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I've been working on a story and I need some expert advice. In my story the guy (Troy) and his wife (Allysia) have been married for 6 years. They have a son who also is 6. Troy has pretty much given in to Allysia's every whim. He loves her very much. They go extremely long times without having sex and Troy can't take it anymore (four weeks to him is like murder). She accuses him of being selfish. Something snaps within him and he gets a little ruff with her and then fucks her from behind. He doesn't let her cum. He pulls out and fists himself until he cums, squirting out across her back. Then he leaves the room. I want him to follow this dominant nature he has. They are upper middle class and up until this point pretty stereo typical. Troy is a lawyer and Allysi is a homemaker. She responded to his ruffness, it made her wetter and more excited than she could ever remember. But, she doesn't want to give in. What road shall I take in this situation. I've been interested in BDSM and want to include some in my story. Help! I need some ideas.
 
I've been working on a story and I need some expert advice. In my story the guy (Troy) and his wife (Allysia) have been married for 6 years. They have a son who also is 6. Troy has pretty much given in to Allysia's every whim. He loves her very much. They go extremely long times without having sex and Troy can't take it anymore (four weeks to him is like murder). She accuses him of being selfish. Something snaps within him and he gets a little ruff with her and then fucks her from behind. He doesn't let her cum. He pulls out and fists himself until he cums, squirting out across her back. Then he leaves the room. I want him to follow this dominant nature he has. They are upper middle class and up until this point pretty stereo typical. Troy is a lawyer and Allysi is a homemaker. She responded to his ruffness, it made her wetter and more excited than she could ever remember. But, she doesn't want to give in. What road shall I take in this situation. I've been interested in BDSM and want to include some in my story. Help! I need some ideas.
It could be an interesting story, given the right story line. There are a lot of stories in the story section of Literotica as well as other Internet sites. Go research this for yourself. Writers research their story topics, if they don't live them. Oh, and the word is rough. Ruff is dog speak.

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oops!

Sorry about the ruff, I do mean rough. I'm too informal at times.
 
At the risk of becoming bound up in the minutiae. When you say "he fists himself" I assume you are using it in a very different manner from the common way the term is used in BDSM, which, I would venture is physiologically impossible for most men.

At any rate, maybe make up sex is the path to reevaluation and shifting into the D/s lifestyle.
 
At the risk of becoming bound up in the minutiae. When you say "he fists himself" I assume you are using it in a very different manner from the common way the term is used in BDSM, which, I would venture is physiologically impossible for most men.
It is most definitely possible and actually not terribly uncommon in some communities. I agree, though, that the meaning used here would be confusing. "Pumps his cock with his fist" or something along those lines would make more sense.
 
At the risk of becoming bound up in the minutiae. When you say "he fists himself" I assume you are using it in a very different manner from the common way the term is used in BDSM, which, I would venture is physiologically impossible for most men.

It took me a second to get the right view on this phrase, too... :D
 
What road shall I take in this situation.

The one that leads to the end you want for the story.

Imagine your story as dots that you need to connect. Think about what the next dot is that you have in your mind and then find the line to it, don't think about all the lines you can draw from the dot you are in.

You have to find the next dot on your own though. If it's a very far dot, like you only have the ending in mind - think about a dot you need as prerequisite.

Let's say the ending dot is something like that she turns into a gangbang slut. The dot before this could be then that she has sex with a random single person before she has sex with a group of random persons.

Now you can check if you can connect the dots already (and whether you want already) - let's check if we can connect the dots:
Starting point: She is horny and wants this experience again. She doesn't want to give in to her husband.
Next dot: She needs to have sex with a random single person.

Hey, this fits. Now you need to decide HOW to connect them.
She could decide to have sex with a random single person to squelch her desire and not give in to her husband.
She could rent a porn video, watch it at home and some guest could catch her watching it and have his way with her.
She could visit an internet forum to learn more about this and meet someone from there.
...

I hope this guideline helps. It does help me at least when writing stories ;-)
 
It took me a second to get the right view on this phrase, too... :D
True, the phrase isn't often used in the way the story uses it, at least in stories I've read. But, Because of the way it's used, I didn't have a problem understanding what the character did. Sometimes, the unusual way of saying something helps the color of the story. I'm not saying this is an example of that, but being predictable isn't always the way to go.
 
At the risk of becoming bound up in the minutiae. When you say "he fists himself" I assume you are using it in a very different manner from the common way the term is used in BDSM, which, I would venture is physiologically impossible for most men.


Etoile said:
It is most definitely possible and actually not terribly uncommon in some communities. I agree, though, that the meaning used here would be confusing. "Pumps his cock with his fist" or something along those lines would make more sense.


Oh my fucking gawd, I laughed so hard after reading Etoile's clarification that I wound up slumped in my chair, unable to read for what seemed like five minutes. I have to admit that I was picturing something much more, er, primal. :eek:

Although I'll bet you anything that she'd respond to that roughness.
 
Don't put a BDSM label on it. Just write it as you feel these two people would explore things.

The only thing I would counsel is that they learn about consent and negotiation, maybe through a convo with someone, and try to do that. Also, in that convo the someone should tell them to be careful of joints, for instance, when tying ropes, which leads them to learn a little bit about BDSM safety-- but the kind of ruff sex (Sorry, I love that) that they are playing with does not need a label.

Also, she could try jumping him. They could just get into a whole wrasslin' for the top" dynamic that turns out to be incredibly satisfying to both of them, and more intimate than they ever expected.
 
Don't put a BDSM label on it. Just write it as you feel these two people would explore things.........
Also, she could try jumping him. They could just get into a whole wrasslin' for the top" dynamic that turns out to be incredibly satisfying to both of them, and more intimate than they ever expected.


This makes perfect sense, and would be more understandable to a broader audience.
 
Also, she could try jumping him. They could just get into a whole wrasslin' for the top" dynamic that turns out to be incredibly satisfying to both of them, and more intimate than they ever expected.

Yes! One of my FAVORITE things!



BTW, "fisted himself" I pictured him arched and wrist deep in himself and thought, huh?
 
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