New ways of descibing body parts

[jaxsteeples]

I want to find original new ways of describing things. When there is such a profusion of work then descriptions of nipples, pricks, asses and everything else is bound to get naturally duplicated perhaps to the point of cliche. Metaphor, simile, allusion.

I was trying to describe an anus- One I came up with was 'a tight whirlpool '. I'm not sure if it hits the mark or if its too flowery. I also thought of using the word 'slucking', but its not a recognized word, and may be over descriptive.

I came across some wonderful allusions to raspberries for nipples in a poem about two first time lesbians who are on a fruit picking holiday.

There's got to be a whole load of this out there in your imagination and it would serve as an inspiration to us.

 

[Sicilian24]

Exotic fruits and colors are very descriptive for poetry use. I also like using alliterations to really drive the message home. There are so many possibilites for creative writing, you just have to imagine it and write it in words that can be understanding yet still holds merit.

 

[jaxsteeples]

Yes , but why are some descriptions more erotically charged than others. I think visually and have to 'translate' everything to language. Not everybody thinks like this and maybe they respond more to
direct description and context. I'm a big fan of Sappho's poetry

He must feel blooded with the spirit of a god
to sit opposite you and listen, and reply,
to your talk, your laughter, your touching,
breath-held silences. But what I feel, sitting here
and watching you, so stops my heart and binds
my tongue that I can’t think what I might say
to breach the aureole around you there.
It’s as if someone with flint and stone had sparked*
a fire that kindled the flesh along my arms
and smothered me in its smoke-blind rush.
Paler than summer grass, it seems
I am already dead, or little short of dying

*The original translations described the sensation as 'a delicate fire running under my skin.'

 

[PandoraGlitters]

I'll be honest--I often have a preference for frank terms. Vagina, Penis, etc. I appreciate the need to be novel, though, in metaphorical approach. I look forward to hearing what others might have called stuff. The silliest one I've used was pink taco of delight.

 

[PandoraGlitters]

So beautiful. Thank you, Jax.

Yes , but why are some descriptions more erotically charged than others. I think visually and have to 'translate' everything to language. Not everybody thinks like this and maybe they respond more to
direct description and context. I'm a big fan of Sappho's poetry

He must feel blooded with the spirit of a god
to sit opposite you and listen, and reply,
to your talk, your laughter, your touching,
breath-held silences. But what I feel, sitting here
and watching you, so stops my heart and binds
my tongue that I can’t think what I might say
to breach the aureole around you there.
It’s as if someone with flint and stone had sparked*
a fire that kindled the flesh along my arms
and smothered me in its smoke-blind rush.
Paler than summer grass, it seems
I am already dead, or little short of dying

*The original translations described the sensation as 'a delicate fire running under my skin.'

 

[jaxsteeples]

Nah that's not silly, it's kind of funny if used in a familiar way, or even ironic.

See I am remaining calm. Poetry calms me down. Breathe, in breathe out. ( Re first attempt at writing erotica)

 

[lubricant]

Exhausted, I taste
the stiff, whipped peaks
of her meringue—
these floating islands,
airy, light, and sweet.

But they're still a touch too, too vanilla,
so I begin again to beat.

 

[Sicilian24]

Check my poem out... is this the kind of stuff you're looking for?

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=485409

 

[jaxsteeples]

I think this is a very accurately descriptive poem but I can't see any description of body parts. 'Body parts actually sounds forensic if you repeat it, doesn't it ? I'm thinking about original and new descriptions. My mind goes back to when I first discovered sex . For while hills looked like breasts, cornfields were inviting sensual places to walk with my girlfriend, both of us naked from the waist down letting the stalks run between our legs, haystacks: you could imagine if you lay in them they would be softly breathing. In fact the whole world seemed to be softly breathing. Bees in flowers, fruit, vegetables, it was endless. Then there were the pots in our parents houses which became symbolisms, celebrating holding and containing transformed into much more than utensils. Towers, church steeples, baguettes in fact anything 'erect' just made so much more sense from a sexual perspective than as things in themselves.

What I'm trying to say is if you look at things from a sexual perspective and then turn these into descriptions it might that you could find original ways of describing a nipple, a pussy a penis. At least it's one element of an approach

As I've suggested with so much erotic writing available it is possible that traditional methods of description, may through repetition eventually become cliched or at least loose their power
to stimulate.

 

[darkerdreamer]

Mouth - taco vortex
Stomach - taco transmogrifier
Ass - taco disposal unit
Toilet - hapless victim

 

[nerk]

I just want to come down in favor of using more or less invisible nouns, and letting the particularity of the object in question come from adjectives, verbs, character's reactions, etc.

Rather than saying
"My steeple of love towered over her."

I would say.
"My divinely inspired cock rained its blessings down on her."
or
"'Sweet Jesus,' she gasped, as I thrust into her burning bush. 'That's why they call you Goliath!'"



yes, in a handbasket.

 

[mynameisben]

As a true poet, I prefer to draw upon the majesty of nature to subtly allude to Romance's ultimate unveiling...

Her Grand Canyon gaped before him,
Ere she summoned forth his Vesuvian girth
Whence he Pompeii'ed her jizz-guzzling cunt
Amidst the daffodils pearled by gloaming's first kiss.

 

[PandoraGlitters]

You guys are funny! this thread

 

[champagne1982]

As a true poet, I prefer to draw upon the majesty of nature to subtly allude to Romance's ultimate unveiling...

Her Grand Canyon gaped before him,
Ere she summoned forth his Vesuvian girth
Whence he Pompeii'ed her jizz-guzzling cunt
Amidst the daffodils pearled by gloaming's first kiss.

Well sure, but never underestimate the powerful bonds of physical laws.

The Attraction

Two bodies of unequal
mass gravitate,
a collision inevitable.

 

[cathrynb]

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[UnderYourSpell]

Tipping the velvet is the slang for two ladies tasting each other but very descriptive I think