Massacre State Asylum OOC Thread

uses the pouncing of Zy as a distraction to allow her to pocket a few cookies
 
Just popping by on my phone to say that was quite possibly your best post yet Nina! Fucking incredible! Small critique, watch your tenses cause you're flipping between present and past a fair bit.
And i have almost all my threads done and saved on my comp for my return which i hope will be at least wirelessly within the next two weeks ladies! Catch you all then!
:kiss: thanks Minxball

Thanks for letting me know about the tenses, much appreciated.
 
LOVE ME SOME CRAZY SIXXY!!

Regarding tense issues
I do that all the time in first person narratives, sometimes in third. I like the feel of it. But yah, its a rule I break intentionally (usually)
 
This thread keeps me entertained and the women are hot...no wonder I come back to read again and again. Not even to play catch up, just to read the flow and enjoy it...
 
ok, fine, who the hell is up now????
DON'T MAKE ME COME OVER THERE AND KICK YOUR ASS INTO THE WALL SO YOU ARE STUNNED AND CAN'T KEEP ME FROM GROPING YOU UNTIL YOU ARE A WRITHING PUDDLE OF THIS THREAT STARTED OUT A LITTLE BETTER THAN THIS OOPS!
 
Um Vail? My love?

You're up.

Since Niri hasn't posted...

So this one woman ass kicking, puddle making thing? Can I sell tickets?
 
Um Vail? My love?

You're up.

Since Niri hasn't posted...

So this one woman ass kicking, puddle making thing? Can I sell tickets?

IS NOT MY FAULT!
I was waiting on Niri (apparently)
OK, will get to work.
After my self-flagellation.
I hate when I have to do this...
 
Sorry girls, I've just been really busy the last few days, leaving me with almost no time.

I'll try and get posting today. :eek:
 
Post is up.

I did my best in making the different sides of her clear.
Keep in mind that this is the first time I've ever written a character like this, so I dunno how good it is compared to the others.
 
Niri, c'est magnifique!

Don't compare yourself to others, rather let their words influence your own. You'll find yourself on par with them. I am not saying you already aren't (cause you are) I just didn't want you to worry.

Vail! You're up sugar pants! *snicker*
 
Vail, what really can be said... you push us all, love.
(I secretly love it when I get to push back)
 
Vail, what really can be said... you push us all, love.
(I secretly love it when I get to push back)

I run double-time to try and make sure you don't get bored.
In heels.
On ice.
In a strong wind.
Covered in butter.
And pigeons. Lots of pigeons.
 
um... i think the asylum... kinda made her crack....

ummmmmm sweetie.... you dont neeeeeeed a white coat to write this.. ya know..


the post... pure fuck me darlin
 
Absolutely brilliant posts Niri~Wolf kin and Vail...Goddess of creepy, sexy villianous vixens...

Ya'll make me happy and freaked out and worried for my poor little Warden...*grins*

Or should I say, I don't really worry...mostly cuz my Warden is surrounded by purity!! *snorts laughter*
 
ouches.. ribs hurt... cant breath....
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purity...
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Those kind of delusions will earn ya a white coat...
 
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