want some advice on a nonhuman story

[Cruel2BKind]

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-half-breeds-journey

Above is a link for a nonhuman story I wrote. Its pretty short, and basically it is about a girl who gets lost in the woods, and finds a circle demon. The demon has no gender, it is basically an incubi and succubi in one. It can change its form, and even split into more then one person. It is called a circle demon because it is trapped inside a stonehenge-like structure. It's one purpose in life is to attract humans and animals into the circle and literally fuck them to death.

Anyway, in the world I created, humans are the only creatures that can lie. The girl makes a deal with the demon. She is hungry and cold and alone, and she makes the demon promise not to hurt her, and to only screw her for three hours, in exchange for him telling her the way back home. The demon is angry, but it needs sex so bad that it agrees.

There is a pretty hot sex scene, if I do say so myself ^_^, and the story ends with the girls sexual awakening, and the realization that she herself is not entirely human. She decides that instead of going back to her tiny village, she wants to explore the world.

I am already working on a second chapter. I meant for it to stand alone, but I got several comments and feedback asking for more. The second one is more mundane, with her seducing a shopkeeper in a slightly larger town to get the supplies she needs. I really don't know where to go from there.

This world I created is full of supernatural creatures. Pixies, druids, nymphs, humans, dragons, centaurs. I want her to make her way to the capitol, and eventually she will rise to be the madame of a multi-species whorehouse. Will people please post ideas for interesting sexy encounters with all kinds of creatures? I don't care if the creature isn't already on the list, I came here for ideas, and maybe there are some creatures I haven't thought of yet.

Thank you!

 

[CandiCame]

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-half-breeds-journey

Above is a link for a nonhuman story I wrote. Its pretty short, and basically it is about a girl who gets lost in the woods, and finds a circle demon. The demon has no gender, it is basically an incubi and succubi in one. It can change its form, and even split into more then one person. It is called a circle demon because it is trapped inside a stonehenge-like structure. It's one purpose in life is to attract humans and animals into the circle and literally fuck them to death.

Anyway, in the world I created, humans are the only creatures that can lie. The girl makes a deal with the demon. She is hungry and cold and alone, and she makes the demon promise not to hurt her, and to only screw her for three hours, in exchange for him telling her the way back home. The demon is angry, but it needs sex so bad that it agrees.

There is a pretty hot sex scene, if I do say so myself ^_^, and the story ends with the girls sexual awakening, and the realization that she herself is not entirely human. She decides that instead of going back to her tiny village, she wants to explore the world.

I am already working on a second chapter. I meant for it to stand alone, but I got several comments and feedback asking for more. The second one is more mundane, with her seducing a shopkeeper in a slightly larger town to get the supplies she needs. I really don't know where to go from there.

This world I created is full of supernatural creatures. Pixies, druids, nymphs, humans, dragons, centaurs. I want her to make her way to the capitol, and eventually she will rise to be the madame of a multi-species whorehouse. Will people please post ideas for interesting sexy encounters with all kinds of creatures? I don't care if the creature isn't already on the list, I came here for ideas, and maybe there are some creatures I haven't thought of yet.

Thank you!

I'm gonna say centaur and sayter. It's a crime to have a fantasy world and not have sayters fucking through it. Can't spell sayter to save my life...

 

[PennLady]

I'm gonna say centaur and sayter. It's a crime to have a fantasy world and not have sayters fucking through it. Can't spell sayter to save my life...

You're not off by much. Satyr.

 

[Sugary_Comfort]

Don't really have any ideas for encounters and whatnot, but the way this story starts with her having sex with the circle demon and realizing there's more out there than her hometown, and how she begins using sex to her advantage, makes me think the whole story should end with her getting fucked to death by the very demon from the beginning. Wow, long sentence, sorry.

But yeah. Kind of makes me think about the movie Perfume: Story of a Murderer and how the guy started killing women to get their scents to make the perfect perfume and in the end he uses the perfume on himself and seems to be eaten to death by the people in the place he was born.

 

[JackLuis]

Don't really have any ideas for encounters and whatnot, but the way this story starts with her having sex with the circle demon and realizing there's more out there than her hometown, and how she begins using sex to her advantage, makes me think the whole story should end with her getting fucked to death by the very demon from the beginning. Wow, long sentence, sorry.

