Posted my first story

[jrinca]

Happy New Year to everyone.

I've been lurking on this site as a reader for over a decade, I think, and I resolved that this year I would finally start writing and posting. I work in entertainment, and I guess I always saw this site as a guilty pleasure to enjoy but not participate in. Now I'm getting a little older, and... fuck it. If I feel like writing erotica, I'm going to do it.

So my first story is finally up. I started small, but I'm already trying to figure out what my next will be. If anyone takes the time to read it, I hope you enjoy.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511678

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Happy New Year to everyone.

I've been lurking on this site as a reader for over a decade, I think, and I resolved that this year I would finally start writing and posting. I work in entertainment, and I guess I always saw this site as a guilty pleasure to enjoy but not participate in. Now I'm getting a little older, and... fuck it. If I feel like writing erotica, I'm going to do it.

So my first story is finally up. I started small, but I'm already trying to figure out what my next will be. If anyone takes the time to read it, I hope you enjoy.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511678

Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz Keep the day job.

 

[litfan10]

Happy New Year to everyone.

I've been lurking on this site as a reader for over a decade, I think, and I resolved that this year I would finally start writing and posting. I work in entertainment, and I guess I always saw this site as a guilty pleasure to enjoy but not participate in. Now I'm getting a little older, and... fuck it. If I feel like writing erotica, I'm going to do it.

So my first story is finally up. I started small, but I'm already trying to figure out what my next will be. If anyone takes the time to read it, I hope you enjoy.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511678

Hey jrinca!! Welcome to the AH!!! I also hung out here for almost a decade as a reader before writing here and it is a total blast. Welcome to the ride - I'll read your story this weekend sometime and get back to you!

 

[TxRad]

Welcome to the AH and writing. You'll find some good and helpful people here. Also a ton of information.

Oh, and I see you've already met out pet troll JBJ.

 

[Bebeslut]

Glad to have another author around.

 

[Boxlicker101]

Hi, jrinka, and welcome to the AH. I read your story and left a comment, but I want to add more here.

For a stroke story, I thought you had too much narration at the beginning and not enough description of the sex acts themselves. You should try to paint a picture of what is happening so readers can easily put themselves in your place.

All in all, it was okay. As JBJ said, don't quit your day job, because you won't get paid anything here, but we write for the fun of it, and I can see you enjoyed posting here, so that's the main thing.

 

[allusive1]

I like your story. I thought it was sweet -- and kinda kinky -- Japanese massage and all.

I personally prefer a story that has some story to it and is not just a 'wham-bam-thankyou-ma'me' stroke story. I did NOT think it was boring.

For a first story, I think it's actually quite good. I do agree that more detailed description of the sex would make it a more satisfying read.

Thanks for submitting after all these years.

 

[kromen]

Welcome to the AH.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Welcome to the AH and writing. You'll find some good and helpful people here. Also a ton of information.

Oh, and I see you've already met out pet troll JBJ.

What TEX means is, everyone gets a plastic trophy and no one's writing is special.

 

[TxRad]

What TEX means is, everyone gets a plastic trophy and no one's writing is special.

If ya can't play nice, then you're going to have to sit in the corner again. And no, you can't take your little plastic trophy with you.

 

[lovecraft68]

Happy New Year to everyone.

I've been lurking on this site as a reader for over a decade, I think, and I resolved that this year I would finally start writing and posting. I work in entertainment, and I guess I always saw this site as a guilty pleasure to enjoy but not participate in. Now I'm getting a little older, and... fuck it. If I feel like writing erotica, I'm going to do it.

So my first story is finally up. I started small, but I'm already trying to figure out what my next will be. If anyone takes the time to read it, I hope you enjoy.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511678

Welcome aboard! Good start, needs a little work, but the potential is there and if anyone's first story was their best story it would all be downhill from there and what fun would that be? Most importantly you broke the ice and will gain some confidence and keep going.
P.s. ignore the ZZZZZZZZZ comment, I've been writing on here for a few months and most people are pretty supportive unless you get cocky (or discuss religion or politics)

 

[Boxlicker101]

What TEX means is, everyone gets a plastic trophy and no one's writing is special.

Hey, I've never gotten a trophy of any kind. All I've ever gotten were gift certificates from Amazon and money.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Hey, I've never gotten a trophy of any kind. All I've ever gotten were gift certificates from Amazon and money.

Well bucko I intend to fix the problem

 

[Zeb_Carter]

If ya can't play nice, then you're going to have to sit in the corner again. And no, you can't take your little plastic trophy with you.

Tx, he never got a trophy 'cuz he never posted a story here.

 

[estragon]

My first story got mediocre scores, but praise from Grand Master dweaver999, so I didn't care what the trolls (who gave me low scores but didn't bother to comment) had to say. Keep writing, even if the trolls bomb you. For so they did to the prophets before you....

 

[Bebeslut]

Tx, he never got a trophy 'cuz he never posted a story here.

If y'all would stop paying attention to him, he'd go away.

 

[Zeb_Carter]

If y'all would stop paying attention to him, he'd go away.

So you think...he likes hearing himself talk, mostly about himself, so he really doesn't need an audience.

 

[TxRad]

If y'all would stop paying attention to him, he'd go away.

He's got nowhere else to go. He's been tossed off a couple of forums with moderators already and he can't hang with the big dogs on the GB. So we're stuck with him.