough for Kevin to close the door. She heard him turn the lock and her breathing picks up, getting deeper and faster as she stood waiting. From behind he is taking the view. His eyes probe her every curve and detail; from the style of her hair to the color of her toenail polish. He comes up to her and gently kisses her on the nape of her neck. She can feel the warmth of his breath as he kisses her again, he starts inching closer to her with every kiss until she can feel him pressed firmly against her backside.