But yeah. Kind of makes me think about the movie Perfume: Story of a Murderer and how the guy started killing women to get their scents to make the perfect perfume and in the end he uses the perfume on himself and seems to be eaten to death by the people in the place he was born.

Nice arc to that. If she changes in her journey to the capital. from the innocent she was to a harder more sexually aggressive woman, she could find and loose a "Prince Charming" along the way and meet him years later in the capital where she ends up fucking him to death!

In her remorse at her own evil nature she seeks out the Circle Deamon and takes her punishment, over three days.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

Hmm...

I was thinking more along the lines of sexual encounter ideas...

The circle demon was supposed to be a one-time character, and I'm trying to think of some sexy scenes to follow up on.

 

[Boxlicker101]

How about mermaids? She could have a lesbian experience with a mermaid where they bring each other to orgasms by a form of 69 where they suck and lick each other's breasts.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

Ugh...

lesbian experiences to a minimum please -_-'

 

[Sugary_Comfort]

Well, if I were you I'd think of all the places Helen would visit. You're probably setting it in a fantasy world but the places can still parallel our own. So think of the places and their real-world counterparts and do a search for mythical creatures of that area.

Dragons abound in almost every corner of the world (and I believe some possess powers of shape-shifting).

Kappas, selkies, mermaids, fairies, sprites, pixies, brownies, leprechauns, banshees, sirens, harpies, sea serpents, giants, ogres, trolls, cyclops, minotaurs, centaurs, tauroses, ghosts, imps, changlings, vampires, werewolves and other were-creatures, angels, gnomes, djinn, griffins, manticores, chimera etc.

There's soooo many. Hehe something funny I learned about kappas recently is that they go through your butt in order to get to your soul. Apparently that's where it's kept, haha.

Oh and I just wanted to say that the tentacle aspect of your story wasn't the greatest. The only thing tentacle about it was that the demon's dicks were like tentacles. But all they did was fuck the girl. I think part of the appeal the tentacle porn has on some people is the fact that they can be used for bondage and fucking at the same time.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

Oh and I just wanted to say that the tentacle aspect of your story wasn't the greatest. The only thing tentacle about it was that the demon's dicks were like tentacles. But all they did was fuck the girl. I think part of the appeal the tentacle porn has on some people is the fact that they can be used for bondage and fucking at the same time.

Sorry -_-' It was the first time I tried tentacle porn.

But thanks for the ideas! I think that vampires are kind of overdone, but I would love to get in some ghosts, angels, djinn, pixies, stuff like that. Thanks for the criticism.

 

[Sugary_Comfort]

Sorry -_-' It was the first time I tried tentacle porn.

But thanks for the ideas! I think that vampires are kind of overdone, but I would love to get in some ghosts, angels, djinn, pixies, stuff like that. Thanks for the criticism.

You're welcome ^_^

I've heard some creepy stories about ghosts and sex. I don't know whether to even begin to think some are real or not, but even still the thought can be pretty horrific. I believe in ghosts, I'm just not sure I believe they're capable of engaging in sexual acts. I would more believe it was a demon or something and the person just thought it was a ghost.

Had a co-worker tell me about a friend of hers who was raped by a ghost many times. A few of those times she was raped right in front of her kids.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

Creepy!

:surprise:

 

[Cruel2BKind]

ugh, forgot how to use the smilies

 

[milkmaiden38]

I have few ideas for you. 1) a sexual journey could start with basic sexual stuff ..like masturbation ..leading to oral sex .. leading to straight sex …sex with toys … group sex …anal .. role playing, etc. Each encounter would of course be with a different creature. So oral sex might be with a centaur …let’s say. … while the group sex would be with pixies.

She has already experienced some of these ... but in a more dream state. This time around ... she is more in control.

Additionally, the journey could also have different little sub-dramas. She is captured by humans … and needs to escape (so she has sex with all her guards until they all fall asleep from sexual exhaustion). Or she needs some money along the way …and does a few odd jobs … like maybe a porn shop clerk … which leads to sex with toys … or on a stud farm, etc.

I have more ideas, just PM me.