Overdone

[Defluer]

The other day I was reading a story and of course it began as a lot of stories do. Maybe exclusively when the perspective of the story is feminine point of view. Maybe this is actually two Overdone aspects of stories wrapped in one. But here it is. The fact that the woman has to look in a mirror for her physical description to be revealed. The second part is this is always when she is naked so has to be before or after a shower. Looking at herself and rating her sexual appeal. If one looked at it with a certain frame of mind it might be a mental signal that she is looking for some new sexual encounter that would be story worthy. Like looking at herself and wondering or judging at her beauty is the precursor to her initiating or allowing herself to evolve to the next level of sexual being.

I don't know it just seems Overdone to me. If I ever encounter a girlfriend who is right out of the shower and staring at herself in the mirror I'd have to act immediately. Calling over her friend for us to have a threesome or following her around so she doesn't proceed to go fucking the football team or something.

If there was others I should be have them at the top of my mind but this one seems to be filling that void. What others are there?

 

[slyc_willie]

Hell, everything's been overdone, especially on a site like Lit with half a million stories posted. Some devices are used more than others, and I know I've used my fair share. Maybe more so. In fact, I have at least one of those self-assessing mirror shots in my stories. It's convenient. Okay, and lazy. But it's also a familiar hook for readers.

The one overdone thing, though, is measurements. I've been guilty of that in the past, before I realized that erotic writing wasn't torn from the pages of Penthouse Forum.

 

[sadangel]

Hell, everything's been overdone, especially on a site like Lit with half a million stories posted. Some devices are used more than others, and I know I've used my fair share. Maybe more so. In fact, I have at least one of those self-assessing mirror shots in my stories. It's convenient. Okay, and lazy. But it's also a familiar hook for readers.

The one overdone thing, though, is measurements. I've been guilty of that in the past, before I realized that erotic writing wasn't torn from the pages of Penthouse Forum.

I'm thankful that I was forwarned to not use measurements, to learn to use words to describe. I almost made that mistake in my story I had submitted. Thank God for friends to warn me away from that one!

 

[slyc_willie]

I'm thankful that I was forwarned to not use measurements, to learn to use words to describe. I almost made that mistake in my story I had submitted. Thank God for friends to warn me away from that one!

Well, I never took the, "She was a stunning redhead, 5'7" and 120 pounds, 44DDD-22-34 with long flowing hair and a mouth that could suck golf balls through a garden hose . . ." approach. And thank God. I can't even imagine what a monstrosity a woman like that would resemble!

 

[sadangel]

Well, I never took the, "She was a stunning redhead, 5'7" and 120 pounds, 44DDD-22-34 with long flowing hair and a mouth that could suck golf balls through a garden hose . . ." approach. And thank God. I can't even imagine what a monstrosity a woman like that would resemble!

Okay. You made me laugh.

 

[_Lynn_]

Okay. You made me laugh.

He's good at that.

 

[sadangel]

He's good at that.

I see that!

 

[slyc_willie]

Okay. You made me laugh.

Gotcha.

He's good at that.

 

[Safe_Bet]

"She was a stunning redhead, 5'7" and 120 pounds, 44DDD-22-34 with long flowing hair and a mouth that could suck golf balls through a garden hose . . ."

Actually I weigh only 110 lbs...

 

[_Lynn_]

Actually I weigh only 110 lbs...

. . . and a 48DDD -22-34

 

[slyc_willie]

Actually I weigh only 110 lbs...

*snerk*

. . . and a 48DDD -22-34

. . . who can only walk on her hands because she's so top-heavy.

 

[_Lynn_]

*snerk*



. . . who can only walk on her hands because she's so top-heavy.

. . . and they flop into her face, making it difficult to see where she's going. But eureka! With a little water on the floor, she can use them for mops!

 

[voluptuary_manque]

I think I had possibly two or three stories up on the board that mentioned cup size before Jenny took me seriously to task for it. Hey, how was I supposed to know? It was suggested that it was a good idea in the Hints to New Authors . . .

 

[_Lynn_]

I think I had possibly two or three stories up on the board that mentioned cup size before Jenny took me seriously to task for it. Hey, how was I supposed to know? It was suggested that it was a good idea in the Hints to New Authors . . .

