First story help please: interracial gangbag with a bit of non-consent

[thesweetsweetness]

Hello,

I'm new around here and I am wanting to submit my first story. I am hoping for someone to help me a little. I am pretty pleased with my story as it is, but I would like a second set of eyes to read it and offer any corrections and/or tips that could improve the story before I submit it here.

(I have contacted a volunteer editor from the list but since I have not yet heard back after a few days, I thought I would just ask here opposed to contacting another. I hope that is OK.)

I think the story is on the shorter side, probably only one page when published here. The story is about an interracial gang bang with a bit of forced/non-consent. The boyfriend of the girl sets everything up and then watches.

I can email the story, or maybe just send it in a private message here?

Anyone willing to help me?

Thanks for your time.
xo

 

[lovecraft68]

Hello,

I'm new around here and I am wanting to submit my first story. I am hoping for someone to help me a little. I am pretty pleased with my story as it is, but I would like a second set of eyes to read it and offer any corrections and/or tips that could improve the story before I submit it here.

(I have contacted a volunteer editor from the list but since I have not yet heard back after a few days, I thought I would just ask here opposed to contacting another. I hope that is OK.)

I think the story is on the shorter side, probably only one page when published here. The story is about an interracial gang bang with a bit of forced/non-consent. The boyfriend of the girl sets everything up and then watches.

I can email the story, or maybe just send it in a private message here?

Anyone willing to help me?

Thanks for your time.
xo

Hi, unfortunately I can tell you from experience that the volunteer editor's list can be a problem many don't bother anymore but don;t pull their name off the list and in some cases if they are busy they will just not get back rather than to tell you that.

You are better off looking through this forum because I believe every month they have a "roll call" for editor's who are available to help.

 

[thesweetsweetness]

Thank you lovecraft68 for your help.

 

[MidnightLove123]

I could help you out. I have done editing for one other person here before. I can do checks for typos and basic grammar/spelling, though I'm no whiz in that department. Comfortable with nonconsent/dark subject matter - I write that myself.

Just PM if interested.

- A

 

[thesweetsweetness]

MidnightLove123 - PM with story sent. I hope it is OK and it works to PM the whole story. It seems to have worked. Looking forward to your help and suggestions. Thank you!
-Cat

 

[xxxpaulzzz]

send me your story. dont know if i can add any worthwhile comments but i like the storyline.

 

[thesweetsweetness]

send me your story. dont know if i can add any worthwhile comments but i like the storyline.

Story sent in a PM. Thanks for any help / comments, hope you enjoy it.

 

[thesweetsweetness]

Excited to say I just submitted my story for approval to be posted. Fingers crossed it is accepted and well received.

I want to give a big thank you to MidnightLove123 for the help in editing and helping the story flow smoother. I really appreciate the time you gave to me and this story.

I will post again when/if the story is published here, until then I will be playing on my amateur picture thread. Come play with me.

PS. Thanks to all the PMs anxious to read the story, I do hope you enjoy it.

 

[Kirk_09]

very excited to read it...

I was actually telling the sweetness how I enjoy reading stories where white women are fucked by coloured men, either consentually or no-con...When it's written by a white woman it just adds to the excitement.

 

[thesweetsweetness]

very excited to read it...

I was actually telling the sweetness how I enjoy reading stories where white women are fucked by coloured men, either consentually or no-con...When it's written by a white woman it just adds to the excitement.

You have a private message sir.

 

[Kirk_09]

Enjoyed it very much and you really need to write more

 

[thesweetsweetness]

It was approved!

My story has been published, enjoy.

http://www.literotica.com/s/his-gift-2

 

[BlaqueDragon]

My story has been published, enjoy.

http://www.literotica.com/s/his-gift-2

Well written Erotica

While the subject matter is not my personal favorite, I can still appreciate the highly charged eroticism of the story itself. You show definate talent and I would definately like to see where your (Imagination? Experience?) takes you next.

BlaqueDragon