I don't remember using cup size in the beginning, though I might have. No way do I want to go back and read those horrible pieces now. When I think of the grammar, punctuation, typos, and other errors though . . . that makes me cringe today.

 

[sr71plt]

Even the discussion of the "description by means of mirror" is overdone--hasn't been more than a couple of weeks since it was last hashed over here.

 

[slyc_willie]

I think I had possibly two or three stories up on the board that mentioned cup size before Jenny took me seriously to task for it. Hey, how was I supposed to know? It was suggested that it was a good idea in the Hints to New Authors . . .

Potato, potahto. Jenny was just one of a dozen voices concerned with such things. Same for the author of the Hints to New Authors. Still, I agree with her. Just pointing out that there are always different perspectives.

I don't remember using cup size in the beginning, though I might have. No way do I want to go back and read those horrible pieces now. When I think of the grammar, punctuation, typos, and other errors though . . . that makes me cringe today.

Never call them "horrible." They were steps. Rungs on the ladder.

 

[slyc_willie]

Even the discussion of the "description by means of mirror" is overdone--hasn't been more than a couple of weeks since it was last hashed over here.

Yeah, but everything old to us is always new to someone else. How many threads did you read before you started posting? I think I read two.

 

[_Lynn_]

Potato, potahto. Jenny was just one of a dozen voices concerned with such things. Same for the author of the Hints to New Authors. Still, I agree with her. Just pointing out that there are always different perspectives.



Never call them "horrible." They were steps. Rungs on the ladder.

All right, then what if I said they were a disaster?

I think my ladder began underground too. So it had extra rungs on it.

 

[slyc_willie]

All right, then what if I said they were a disaster?

I think my ladder began underground too. So it had extra rungs on it.

And it has a firmer foundation.

Hey you can't beat yourself up while I'm around . . . .

 

[_Lynn_]

And it has a firmer foundation.

Hey you can't beat yourself up while I'm around . . . .

No, I see that.

All right, then what if I said that the first pieces had a few good points to them?

 

[voluptuary_manque]

That's kind of my approach. My current stories are less bad than the early ones. There seems to be less sex in them, too. I must be aging . . .

 

[slyc_willie]

No, I see that.

All right, then what if I said that the first pieces had a few good points to them?

Much better. And very true. I was there, after all, you remember.

That's kind of my approach. My current stories are less bad than the early ones. There seems to be less sex in them, too. I must be aging . . .

Funny how that happens, isn't it? First you explode on the scene with raw passion and virility, impressing the masses in the audience. Then . . . you look for a niche. Or something like that.

I've noticed that I now tend to introduce sex scenes in the middle of the action, sort of like a fade-in in a relatively intelligent B movie. I sometimes have to force myself to begin with the seduction and fade out after the act is finished.

 

[sr71plt]

Yeah, but everything old to us is always new to someone else. How many threads did you read before you started posting? I think I read two.

A year's worth. I'm slow getting into the water.

 

[_Lynn_]

Much better. And very true. I was there, after all, you remember.



Funny how that happens, isn't it? First you explode on the scene with raw passion and virility, impressing the masses in the audience. Then . . . you look for a niche. Or something like that.

I've noticed that I now tend to introduce sex scenes in the middle of the action, sort of like a fade-in in a relatively intelligent B movie. I sometimes have to force myself to begin with the seduction and fade out after the act is finished.

That's something I won't forget.

I struggle to write a sex scene at all. They never sound right anymore. Each time I try, the story is forced, rough, and has a cheap feel to it, so I pitch it. Now I just write the genre that works for me, not what I think I should be doing for someone's approval.

 

[slyc_willie]

A year's worth. I'm slow getting into the water.

Well, then you only have yourself to blame.

(Honestly, I can't say I'm surprised you took so long to jump in)

That's something I won't forget.

I struggle to write a sex scene at all. They never sound right anymore. Each time I try, the story is forced, rough, and has a cheap feel to it, so I pitch it. Now I just write the genre that works for me, not what I think I should be doing for someone's approval.

I look for a reason to describe the sex to begin with. Once that's established, writing the sex itself isn't too hard, although, as I said, I now tend to truncate it a little.